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Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 05:20 PM · On: Patesco
It's refreshing to see Rose as such apositive character. Not only angry and stubborn, but energetic and fulfilled too. I loved the conversation with Edward. She is a nice surprise.
Author's Response: Yeah, Rose & Charlie. They just ganged up on my psyche and decided to step out of their "normal" roles. I kind of like it though.
Again, thank you.
Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 05:05 PM · On: Assumptions
Honesty can suck. Lucky for Bella, that's not always the case. Thanks for making Charlie sweet and understanding instead of a gun-toting stock character.
I can't wait for Bella to meet Rose.
Author's Response: Ah, it's funny. I didn't sit down and think, "Hey, Charlie will be great, Mike will be stupid, etc....." Okay, that's off, yes, Mike is an imbecile. Kind of has to be for this to work. But, Charlie just came out being a good dad.....
Thank you!
Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:50 PM · On: Interim
Alright, I'm going to confess because I can't keep reading with immunity. I got sucked into your story and haven't reviewed yet. I feel like I'm not paying the piper when I do that. All the hard work you put in deserves some kind of acknowledgement. So, here it is and I'm hugely sorry for waiting.
I love that Edward can only hear Bella when (I'm assuming) she's too overwhelmed for her shield to be operative. Their meeting was dramatic, entirely fitting for someone as moody as Edward and everything one would expect from the world's greatest event-planner, Alice.
I can't wait to hear Rose's take on Bella.
Great job!!
Author's Response: gods, I laughed out right when I read this. I do the same thing though. Especially with the longer stories. It's hard to review each chapter. Sometimes I just save it for the end.
So happy to hear that you are enjoying my emo musing.....
Reviewer: Akelarre (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 04:14 PM · On: Obsession at First Sight
Love this chapter! I like the way this much mature Edward is handling the mate bond in such a difficult situation. I hope that Bella is not beyond repair and she allows the connection to flourish. He is much better than a ton of pills and alcohol for her!
Author's Response: Yes, Edward is much better for her than drugs & alcohol. She just doesn't know it yet!! Clarity will come. I promise. We're just not there yet.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review. Reviews make me smile.
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 03:34 PM · On: Obsession at First Sight
"Oh, it's you", he kissed my forehead, running slender fingers over my face. "Sleep Bella" and so I did. Edward is aknowledging that Bella is his mate and Bella is trying to deny her feelings. I love figment and his persistance. Maybe he can find a way to get her away from the imbecile.
Author's Response: I liked that bit. Made me smile to write it. A sweet moment for them. Clarity will come for Bella. Just not yet.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review. :)
Reviewer: PBJilly (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 02:23 PM · On: Obsession at First Sight
Damn Bella-she is so frustrating, not taking care of herself. Is it because she thinks she knows what's best, or does she really not care? Or, is she afraid to leave behind what works for her? I can't wait until Edward hangs around her more often-or will he continue to hide in the shadows for a while??? Good chapter from both points of view.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Yes, Bella is frustrating right now. It's not so much that she doesn't care or thinks that she knows what's best, it's more that she is in so much pain that she can't see her way through. Pain & Fear.
Sorry, can't answer that second bit yet. But, we will get to that.
I really appreciate you taking the time review!!
Reviewer: JaspersBrand (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 12:12 PM · On: Obsession at First Sight
Update…YEA! The threat of the pretty worked well! *Squee….you still call him figment! You know I love that!
Bella, Bella, Bella…she needs a hobby. One that doesn’t consist of pills and alcohol. Oh, I know….Edward!
Perfect… “I think it was the contrasts that made her more stunning than Rose or Dr. Cullen.” Alice is my fav female character and I adore her; personality and looks. She is the total package. “Like a Monet or Botticelli. The ocean or a sunset. Whatever calls to you. These two, in particular, called to me.” Beautiful!
Oh…a mating bond! I like that! And I like that Kate is there for him…so much better than Tonya! ““Edward, she's human, silent, broken and already has a lover. You really do have your work cut out for you here. Love the dry humor here! Stated so eloquently, but hilarious just the same.
Alice is so sneaky. I HEART HER TO DEATH!!!
Stalkward!!! He’s almost as awesome as Jealousward!
Loving this story. It’s so different from other stuff I read. You can tell work went into writing it too. I’m hoping more than 2 paragraphs are done on the next chapter chic! Your rockin it BB!
Author's Response: Edward as a hobby. Can he be my hobby too?
Well, Alice & Edward are the ones who stand out to me.
I think that the mating bond is significant, but, true love? Hmmm, eventuallly. Love is something that grows. Kate, yep, must write that backstory at some point.
Thank you sweetie. I so appreciate you taking the time to read and leave such thoughtful reviews. Truly means the world to me.
Reviewer: Uggy (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 12:06 PM · On: Obsession at First Sight
Really enjoying this story. Intrigued to see where it will lead to.
Author's Response: I'm so happy that you're enjoying it!! Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: FantasyMother (Signed) · Date: August 30, 2009 10:37 AM · On: Obsession at First Sight
Gah, I loved it! Edward's voice is absolutely perfect! As a matter of fact, all their voices are perfect! And the imagery is wonderful.
Keep it up, this is a wonderful story!
Author's Response: Hey there FM!! Just read The Deluded update! We seemed to have been thinking the same thing. Thank you so much!! I torment myself about the voices being clear (not just the ones inside my head). I've been lazy. I've got a start on Ch 8, but RL has been soooo insane the last week or two. Hope to get back to it this week.
Reviewer: iLikeTigerMilk (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2009 06:31 AM · On: Patesco
Wow, newly addicted fan here. :)
Great stuff, and very informative.
x
Author's Response: Goodness! Thank you so much. Ch 7 has been posted for validation so it should be up soon. I truly appreciate you taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: booksgalore (Signed) · Date: August 21, 2009 05:06 PM · On: Patesco
Loved your portrayal of Bella's denial and misdirection. Well done!
Books
Author's Response: I so appreciate you reading it and value your opinion. Thank you. M
Reviewer: goldenmeadow (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2009 09:12 AM · On: Patesco
Oh, heart failure. Right there at the end, bb, you killed me.
I can handle it though, very much ;).
I thought this was perfect deadpan Edward a la Margie:
“Christ, Rose, genetic inclination, how am I supposed to know?”
Edward. Stop being pedantic. Why do you think he's an imbecile? You know that I'm likely to agree with you completely. Most people come off as a few watts short to me. What has he done specifically that you would know about? You've just met Ms. Swan today.
“Can we discuss this later. I'm more interested in hearing what the imbecile has to say to Bella than expounding on his shortcomings. Alice hasn't shared her visions with you on this?” A quick shake of the head lets me know that Rose is more in the dark than I at this point. Joy. We'll hold Alice down later to extract every last whit of information. With Rose as an ally, success is a given. Rose in therapist mode is terrifying. She'll do anything for her patients. Lovely.
Frighteningly sad, fabulous chapter,
Rie~
Author's Response: I really liked that bit when I wrote it. That fact that you are taking time out of your incredibly busy life to read & review means so much to me. Ack, glad you're liking the sad, we're not going get happy for awhile yet. Wait....can I do happy? M~
Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2009 08:41 AM · On: Patesco
You have GOT to tell me what all that latin lingo means Twin. I failed latin miserably in Uni. It was an 8:30 AM class. Needless to say, I didn't make very many of them.
I'm so in love with your Rose. She's canon, but so much more depth. I know you are hard on yourself over her, but truly, there is no need 'cause she's perfect.
In fact, everything you are doing with these characters is impressive. You make being a beta easy peasy with writing this good!!!
xoxo
Twin
Author's Response: Aw, sweetie, you always make me smile. I'll send the translation in my email response. Thank you, thank you....
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 03:28 AM · On: Patesco
Mike may mean well but he's too self centered to look beyond the obvious with Bella and sees what he wants. Also the fact that he spent more than 2 seconds listening to Lauren tells me he's a complete fool. I love that Edward calls him an imbecile.
Rose is great. She obviously worked through her own problems and now wants to do the same for her patients. I love that Bella started to call Edward figment in front of her. I can't wait for Bella to see Edward again.
Author's Response: He does mean well & he is an imbecile. Ack......
So glad to hear that your still enjoying it. Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: SueBob (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 02:04 AM · On: Patesco
I flinched a bit as he took my hand. Minor revulsion from skin contact. Pushed it down and smiled a bit.
That just made my heart ache. I think everyone has a time when they don't want to be touched by anyone--not a random stranger or a significant other. She has to endure it every day, all day. It made me feel bleak. You are doing a wonderful job relaying her feelings of helplessness.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. It's truly encouraging to hear that the emotions I'm trying to write are translating! I really appreciate you taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: PBJilly (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 09:27 PM · On: Patesco
I am hoping Bella does not go home with Mike. I like how she sometimes feels safe and I actually like Rose as a nice person!
Jill
Author's Response: Thank you. I enjoy Rose in a different role as well. Keep in mind that Bella isn't making great decisions at this point. Too much fear.
I truly appreciate you taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: nosleep3 (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 06:23 PM · On: Patesco
I'm thinking you're sort of a genius.
I love that Rose has a purpose in life, and that Bella is now a specific purpose for her. It's really wonderful and refreshing to see this side of her, to see her as a layered character who is not wallowing in her own bitterness. You've done a wonderful thing here.
You know, I read this fic twice waiting for you to update. I'm very happy with the continuation. I confess I'm hoping for more interaction between Bella and Edward, but wherever you take this, I'm willing to follow.
Also: Mike Newton is a fool. I know it will likely be a while before Bella is able to reach a place emotionally where she can work up the courage to get herself shut of him, but I'm hopeful it will be sooner rather than later. She's obviously not in a good situation with him, and though he doesn't mean to, it seems like he's just slowly helping her kill herself one interaction at a time.
Wonderful, wonderful job.
Author's Response: Wow, don't really know how to reply to that. Thank you. I'm sorry it took me so long to respond. It's a double birthday week in RL and things have been hectic.
I'm not big into keeping things canon and have grown tired of Rose always being the "bitch". I'm enjoying how she's turning out.
You've read it twice? Goodness. Sorry it took so long to update. I crashed & burned on ch 4. It really helped me to see that I'd much rather take a bit longer and post something I'm satisfied with than to post what I'm not. It's so important to me that the emotions I'm trying to portray translate accurately. This will be and Edward & Bella story. There will be more interaction. It's just not there yet.
You are absolutely correct in regard to Mike. Everything you wrote is exactly spot on. He won't be around forever, I promise.
I so appreciate your thoughtful review. Means more to me than I can say. I'm about half way through with the next chapter.
Reviewer: JaspersBrand (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 06:13 PM · On: Patesco
Aww…I made it in the author notes *blushes redder than Bella. Thanks M! You rock my socks in more ways than one! Astounding writer and brilliant beta. Now, the reason I’m here, on with the review.
“Stop the presses, Mike thinks.” Queue beverage of choice spewing out of nose on that one! I love Bella’s deadpan humor, even while under the worse of circumstances she cracks me up!
“Creative honesty kicking in again.” Love how you put that. I’m a big fan of the creative honesty!
Ahh..you used queer! I LOVE IT! Not a word used a lot in the south (at least my neck of the woods). After a vacation in Mass/Maine one summer with all my cousin’s I came back saying that word. I got weird looks all over. Thanks for the good memories! J
She still calls Edward “Figment”. That is so great. And almost calls him that in front of Rose! I snorted on that.
I dig therapist Rose! She is amazing. Take charge kind of gal…but not just with her and Em. With everyone, mostly when it comes to her patients. Such a refreshing change from the normal bitch we always get.
I just want to go find Bella and give her a big hug. All of that with her mom; her hectic childhood, keeping Charlie away, shipping her off “like yesterday’s clothes to Goodwill” (loved that by the way). And then her diagnostic test answers. I know a hug isn’t much…but it’s a start. Edward can handle the rest!
Loved the update. Very insightful, not only into Bella’s life, but those around her helping (or not helping in Mike’s case). Anxious to see how Rose/Edward/Alice confrontation goes! Keep it rockin chica.
P.S. I still wanna kick Mike in the nuts! Just had to add that!
Author's Response: Of course, you made it to the Chapter notes!!
Bella is a bit off right now, but yes, we must have sarcasm. Seriously, what is life without sarcasm.
Queer - it is being used in it's proper definition here, meaning odd. But, yes, when I was younger it was one the more frequent terms we all used up here for a lot of things. Of course, we pronounced it queeah.
Do people really like the Figment bit? I mean I like it, but I'm not sure that B will continue to use it once she & E become more aquainted.
I'm glad you like Rose. Yes, Bella needs lots of hugs. Maybe a year or two worth. We'll see more of E in her life soon. Ack, Mike's an imbecile. He will go away eventually...really....I promise....
Reviewer: frol (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 05:33 PM · On: Patesco
I am loving this story as it hits so close to home for me. Ah the depression scales. I always called it "the depression test" when I had to take it. Seriously you show such care and detail with writing this. It's something you could have easily plunged into weird drama and you could have pounded us over the head with it. However you do it perfectly. The pain is there resonating, but not in the spoon-fed pablam sense that some authors resort to in order to create suspense of get buy-in. Very well done. I am liking Rose in this so far very much. It's a nice change since usually she's so abrasive and harsh in other fics. Thank you for the update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Mer. Yes, the depression scales, I'm tempted to snatch one the next time - so I have the real thing to use.
While it's a fanfic story and some of it will be a bit more dramatic than RL tends to be, for the most part, I want it to be realistic. I want the actual emotions to translate rather than something overblown.
Hell, what Bella's going through happens everyday to so many of us. Mostly not in a dramatic fashion, it's usually like the wind and sand wearing down the stones on the sphinx. Day by day. (End emo bit before I get carried away)
I'm glad you like Rose. I do too. The character deserves a little departure from her "norm".
I really appreciate you taking the time to read and your thoughful review.
Reviewer: Gelsamina (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 05:08 PM · On: Patesco
I like the story. I'm not liking Mike - although he doesn't seem mean, just cleuless & self absorbed. I hope Bella decides to move back to Charlie's
Author's Response: Yep, Mike is truly an imbecile. Edward's hit the nail on the head with that one, at least as far as Bella is concerned.
I'm really happy to hear that you're liking the story. Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: nosleep3 (Signed) · Date: August 06, 2009 11:29 PM · On: Fragmentation
I feel like you've captured some of my past panic attacks perfectly. Thank you for letting me know about this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read & review. I think that we're both trying to illustrate some of the same struggles. Here's to hoping....
Reviewer: goldenmeadow (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 02:39 PM · On: Assumptions
"An emotional vampire devouring the strength, the life force of others."
Brilliant line.
"While I do truly appreciate the benefits of sedatives, I prefer them in the comfort and safety of my home. Not when I'm expected to come up with logical answers for my less than logical behavior."
Appreciating Bella's inner snark.
These are just my thoughts. Mike, the co-conspirator in denial and enabling Bella because, let's face it, should she ever get her shit together she mostly likely could/would leave him. Although I am certain he is hurt by her apparent pain, I also think that he is equally (more?) afraid of what would happen to their relationship (i.e. Bella's reliance on him) if she became a capable, functioning facet of society.
Nice,
Rie~
Author's Response: Holy shit Rie, feel free to come to Maine and kick my ass for not answering this. I feel like a complete heel.
Thank you, thank you, thank you. Inner snark is win all over.
Reviewer: goldenmeadow (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 09:57 AM · On: Interim
Intense chapter, Margie!
I am enjoying your EPOV, the visions from Alice, and the fact that he "cannot logic his way around this thing".
Interesting escalation of characters.
Rie~
Author's Response: Oh, Rie, thank you. I was pretty unhappy with this chapter in general, so to get a positive response is great. It just wasn't done. Hopefully Ch 5 makes up for it.
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 07:33 AM · On: Assumptions
I love the way Bella calls Edward figment. I'm glad Charlie is stepping up to being a good father and understanding Bella needs help and also offering her a home if she doesn't want to be with Mike anymore.
Author's Response: I worried a bit about "figment" but didn't want to call him dream guy or somesuch. Charlie loves his girl, he just doesn't know what to do with her most of the time.
Ack, Mike.
Again, thank you so much for sitting down and reading the whole thing and reviewing each chapter. I truly appreciate it!!
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: August 02, 2009 07:13 AM · On: Interim
Alice was so upfront with telling Edward Bell's future. He didn't react as he usually does with denieal - he seemed hopeful. Bella is silent again. Is it because she is unconcious or was he only able to read her before because she was screaming in her head? Your chapters are good but I love especially the way they begin and end.
Author's Response: Edward is not terribly sure what's going on at this point. He hasn't had time to process everything that's happening.
Beginnings are strong for me. I'm not sure why. I sort of write in a stream of consciousness way and then go from there. So, maybe the beginnings are the most real?
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