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Reviewer: jfcx3 (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 11:33 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

I am thoroughly enjoying it. 



Author's Response:

Hehe, well good!  Stick around!

Reviewer: appletini (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 11:31 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

I might have mentioned that I hated the Bella/Jacob relationship before, but this whole conflict of feelings is pretty interesting. The only problem is that I can't really imagine how the hell Bella is going to make the choice between Edward of Jacob. In my opinion, she thinks that there's this total love for Jacob, which consequentially is the "safe" option, but she truly loves Edward, but because he's a celebrity, she thinks she's not good enough. I don't like that. It's a pretty redundant premise. She needs to get her shit together, excuse my French. But I do love this story. So gimmie more to love/hate soon. 



Author's Response:

Ah, both love and hate.  Good stuff.  And I appreciate you calling me on the whole redundant premise thing.  You're so right, but it's just so in character for Bella.  Her inferiority complex combined with the extremely tall pedestal she has Edward on equals "I'm not good enough for him."  <shrug> It's been done, but I think it still fits with where I'm going.  And I hope you'll stick around as she gets her shit together...I'm assuming she will eventually...

Thanks for reading and reviewing =)

Reviewer: bellaleone (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 11:10 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

Poor Bella she's so torn!



Author's Response:

Hell,  I'm torn too.  I know how the story ends, and I still keep reading back over it, seeing how easily it could go the other way!  Keep on reading!

Reviewer: Vintage Carousel (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 11:05 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

This is in top five stories right now.  I love the plot line and scary Jasper is really hot.



Author's Response:

Ooh, top 5!!  I'll have Jasper whack the other 4 bitches.  LOL, I kid.

Thanks so much!  I'm super glad you're enjoying!

Reviewer: wwonder (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 10:59 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

I can honestly say I like where this is going. But The whole jake thing is bugging me, but i think i appreciate the turn in events.  Bella being the bad guy, I think i can deal with it. Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Well, I suppose not everyone can love my Jacob.  If you can deal with crazy-cheater-Bella, I can deal with you being anti-Jake, lmao!  Thanks for reading...stay tuned!!

Reviewer: mandilm14 (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 10:51 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

Ooooo, I can't wait to see what he has in store for her. WHats in the bag?

Author's Response:

I think you will highly enjoy what is in the bag... =)

Reviewer: Pixiebitch_dk (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 10:37 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

Hmm... What to think after this one...

Somehow it feels like there isn't a lot in the chapter. But when I look back there's a lot!

 

The whole Jake/Sam thing... I foresee some lines that are gonna cross...

Could it be that what Bella has to do, Jake is at the other end of...?

 

And god she is stupid. Hiding from Jake in order not to hurt him. That is just plain stupid. It'll only hurt more to know that she went behind his back. That kind of stuff is what your taking with you to your next relationship. His trust is gonna take a huge blow from that.

 

And also, she keeps seeing Edward when she's with Jake. But when she's with Edward she's 100% there, with him. That's like a motherfucking billboard just screaming at her to wake up!

 

Breaking someone's heart is terrible (I know...), but to stay in a relationship that you're not really committed to, is just as bad. It's just your self you're hurting.

 

I hope she owns up to her heart soon. For everybody's sake.

 

So yeah, when I think back over what I've just read... A lot of stuff going down.

Really looking forward to the next chapter. =)

 



Author's Response:

Oh, I do love this review!  I love that you like the story and yet hate the characters a little bit, which is sort of my intent.  I want Bella to be human (selfish, insecure, and yes, stupid).  And I want Edward to be good but not perfect.  I know full well how it feels to break a heart and I certainly know what it's like to have one broken.  And while it sucks hard, I think I can appreciate love better now, so that's what I'm going for.  The whole storm before the calm thing.

Thanks so much for reading and staying with me!

Reviewer: anabanana219 (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 10:26 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

OH no..... Bella is just going to screw herself over! BUT i'm glad she's going to "lie" with Edward... :)



Author's Response:

Hehe, "lie."  Nice.  And yes, of course she's screwing herself over.  That's the way she is.  Stay tuned for more!

Reviewer: Shadowdragon13 (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 10:12 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

Did you say Rageward?  My heart just did a little happy dance, well, actually, it was much further south, but you get the idea, lol.  Edward seened almost too calm in this chapter, too agreeable... It leaves me feeling like a smack down is on the horizon.  Jealous, possessive, YUMMY Edward, is out there somewhere... I can hear him breathing...  More, please?



Author's Response:

Whew!  I'm glad I'm not the only one that can hear Rageward breathing.  And as for him being too agreeable...well, I guess that comes from the desperation of love.  Love does crazy things to people.  First it makes you happy and light.  That leads to desperation, which leads to obsession.  It's a messed up journey, but fun as hell to write!

Glad you're enjoying.

Reviewer: esmemahina (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 10:03 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

more please.  loove it!



Author's Response: more is coming very soon =)

Reviewer: Nitachan (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 09:48 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

After everything that Jake told Bella about Seth and Sam it kinda looks like there is gonna be a territory fight between them and the Cullens. And if Jake is forced to join them... then Bella and Jake would be like ... uhm.. enemys...Can't wait to read what is actually up your sleeve!!!

The Balle/Jake interaction was really sweet... I liked it.

And then Edward shows up at her working place... poor Bella just can't deny him anything... I can't say that cheating-Bella is my favorite but I somewhat can understand her. At least it looks like we will get more Bella/Edward smut soon...

uhhh, Bella gets a new job from Jasper *rubs hands in happy anticipation* I'm really curious what she will have to do next...

I must admit that Jasper somewhat became one of my favorit charcters in here though he is just in a tiny bit here... and although he ruined Bella's night plans - I still adore him!

I can't even begin to tell you how happy you quick updates make me and the length of your chapters is really good, too. Keep it cummin' plssss =)

Thx for your work and for sharing this with us =) you are awesome!!!



Author's Response:

Well, thank you for believing that I'm awesome.  I'll do my best to keep it up!  I'm glad you love Jasper...he's quite fun to write, and you'll see more angles to him soon.  As for Bella and Edward...there is so much pulling them together, and yet so much standing in their way.  I know what's gonna happen, but you'll have to wait <wink>

 

Thanks so much for reviewing!  I love love love it!

Reviewer: cindy75 (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 09:45 AM · On: Chapter 6--Thickening Plot (vjgm)

much better than i thought! more pease!!!



Author's Response:

well, now I'm wondering what you thought...lol.  But I'm glad you like.

Reviewer: mandilm14 (Signed) · Date: July 16, 2009 04:35 AM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

I don't hate you.  I mean, it can't end there, right?  Then the story would end and we wouldn't get to all the wonderful drama that is sure to come.  I have one question though, is Bella's sole purpose for being there to fall in love with Edward and vice versa?



Author's Response:

Wow, that's fairly deep and philosophical really, if you think about it.  No, it's not her sole purpose, as far as the plot of this little story.  But I do believe in Fate, and I know it moves us where we're supposed to be.  So....in the infinitely terrifying grand scheme of things...perhaps.  Our past shapes us.  Our choices define us.  And Fate guides us.  Excellent question.  I feel like cracking open a freshman psych book right now...

Thanks for reviewing!!

Reviewer: Pixiebitch_dk (Signed) · Date: July 15, 2009 01:14 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

I really realy like your story.

I can't wait to see what's going to happen with Jake.

Is Bella just gonna leave him? Has he seen her and Edward in a magazine? Is the Cullen family gonna get into buisness in oder to make Jake 'disappear'...? Hmm... Can't wait to read.

 

But what I'm not so much into is all those dialogs she is having with her self. For some reason, those dialogs (in your story as well as others) always bug me to no end.

Also, I really hope you'll keep it in BPOV. I've grown tired of having to read the same stuff twice from different POV's. So I'm crossing my fingres for that.

But yeah... Keep going as you're doing. It's really good!

=)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you're liking it!  Sorry you're not a fan of the internal dialogue.  I do it because I project my schizophrenia on my heroines...can't seem to help it, lol.  As for the EPOV...if I do it, it will be as a one-shot companion.  I'm with you.  The duplicate reading makes me bonkers sometimes if it's overdone.

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: sweet (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 02:18 PM · On: Chapter 4--Jesse and Antoine (vjgm)

Brilliant....absolutely brilliant

Reviewer: laleangel (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 12:34 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

mmmmmmmmmm I hate you......................but thats because there is no more chapters posted yet!! :)  I love this story, I just found it today, I really liked the little scene at the aquarium that was very sweet and who doesn't like a bad boy Edward.

Cant wait for more.



Author's Response:

And he isn't even that bad...yet.  I'll take your hate...I deserve just a bit of it, lol.  Glad you found this story, and hope you enjoy what is to come!

Reviewer: anabanana219 (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 07:46 AM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

OMG I LOVE you! I love the conflicting feelings and but still the strong pull that they have!! Can't wait for more! xx



Author's Response:

More comes quickly!!  Thank you for the love, and for appreciating the conflict.  I thrive on it, so while I can't promise many things with this story, I can certainly promise more drama!

Reviewer: mfrancesj (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 12:15 AM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

Freaking hot story!!  Ahhh!!! Love it!  Pls update soon!

 

P.S. Hope Bella leaves Jacob for Edward.  Hope Bella and Edward are together.  Sometimes, we all need a bad boy in our life.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and for leaving me some love.  I totally agree that having a bad boy around is quite pleasant.  Although, there is much joy to be found with the Boy Scout as well. =)  I think we all hope for Bella and Edward to make it.  Even as a big Jake fan, I'll agree with that.  But you'll just have to read and find out, hehe.

More soon!

Reviewer: esmemahina (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 08:48 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

Please update soon! I love/hate you. As long as there is more hotward than jacob in the next chapter.... I'll love you.



Author's Response:

Ultimatums??  Really??  Well...I'll take your love/hate for now, and shall make no promises. =)

Reviewer: brit77 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 07:18 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

Definatley an interesting twist with Bella and Edward.. but then agaion just last week she had her whole life planned out for her and now it must be scary to think of changing it based on 2 days worth of superb boinking!

I am still looking forward to seeing a manipulative and possive Edward he is my favorite!



Author's Response:

Ah, very insightful!  You bet she's scared!  And as to your final statement...you are quite close.  So hang in there! =)

Reviewer: fonsy (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 06:45 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

Thanks for the quick update! That was one epic smut, loved it. Love her internal monologue too. What happened to Alice? Can't wait to find more about the other characters. I'm torn about what I want, I mean, I'm Team Edward all the way, so yay, that they hooked up!!!, but I feel kind of sorry for Jake. It sucks to be Bella right now...well except the fact that she had Edward :)



Author's Response:

Epic smut, huh?  Nice!  And I do have to say that I'm quite pleased with your little Edward/Jacob dilemma there =)  That is my intent after all: that bliss that our protagonists had their hott moment, but then that "ugg" feeling when you know that someone has to suffer for it.  So yeah, it sucks to be Bella...or else it rocks because she has two hot boys giving her, um, attention.

And everyone wants to know about Alice...she's around.  That's all I'll say.  Please keep reading.  More to come very soon!

Reviewer: Queendel (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 04:44 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

A great read, exciting and suspenseful. Edward and Bella seems a bit OOC but realistic at the same time. The way that Edward played his part and seduce Jesse according to Bella's plan was mindblowing.  They  made a great team. And Edward is not as moody and very sexual.

I know that Bella is cheating on Jacob but I could understand her dilemna in having feelings for Edward.  It was sad to see her walk away but I guess her duty is to Jacob first.

As for Jasper, he is deadly. I didn't mind him killing  Mike but it seemed so cold blooded and the reasoning as given by Edward, so tame.  I would not have mind if he was selling drugs to children in school or was into the teenage sexual trade and had attempted to kill Jasper, so Jasper retaliated. Anyhow, he is dead now.

Interesting to see what will happened now with Bella and Jacob's relationship. Is he going to find out that she was in town with Edward the whole time due to some publicity page?  Will she still want to be with him like before or would Edward now come between them?

And what are the Cullens really into that needs Emmett to be so focussed?

I guess the picuture that Jasper had was of Alice.  Did she leave him because of his job?

Eager for more soon.

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Ahh, so many questions...and I can't really answer much of it yet, because I don't want to give too much away.  I can answer that Jasper didn't just kill Mike because of the incident with the waitress...he had to die because he'd told Eric about Jasper, and Jazz can't have anyone knowing who he is or what he does.  There will be a bit more about this later...

As for Bella and Jacob...hang in there.  As for Emmett, more will be explained on him later.  As for Alice...yes, she's waiting to make an appearance.  Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!  It's so appreciated!

Reviewer: corrielag (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 03:31 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

This chapter was so sweet and very sexy!  I love this version of Edward Cullen :)



Author's Response:

I never quite know what to do with Edward.  So many angles to explore...but I'm very glad you liked this version.  He's due for a mood swing any moment tho...  Stay tuned.

Reviewer: Shadowdragon13 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 03:25 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

I LOVE YOU!  I really thought Bella would choose option 4, but option 2 was sooo much better.  I have a serious feeling that things are going to become even more complicated, ande I can't wait!  More, PLEASE!!



Author's Response:

It's funny...the first draft of this, Bella did go with option 4...but I decided to make things difficult, and give you all your Bella/Edward moment a bit sooner.  Yes, more complications are indeed coming, but it's gotta get harder before it gets easier. =)  More soon!  And I love you too!!

Reviewer: wwonder (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 03:09 PM · On: Chapter 5--Mergers and Acquisitions (vjgm)

Its a whirlwind. But an enjoyable one. Keep it up.



Author's Response:

You think it's a whirlwind now....ohhh just wait!  Hehe =)

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