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Reviewer: no sleep (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2010 06:21 PM · On: Chapter 2: Test Fire

I love this story. Please update. I never expected to like Twilight.

Reviewer: Wilynn (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2009 10:13 AM · On: Chapter 2: Test Fire

Amazing job on this second chapter. By the way, I like to review and rate each chapter, unless I am too tired to write, then I will at least rate.

I thought you took the right amount of time for Edward to prepare to be back in society. It was not easy and he had to work hard at it, but then Edward has an enormous amount of control and a very strong will. He tends to achieve his goals.

Write what you have interest in. Don't even bother with something that bores you. I would love to read about all of the major story points from Edward's POV, but I would also like to see little things, like when Edward first starts to feel like Carlisle is family and when he starts to think of him as a father figure. Obviously, Carlisle is already thinking about one day seeing Edward as a son. I just love their relationship and would love to see the evolution of it. Same for Esme...after the shock of adding another member to the group (I won't say "family" yet), how does Edward see that relationship developing. When does he first see her as a mom? I imagine you can have all sorts of fun with Rose and Emmitt, then again with Alice and Jasper. There are so many holes that should be filled in. I would love to see the time of the treaty, Edward's time away from home (did he feel justified in seeking out the bad guys? for how long? what started to make him change his mind, even though these people deserved to be taken out of society? How was he received when he came home and how did he feel about seeing Carlisle and Esme after his time away?) Yes, the Denali years and what he went through with Tanya, for sure!

Like I said before, I will read as long as you have something to write!

Reviewer: Wilynn (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2009 09:21 AM · On: Slow Burn

This was brilliant! You channel Edward better than anyone else I have read. I love how you did your research on the slang of his time. I hope you will keep this one going for more than a few chapters. I will read it as long as you write it.

By the way, you do a great job writing Carlisle as well. I love them both!

There are so many holes in the story and I love to fine someone who can fill them in. I especially love the relationships between Edward and Carlisle, Edward and Alice, and of course, Edward and Bella. I guess you can see how much I love Edward!

Reviewer: modyog (Signed) · Date: October 11, 2009 05:36 AM · On: Chapter 2: Test Fire

I am enjoying your story very much. My preference for reading tends to be of history, biography and autobiography.

 

This part of their lives is of great interest to me.

Thanks!

Reviewer: emcee1014 (Signed) · Date: August 15, 2009 08:49 PM · On: Chapter 2: Test Fire

Oh...how many of us want the blanks filled in. I really enjoy most anything written from Edward POV and/or Carlisle POV, especially pre-twilight.

I enjoyed your first two chapters and will patiently wait for Chapter 3.

Reviewer: Temporary Exile (Signed) · Date: August 06, 2009 05:07 PM · On: Chapter 2: Test Fire

Great Chapter.  I like that this story is being told.  Cant wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: twimomof4girls (Signed) · Date: August 06, 2009 05:52 AM · On: Slow Burn

a great read!

Reviewer: Katiebear89 (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 10:58 AM · On: Slow Burn

terrific work keep it up, i'll definantly read the next chapter!

 



Author's Response: Awesome, Thanks! The next chapter is up now.

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 04:39 AM · On: Slow Burn

Your writing style is fantastic! I could *feel* what Edward's emotions were. I would love to see your next chapter ... Go For It!

 



Author's Response:

Thanks! Another chapter is posted now.

Reviewer: Beth818 (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 11:00 PM · On: Slow Burn

This is a really cool chapter! I like this idea of Edward's realization that he can read minds and of his first hunt...I once had a dream that I was raped by five guys and left to die and guess who found me! Robert Pattinson! He gave me his coat and brought me to the hospital. And then right when I was about to kiss him I woke up! It was so real and I was so mad that it wasn't!



Author's Response:

Glad you liked the chapter. That sounds like quite a dream. RPattz is awfully pretty.

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