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Reviewer: Ash7586 (Signed) · Date: March 15, 2010 04:01 AM · On: The Stables
This would make a great multi-chapter story.
Reviewer: RoseSkye (Signed) · Date: October 06, 2009 07:12 AM · On: The Stables
You should make this a story/novel. I would be interesting to read the story line progression.
Reviewer: elemirehum (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2009 01:44 PM · On: The Stables
brill story bt i sooo wish u wud continue it, it looks like it could become really interesting =] x
Reviewer: RobwardLover (Signed) · Date: September 04, 2009 08:24 PM · On: The Stables
Hmm.... I know this is supposed to be a one-shot, but it would be rather intriguing to see if anything else happened after this. Maybe he keeps coming to her and then wants more outside the club environment? And why did he pick her? Just a thought...
Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2009 10:38 PM · On: The Stables
that was awesome. very interesting story i must say.
Reviewer: bspest04 (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2009 10:29 PM · On: The Stables
wow that was dirty and awesome!
Ever think about extending this story, it would be interesting to see where the characters go from here...
Reviewer: sweet_lp_girl (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2009 11:13 AM · On: The Stables
*pouts* only a one-shot? I want more!!!
Reviewer: eddielover92 (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2009 05:32 AM · On: The Stables
i think it would be really good if it was continued
Reviewer: melonburst05 (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 10:18 PM · On: The Stables
lol, I totally loved this. I think you should write more. Maybe not a whole story, but just another chapter or two would be awesome.
Reviewer: justfornow (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 09:35 PM · On: The Stables
WOW! That was kind of insane. Wonder if jobs like this actually exist! Anyway, are you going to turn this in a chapter story or maybe do this from Edward's POV?
Reviewer: HeavenDust (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 08:10 PM · On: The Stables
Oh God... is there any way you can continue this? I have to admit, I think I did have a dream like this (*cough* what dream, it's a fantasy) and it was sizzling. What a hot chapter... and one I think I'll come back to read again and again. Favorites!
Reviewer: vannaaaaheartsjacob (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 06:21 PM · On: The Stables
Haha, this was hot!
Lol maybe you should turn this into a series or something.
He comes back.
They meet outside of The Stables but he doesn't know who she is but she knows who he is when he tells her his name, haha.
Just an idea :)
Reviewer: codyaudrey (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 05:34 PM · On: The Stables
Really interesting concept, it was pretty hot!
Reviewer: jabare (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 05:26 PM · On: The Stables
Disturbing concept, but hot....
Reviewer: Tookie83 (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 05:00 PM · On: The Stables
that would be awesome if it was a little longer... a comeback lol
Reviewer: izziey (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:57 PM · On: The Stables
have to agree with goedwardgo. besides, the ladies should get their chance too. maybe a ladies night?
Reviewer: Shamatt (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:53 PM · On: The Stables
Are there really clubs out there like that? Sheltered life eisle 2
Reviewer: krisandrob (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:52 PM · On: The Stables
What a mind-blowing one-shot you should try and keep this one going!
Reviewer: GoEdwardGo (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:44 PM · On: The Stables
Oooooh, good and nasty! I can see why this is a one-shot...it would be "hard" to build a relationship from this beginning, lol. Just think, you could write another one shot about a similar club except this one could be set up for female customers in the same manner that this one is set up for men. Perhaps Edward works at the club and that's how he is paying for medical school or whatever. Bella and the girls could go visit that club and Bella could choose Edward...just exploring equal rights and all that, wink, wink.
Reviewer: elislyn (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:40 PM · On: The Stables
I may be the only one, but this seems like it was inspired by hentai. Nothing wrong with that... though the Bella having to service anonymous men who are not Edward does kind of squick me. Its an interesting fic though, so I will probably read more if you add to it.
Reviewer: DSCH (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:17 PM · On: The Stables
i would love to see this as a longer story! love the concept.
Sucky job to have, though....
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:13 PM · On: The Stables
Okay, Oh my Lord! Where the hell did you dream up this concept??!!! I think assmen all over the world would be drooling and erecting monuments to you literally!! LOL! Hot, okay, just hot!
Reviewer: cyndilu32 (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:10 PM · On: The Stables
this was good....maybe it should be a longer story
Reviewer: BUgrl (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:03 PM · On: The Stables
Very interesting... I'd love to see how they would evolve relationship wise outside of the club, but I think that might be a bit hard to expand on except for the additional visits of member number 2911.
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