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Reviewer: Saydonee (Signed) · Date: September 13, 2011 02:43 PM · On: 12: Deadline

love that he could he hear her while they were makin love :)

Reviewer: lyinglamb (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2009 05:18 AM · On: 12: Deadline

OK, it's been forever, but I'm back because I really couldn't read these all without reviewing. I couldn't remember my password to leave reviews and they wouldn't send it to me!

The date is a cool date, but if I were Bella, I wouldn't have agreed so easily to four months without sex with my HUSBAND! You're not supposed to want to leave the house when you're newlyweds. Especially when you're husband is a supernatural supermodel.

Author's Response:
Jesse! I'm so glad you're back! I was hoping my two month pause hadn't scared you off!

Yes, I know...the date is really far off....and with Edward! But don't you worry dear. I won't really make you wait that long!

Thanks for coming back to me!

Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 01:40 AM · On: 12: Deadline

I really love the comparison Bella makes to experiencing the heights of passion and pleasure with Edward to her forays into being an adrenaline junkie. The dangerous acts leading possibly to death. It's also interesting to note that the power of orgasm is often compared to as "the little death". Death and Sex. Hand in hand. Lovely tie in with your dialogue and inner workings of the minds of these two. I'm really impressed.

The date and reasons behind it are so Edward. Very good call.

Author's Response:
Le petit mort! Oh thank you so much for clearing that up! I've had a friend in my department that uses that saying constantly and I've never understood what he was refering to!

Yes, I suppose that the only things that I've ever been able to compare really good sex to has always been a near death experiance. Could be why I'm an adrenaline junkie!

Do you think that Bella would be able to accept four months as a newlywed without sex? That had been by biggest doubt in this whole story so far!

Did I tell you exactly how much you've helped me...Really, you are motivation in it's purest form!

Reviewer: juliet233 (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2009 01:59 PM · On: 12: Deadline

*giggles*: “I love you,” I sighed resignedly, and then added, “Damn it.”

I love that! And I'm glad that seeing Bella's thoughts has made Edward realize that they really are supposed to be together forever and he's apparently okay with changing her now :)

Author's Response:
Yeah...that is a bit quick though, isn't it?

I must actually thank you for helping me see that! I think that may be one of my touch ups! I don't know if that was intentional, but really...thank you!

Reviewer: k89g (Anonymous) · Date: March 04, 2009 12:48 AM · On: 12: Deadline

More More More!

That's all :P

No, in all seriousness I love this story and love the idea you've come up with of him wanting to change her on that date. Looking forward to see what happens next!

Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm hoping that more, more more comes out sometime this week. I hate having writer's block!

Reviewer: hapillyeverafter (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2009 07:58 AM · On: 12: Deadline

pretty good...i think i like it..... i need to see where its going first but i like it so far

Author's Response:
Thank you...This is my alternate Breaking Dawn story, and in the end it seems to be turning out to be about the length of Breaking Dawn! Sorry if it's taking too long to develope the plot, but I figure that is how Stephanie Meyer works, so... in her honor! Thanks for your patience!

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