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Reviewer: StupidShinyVolvo17 (Signed) · Date: July 07, 2010 04:21 AM · On: Chapter 6

I loveee this story; please update soon :]

Reviewer: cranberryblue (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 06:31 AM · On: Chapter 6

I really love this story-- it's gritty, emotionally charged, and real.

Thank you for writing it.

I get Bella's point of view and I also get Edwards. The characters are well done, and even though Bella is the way she is, you understand why.

See you next chapter :)

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2009 04:29 AM · On: Chapter 6

I'm not sure I get why Edward is still interested! Bella did act extremely strange and rude. I get that she was surprised, but to keep it up like that was wierd. So, what is Edward's motivation?

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 21, 2009 04:20 AM · On: Chapter 5

Bella is truly alone. She can't let anyone in because then she will have to face her true self. She really wants someone to just force their way through her barriers. Will she find that someone?

Reviewer: bethc_88 (Signed) · Date: September 13, 2009 05:05 PM · On: Chapter 6

Bella definitely has some issues... luckily, I'm an angst whore, so I'm sticking around to see what they are... good times... keep up the good work...

Reviewer: freshonlybakery (Signed) · Date: September 10, 2009 03:17 PM · On: Chapter 6

I love your version of Edward and Bella, they seem so real!

It's written well and it seems like an original plot, I can't wait to see what happens next! More pleeease!

xx

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2009 02:07 PM · On: Chapter 4

Boy does he have it bad! Almost obsessive. Can't wait to see how he handles the information gathering!

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2009 01:55 PM · On: Chapter 3

So Bella is crude and jaded, but seriously after the life she's led so far? Can't really blame her. Now, if nice, well mannered, all sorts of caring Edward Cullen started to look after her maybe things would be different?

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2009 08:47 AM · On: Chapter 2

Now that is a true family tragedy! Of course, the guilt must have been insufferable! It's easy to hide an eating disorder, especially if you are in college!

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2009 08:35 AM · On: Chapter 1

Bella is one poor, messed up lady! I thought the worse that was going to happen was the eating disorder (which is awful), but then you add in negligent mother, school bullying, and repeated rape. It's a wonder she's not addicted to drugs and alcohol too. But then, this is only chapter one. Reading on....

Reviewer: pippyXYZ (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2009 12:50 AM · On: Chapter 6

LOVE IT. I see you went for my suggestion to make her more angry. I loved how it was going so well, then like a drop on a dime she turns bitchy and suspicious. Great job. Now Edward has something to look forward to. The pursuit in getting Bella to go out witrh him. Her fiesty side will give him a challenge. Because doesn't most guys LOVE the challenge?

Anyway, keep the magic flowing... and update soon.

~Shani

Reviewer: Aille (Signed) · Date: September 05, 2009 11:06 AM · On: Chapter 6

Interesting visit... Tanya is still a bitch. But Bella, although I know she's got problems, I'm surprised by they way she reacted at first. Of course once she found out he works with eating disorders... then I can understand the bitch ness that is going on in her mind.

Reviewer: nicoleyoo (Signed) · Date: September 05, 2009 02:22 AM · On: Chapter 6

looove it,

keeep it coming

Reviewer: MarathonKeyGirl (Signed) · Date: September 05, 2009 02:18 AM · On: Chapter 6

I can definitely see Bella's point here, but she should've caved halfway into her rant. Maybe.

Reviewer: shyhorse (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2009 01:56 AM · On: Chapter 5

oooh - that's pretty dark and twisty! excited to see where you're going with this :) can't wait for more :)

Reviewer: pippyXYZ (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2009 12:35 AM · On: Chapter 5

Mmmm....so sad. Bella is so controlled by her demons. She is so broken. It's going to be so hard when Edward comes into her world. But he'll probably get through to her wayyy better than Jazz will. I can't wait to see Edwards reaction when he finds out.

Your doing such a good job conveying Bella's emotions. I think she needs to be a bit more desperate and raging. Lashing out more. Because when you haven't eaten something your patience is really short. I know at times when I'm hungry I atart to feel a bit more pissed. So a bit more angst would really show her desperation to fight her conflicting feelings.

Keep going, because you are probably helping someone with this story.

~Shani

Reviewer: olympic1340 (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 03:15 PM · On: Chapter 5

I really love this story... I can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: sagewoman (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 10:45 AM · On: Chapter 1

ok this is the first time i have written a less than positive review, but this is driving me crazy, "cursed to suck"?!!! and because of her MOTHERS eating disorder??? every time i read it it just makes me scream and because of that i wont even try to read your story.

Reviewer: Edwardia Maven (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 10:28 AM · On: Chapter 5

I think it's great that you're riting abt the eating disorders and hoefully it willput ppl off bingeing themselves x

Reviewer: pippyXYZ (Signed) · Date: August 23, 2009 01:51 PM · On: Chapter 4

I'm still loving your story. Edward is going to have a time trying to convince Bella to go with him. She has such low selfesteem. But this is getting good and poor Edward hopes of marriage right away will be dashed. It's going to be a long road with Bella. Gaining weight for pregnancy will be a huge challenge. Or will carrying life help her to control that urge?

Reviewer: elindsay524 (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2009 01:44 PM · On: Chapter 4

Like the story line. It caught my interst. Keep it up. I like the differences from the other stories I have read.

Reviewer: pippyXYZ (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 05:50 AM · On: Chapter 3

Wow!!! I guess being hungry does make you angry.LOL No, I'm being silly. Anyway, I thought you were going to have the old lady become some mentor for Bella. You know showing her how thigs use to be and helping her to feel she was worth more than what she felt. Old values and sharing her life lessons.Oh well, at least Edward got to meet her and so the love story begins.

Can't wait to read your next chapter. Edward is going to have his hands full with Bella being so harsh on herself and others. Update soon

~Shani

Reviewer: cherry (Signed) · Date: August 01, 2009 04:09 AM · On: Chapter 3

i LIKE THIS FOC MUCH.iT'S REALLY GOOD!

Reviewer: iced blood (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 04:06 AM · On: Chapter 2

that's so sad what happened to his sister.

Reviewer: pippyXYZ (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 01:13 AM · On: Chapter 1

Wow, I first clicked on this story thinking it was this other story with the same name. But then I read the first sentence and went back to the most recent page to read what this story was about. So of course I found it wasn't the same,but I decided to read it anyway. I couldn't stop reading it and was shocked to find out what it was about. Then to read that Phil rapes Bella and does it over and over, took me aback. Bella was scared out of her mind, but was more worried about her bulimia. Thank God I have never had that issue. Although I have been skinny my whole life. Food and my weight was never a huge issue to me. I guess I'm one of the lucky ones. No one that I knew ever made a big deal about it. I was never tortured at school either. Again thank God.

Your story is really interesting and I'm going to continue to read it. I want to see how Edward will help Bella. Continue to write because this story is good and could help someone. I hope that you can get more reviews and recommendations.

~Shani

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