Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 29: Protecting Virtue
OH COME ON!!! :) Sure sure- it's always something! :) NExt Chapter!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 08:40 PM · On: Chapter 28: Family
I think I found a flaw in the writing- Bella should still have red eyes- James saw them as Brown- but he has never seen her before... :) YAY back together!! NEXT CHAPTER :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I sometimes miss things like that. I'll correct it. Thanks for all your comments.
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 27: The Kiss that Said a Thousand Words
YAY!!!! NEXT CHAPTER! :)
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:56 PM · On: Chapter 26: Truth or Consequences
"losingest"? :) Ok....All I can Say is just grrr...Next Chapter :)
Author's Response: I knew it was wrong. But I thought "losingest" is something that a seventeen-year-old would say. Sometimes, if I think it's in character, I'll purposely do something wrong because I think it fits. But just for you, I changed it to something different. I could see it as Edward is too proper to say something that grammatically wrong, or he's seventeen and distraught, not really caring about his grammar. I changed it to something more proper.
I'm going backwards throught these. I read your final comment, and you said the sweetest thing about me becoming a writer. I hope I can do well enough to at least sell a few books. I have an idea for a fantasy novel that I am working on. I'll let you know how it goes.
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:45 PM · On: Chapter 25: Making up
I thought he was going to pick it out of Rose's head- that is what I was waiting for! but yay! He finally is on the right track! NEXT :)
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:33 PM · On: Chapter 24: Projects
YAY! *Clapping hands* Esme is awesome!! The whole Emmett walking in on parents was hilarious!!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:25 PM · On: Chapter 23: Spilling
Well at least Bella has somebody to talk too! Im glad the girls forced it out of her! :) NEXT
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:20 PM · On: Chapter 22: Arguments
I wonder how they are going to get it out of her! ....Good story so far! NExt!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:13 PM · On: Chapter 21: Bella Makes A Run For It
all I can sum up is- gggrrrrrrrr!! It was great! I love the story so far! NExt!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:04 PM · On: Chapter 20: Denali
THAT BITCH!!!!! phew ok- had to get it out of my system! :) REALLY GOOD!!! Next
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 06:57 PM · On: Chapter 19: The Worst Kind of Monster
Wow! I didn't even THINK of Him! Surprized and shocked!! GOOD!!! YAY ROYCE KING GOT WHAT HE DESERVED!! Good Story! Next :)
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 06:47 PM · On: Chapter 18: The Answer and the Solution
hmmmm I wonder who did that! The way it sounded it could have been any one of them- even though I would like to think it was Edward! REALLY GOOD - Next :)
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 06:35 PM · On: Chapter 17: Tales from the Crypt
FUNNY!! :D Good so far! Next!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 06:24 PM · On: Chapter 16: Bella Finally Wakes Up
YAY! The girls are taking it so well! I love it!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 10:04 AM · On: Chapter 15: What a Way to Wake Up
I must be a fast reader! Seemed really short again! This is the end for me tonight! :( I'll continue reading tomorrow!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 09:57 AM · On: Chapter 14: Fight and Flight
This chapter was short- and they reacted the way they should have....Was really good- just really short chapter ...Next :)
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 09:49 AM · On: Chapter 13: Quality of Life
GGRRRR- Great- now the girls are going to think that they were the ones to run them off the road and then have an excuse to change them! GAH!
As you can tell- REally good so far!!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 09:38 AM · On: Chapter 12: The Choice
WOOOO- he has to change her- I wouldnt want to live that way!! HAS TOO!!! You have some short chapters :P alright nexxt!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 09:32 AM · On: Chapter 11: Aftermath
Wow- I'm kinda hoping that Bella doesnt have the best of life- that way he will change her- how malice of me!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 09:12 AM · On: Chapter 10: Addicted to Love
When you said Volvo all I could think of was Edward- I was freaking out- but then I read that they were in a different car! IT'S a really GOOD chapter!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 09:04 AM · On: Chapter 9: A Long Day
THAT IS A LOT BETTER OUT OF ROSE!!! YAY! Pretty good so far!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 08:39 AM · On: Chapter 8: Rookie Mistakes
I was thinking about this at the end- it's more of an edward to be telling jasper and emmett that its not good to have each class with the girls...but anyways- I love this Rose in this chapter- The last Chapter with Rose and Royce- Rose would have surely nailed him -consequences and all from parents.
Author's Response: Yeah, but that wouldn't fit the story. Emmett was the only one that got in good with his girl first. Jasper and Edward freaked their girls out, so this was how it had to be. I can see Emmett doing this, considering his success with Rose.
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 08:26 AM · On: Chapter 7: Notes
That what REALLY SWEET!! AWWW- I actually like it!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 08:09 AM · On: Chapter 6: Adonis the Perverted
I loved this chapter- Emmett was a lot better in this chapter- sounded like "emmett" - Good so far!
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 06, 2009 07:45 AM · On: Chapter 5: Mud Wrestling
I LOVED THE MUD FIGHT!!! Thanks for not sending Edward away!
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