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Reviewer: welshcakes68 (Signed) · Date: January 25, 2011 02:40 AM · On: Edward's Side

I didn't read the disclaimer so I was like, 'This sounds a hell of a lot like Speak'.lol. My bad. I'm with Edward, I don't really get why she forgave them all so quickly for blowing her off.

Also, one thing, when Bella was retelling the story, it felt a bit too descriptive for dialogue (personally). I felt something that descriptive would have just done better as a flashback or trimmed it down if you really wanted it as dialogue. That's my two cents anyway. Still going in the favourites.=]

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Reviewer: cbell (Signed) · Date: August 24, 2010 02:17 AM · On: Edward's Side

Sad beginning, beautiful ending.

Reviewer: mbellaandedwardm (Signed) · Date: December 30, 2009 01:07 PM · On: Edward's Side

loved it, it was perffect

usually i'm not into crossovers but i loved this one

i know i'm late in reviewing and reading this but i loved it

i know your next story will be a sucess

well until next time mbellaandedwardm

Reviewer: jdf123 (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2009 11:02 AM · On: Edward's Side

awsome story!

Reviewer: maria1991 (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 05:03 AM · On: Edward's Side

i love it.even though it's sad what happended to her it's beautiful how things turn out in the end!!i love how edward treated her and bella was so brave.an amazing one shot.nicely done!!

Reviewer: Angel Wings 113 (Signed) · Date: August 29, 2009 06:06 PM · On: Edward's Side

The idea of this story is great! the way you reversed Edward's and Bella's roles were fantastic.

Now for the constructive critisism-
In SM's view, Bella wouldn't be very open about what happened to her. So it would probably take a few months for her to even having full on conversations with him. And I don't think it would be in her character to let her old friends who have abandoned her about the incident. You cought on to Edwards personality with out a hitch, so feel good about that. Not many people can get him right.

just some tips to help with your future works. I hope to read more of your stuff soon!

Reviewer: tri (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2009 04:01 AM · On: Edward's Side

awwwwwwww!

Reviewer: Blacklily (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2009 06:54 AM · On: Edward's Side

This is unrealistic. There is no way people would be so stupid and cruel. But appart from unrealistic, it is a good story, good try. I am looking forward to another.

Reviewer: juniperwafted (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2009 10:51 AM · On: Edward's Side

I enjoyed this - thank you !

However, to be completely honest I found the portrayal of the 'friends' to be inconsistent as they repeatedly displayed a low level of emotional / empathetic maturity (for example: making assumptions about their good friend and then abandoning her, ostrasising Edward when he befriended the outcast and laughing at Edward when he told them about his virginity) and then distinctly more mature advise for Edward... it feels incogruous. It is not just because these four characters usually portrayed more loyal and mature but that, within the framework you created, they seem dualistic in a way that doesn't make much sense. Of course, given the same examples of their fickleness and lack of any characteristics denoting 'true friendship' I wonder at either Edward or Bella wanting to make any effort to regain such a spoty friendship; let alone trusting those who had shown themselves very unworthy of trust with a very emotionally sensitive event, one that had caused her to be silent for more than a year. So while I think it was a good story - perhaps in future a deeper examination of character motivation would be beneficial.

Reviewer: Robsten123 (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2009 10:44 AM · On: Edward's Side

beautiful story! i love the book speak and it combined with twilight makes it like 10x better! great job!

Reviewer: Juvarni (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2009 08:59 AM · On: Edward's Side

This is amazing! It made me laugh at some points and very nearly made me cry at others, and I loved it! :-) great work!

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