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Reviewer: BookWormGirl93 (Signed) · Date: September 25, 2014 06:43 PM · On: One Shot
Yeah anal's great, but can't do it too often or get constipated. :/
Reviewer: modern_audrey (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2011 05:37 PM · On: One Shot
This would have been significantly more enjoyable had the idea originated with Edward, not Alice. There are just some things that do not need to become a family event.
Reviewer: vixenjc (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2010 09:26 AM · On: One Shot
never understood the how people are so inlove with doing it that way, i guess i never will lol
Reviewer: shelbielyncullen (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2010 01:12 PM · On: One Shot
LOVED IT! Maybe an Alice/Jas sequel? :D
Reviewer: georgiagirl (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 10:42 AM · On: One Shot
hahahahaha, that was great! god how i wish i had and edward and an island! and i totally think SM writes twilight smut, she's just holding back! lol
Reviewer: ctfan (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2009 02:53 AM · On: One Shot
Interesting and funny. Liked it! Nicely written.
Reviewer: Galadriel (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2009 08:26 AM · On: One Shot
HA! That was H-O-T! STEAMING hot and very well written; the end was hilarious too! I imagined them flying off the bed backwards sort of like Edward does in the kissing scene in Twilight but with Bella in his arms this time....hysterical! My favorite part was:
“I guess we’d better order Esme a new bed,” Edward said.
“Maybe Alice already did” TOO FUNNY!
One of your reviewers said that this was like a PSA and I couldn't agree more, it's so awesome when well done......They would publish your story and teach it on Sex Ed at schools, seriously! You had it perfectly covered, perineum rubbing, finger entering and all: PURE PLEASURE! Oh, and the though of Robert, errr I mean Edward ;p, as he "wrapped his hand around his cock, and he moaned as the warm oil coated him...." Amazing sight indeed! Girl, you ROCK!
I thought 5 dildos for training was a bit too many and also would have thought that Alice would have made the call instead of Carlisle, but who cares! Great job, you should go on! Follow your story line and have them go back to the store (at night, so the Sun is not an issue for Edward) to get something for Alice, and then they'll surely find something else for themselves and keep the fun going.... ;0)
Thank you, that was great!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the detailed comments!
Reviewer: lisa89 (Signed) · Date: June 18, 2009 05:40 PM · On: One Shot
Cute ending. :)
Reviewer: jasper_rox (Signed) · Date: June 17, 2009 05:15 PM · On: One Shot
omg that was so embarassing at the beginning! it was worth it though. nice.
Reviewer: Phoenix Rising (Signed) · Date: June 17, 2009 09:36 AM · On: One Shot
That was great! Very sexy, I really liked the build-up...Bella and Edward didn't just go for it, you had them train a bit first. Great job!
xoxo Sarah
Reviewer: NessieEdwardDoIt (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2009 06:44 AM · On: One Shot
Major turn on !!! Please do another!!
Reviewer: EdwardCullenisHOT (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2009 04:51 AM · On: One Shot
OMG! THis story is ausome it made me a little, well you know. Thanx!
Reviewer: teacher (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2009 04:18 AM · On: One Shot
not so bad! The funny thing is....the whole laughter at the end!
Reviewer: Twilight_obessesed (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 08:35 PM · On: One Shot
That was hot i liked it :)
Reviewer: Emmett_lover (Anonymous) · Date: June 15, 2009 08:22 PM · On: One Shot
One, soooooooooooo not what I was expecting. And two, HOTT!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: jemappellegenevieve (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 06:12 PM · On: One Shot
not at all. i enjoyed it.
Reviewer: juggalettels (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 05:39 PM · On: One Shot
Haha, I wish I had a kit like that for the first time haha. food for thought not too bad and quite "clean" for how raunchy it could have been
Reviewer: mayams (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 04:15 PM · On: One Shot
As unthinkable like this could seem to be, it was really good. Bella's lieing abilities and Edward's cautioness would have probably gotten in the way, but it's great to imagine they didn't and this could have really happened.
Both of them enjoyed it and it gave them new and different possibilites to explore. And if they go at night together to the store...
Really well written.
Reviewer: eternallyedward (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 04:08 PM · On: One Shot
That was hot!! I love a story that goes beyond the usual , expected sex scene. More,more!
Reviewer: diamondtopaz (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 04:01 PM · On: One Shot
that was soooo hot! lol
although i can't imagine this actually happening because i don't think that bella would be able to fake her noises, and i don't think that edward would suggest it in the first place because of his majorly traditional beliefs and attitudes.
Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 03:37 PM · On: One Shot
Hot!! I've actually never tried that. Is it fun? I think my husband is the only man in the world who hates anal...
Reviewer: jemimag (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 01:56 PM · On: One Shot
that was friggin awesome!!! loved it?!?! Might have to try this out :)
Reviewer: SinAndShame (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 12:17 PM · On: One Shot
*Thud* That was chock full of awesome.
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 11:51 AM · On: One Shot
Mmmm, no, not bad at all! I'm not even blushing!
Reviewer: Sheeijan (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 11:15 AM · On: One Shot
Nothin' wrong with some back door fun. When done properly, that is. I had the funniest mental image though of Edward carrying all those dildoes in his hands and walking behind Bella to the bedroom. *grin*
This could almost have been a how-to guide for beginners. Seriously, it's like a public service, when you think about it. If only more people would read it before trying something like anal sex for the first time.
Thanks for writing!
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