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Reviewer: barwickj (Signed) · Date: September 26, 2011 05:48 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
I have really enjoyed this story. I hope that you decide to come back and finish it.
Reviewer: OrangeBlossom (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2010 07:00 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Love this... and hope that you'll continue on with the story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading & reviewing. I truly appreciate it. I have a tentative idea for an update gambling about in my empty head. Actually sitting down to write is the challenge. Again, thank you, V
Reviewer: summerc79 (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2010 10:53 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Hope u havent given up on the story :)
Reviewer: booksgalore (Signed) · Date: January 22, 2010 03:51 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Hon, you certainly can write angst. I can feel her pain in every line. You also from a plotting perspective have done a good job "showing" that Bella is not turning to Edward as a crutch because she wants a way out of her situation with Mike. :)
Aware, for the first time. What a way to end the chapter on a note of hope.
Best,
Books
Author's Response: Thank you Books. So much.
Reviewer: Dreaming Dimitra (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 11:09 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
In reference to your posting at the end of some of your chapters, I thought they were great and didn't need any clarification whatsoever.
This is what I'm referring to... "Recently though, it was brought to my attention that I wasn't as clear as I could and should have been in Chapter 2, Fragmentation, in the sexually explicit scene between Bella and Mike or in Chapter 4, Interim, with my dialog choices between Edward and Alice."
Reviewer: Dreaming Dimitra (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 11:00 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
I started to read this piece on a whim and out of simple curiosity. My intention was to not read past the first chapter assuming it wasn't going to captivate my attention seeing as I only love, read and enjoy pieces written in canon. But as I read, I felt myself becoming enthralled in your words and glued to the screen reading through the entire 8 chapters you have written thus far, all with a 3 and 6 year old bouncing around me the entire time! Now I beseech and implore you to please write more because this has made it to my favorites list. I loved it!
Phenomenal job!
Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: November 22, 2009 03:33 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Aware of what for the first time? Aaargh.
I love that Charlie is trying to push Mike out. Too perfect. Maybe Charlie will actually like Edward. :)
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2009 09:34 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
I hope Rosalie is allowed to read the journal entries soon. They need to be addressed.
B calling him Figment is just too funny.
It hurts me inside that E has to just sit back and watch B without being able to help much yet. That he has to endure B having sex with Mike is <gulp> heartbreaking.
Yeah, he comes to pick her up!
"Aware, for the first time..." Argh! This is no time to stop such a cool story! :-) I'd very gladly read more. Right. Now.
I look forward to chap. 9. Thank you so much for sharing with us.
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2009 09:23 AM · On: Obsession at First Sight
Another wonderful chapter.
Alice's twang is cute and original.
How do you come up with such sweetness: "This delicate, broken woman is mine? To love, to comfort, to protect, to heal?"
Kate seems to be a nice friend for E. He will benefit from her wisdom.
I'm really surprised he didn't try to drive her home. Such restraint on his part.
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2009 09:11 AM · On: Patesco
Once again your first paragraph was such an effective opener.
It's so sad how Mike is so oblivious to what's going on with his girlfriend. Yes, she puts on a good front, but still, he doesn't try hard enough to push past it.
I love how attentive E is.
Really enjoying your story.
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2009 09:05 AM · On: Assumptions
In your AN, you kind of made it sound like you weren't completely satisfied with chapter 4? Don't know how that could be! It was a great pleasure to read.
I enjoy you sense of humor which sneaks in now and then.
"The warmth, the complete comfort that I had felt was gone." I love how twice now you've had Bella describe him as warm.
P.S. I know what you mean about Books' CC - definitely one of a kind scentastic romance business going on there! She spoils her readers so!
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 09:59 AM · On: Interim
Love your beautiful opener - really draws you in.
Aha! So he can't hear her all the time. As soon as I sent the review for the last chapter, it hit me that that might have been a fluke due to her being so upset. His equating it with being brain dead was original.
Edward's seeming acceptance of a relationship with Bella is a new way of handling that and I like it.
Did I mention I really love your story? Cause I really do! Thanks for writing.
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 09:21 AM · On: Twilight Zone??
Well oh my goodness! He can hear her! What a cool twist that is! Can't waitot see how that causes things to play out. So many possibilities.
Your Alice is precious. She loves Bella already and is so sweet towards her.
Your Emmett is hilarious! Love the 'wards!
And your dear Edward with his protective urges, already basking in her warmth. I love it!
Thanks for writing. This is so well done.
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 09:14 AM · On: Fragmentation
My, such sadness. And she seems to try so hard.
Here's some joy though - we have the appearance of cool hands and auburn hair! You didn't make us wait long.
Reviewer: CindyWindy (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 08:58 AM · On: Intro
I heard about your story from reading The Deluded. (Can't remember exactly how - from one of your reviews maybe?) Doesn't matter, just glad I found it! I love your writing style. I can feel Bella's pain, and it is raw.As for Edward's part, it drips with sadness its own way.
I even want to compliment your title (love to learn a new word) and summary (those can be hard to write but yours draws interest right away).
Thanks for writing! Must read more. Now.
Reviewer: goldenmeadow (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2009 01:27 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Marigie,
This was my fave chapter yet (do I say that each time?). You are so gifted; the complete dead blanket that suffocates Bella literally smothered me while reading.
There were so many amazing Edward asides, some smart-alecky Bella under the jumble of near-death of feeling.
Pure bleak brilliance.
Rie~
Reviewer: booksgalore (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2009 09:35 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Really good job peering into the psyche of a clinically depressed soul. You've captured her anguish and her self-handicapping perfectly. And totally loved how Edward nicknames Mike's family and how Jasper comes by to offer understated and dark humorous relief. Keep up the good work. :)
Books
Author's Response: Thank you so much Books. I really do appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Means so much more than I can say.
Reviewer: Eddieluv (Signed) · Date: October 31, 2009 07:10 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Loving the story so far, cant wait to read more :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review. Means more than I can express.
Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: October 20, 2009 04:41 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
argh what a place to stop for the chapter break! :)
So relieved that Bella's getting a chance to really start interacting with figment - I mean, Edward hehe
It was tough to read through this chapter, and I don't doubt it will continue like that for some time, but it was nice to get some B&E time together.
Author's Response: I know, I know. It's just that the chapter was getting away with itself and that was a good place to stop. I've got a lot of the second part written. The middle is eluding me....
I do appreciate you sticking through with all the angst. But, this chapter is called Catalyst for a reason.
Reviewer: PBJilly (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2009 08:12 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Can't wait for the second part. I love how you have morphed the Newtons into the Imbeciles-it made me laugh, and then I felt guilty for laughing at a story with so much sadness in it. Oh well, I guess it's the double edged sword, tears of a clown, or whatever. I can't imagine how difficult it must be to write this downward spiral. The song at the begining fit perfectly with the chapter.
Author's Response: Goodness, don't feel guilty for laughing. Sarcasm can be a lovely thing and laughter is what I was going for there. I giggled when I wrote it. Comic relief is an absolute necessity in this. I almost took out Korn for part 1, now I'm scrambling around a bit for something for part 2, but Freak on a Leash is just so damned apt here.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: jeanne (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2009 07:21 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
That was a beautifully written chapter. Poor Bella. Hopefully, things will start to get better for her soon.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you. Well, yes, eventually. My chapters seem to run away with themselves when I'm righting them. Especially Edward, gods, he's so damned wordy sometimes......
I truly appreciate you taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: kerrylee (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2009 07:14 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Great to see an update. Just love how you are writing Bella's depression. It's completely engrossing. Can't wait for the next update, need to know what happens next!
Author's Response: Have I mentioned how much I appreciate reviews? No, I do, I really, really do. Working on part 2 right now.
Reviewer: FantasyMother (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2009 12:18 AM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Gah...you can't leave me here!
Absolutely beautiful, heart-rendering. And worth the wait sweetie :-)
Author's Response: Sorry about that. It had been soooo long since I'd posted and I knew that I wasn't going to be able to finish it right then. I made a quick decision to post the first half (really quick - argh can you say typo?).
I've got the beginning & end written. Must write the middle. Must, must, must...........
Thank you!! You make me smile.
Reviewer: jordynnem (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2009 07:35 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Aware for the first time.....of what??? Wonderful writing, very desciptive in all the right ways.
Author's Response: Well, on the surface at least, this is the first time he's been able to put his arms about her while she's actually awake. Sort of a moment for him. Mind you, we could find a few more below the surface meanings as well.....
Thank you so very much for taking the time to read & review.
Reviewer: annetted (Signed) · Date: October 18, 2009 06:14 PM · On: Catalyst Part 1
Hey Vir
Can't tell you how glad I am that you updated. I so love this story. Poor broken Bella and what an idiot Mike is, not to mention his family. I love Edward watching over her. I've always found this aspect of Edward's character to be romantic and a reflection of his need to protect her rather than creepy and stalkerish.
When can we expect Part 2?
Annette
Author's Response: I kind of wanted to give him "permission" to watch over her in this story. I really am working on part 2. I've got the beginning & end done. Just that damned middle bit that I'm struggling to get out.
Truly appreciate your feedback. Can't really tell you how much it means to me.
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