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Reviewer: Cerena (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2010 12:04 AM · On: Chapter 2: The Unthinkable
Freaky is right! Poor Bella...Again, I like the confidence she shows, even in the face of so much trauma.
Reviewer: Cerena (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2010 11:52 PM · On: Chapter 1: Ditching
I like the way you preserve Bella's shyness and clumsiness while giving her a bit more confidence than she has in at least the later books. I was not a big fan of how Edward's absence in New Moon turned her from a capable caretaker over her parents into a damsel in distress, and you're letting her be deeply upset of Edward's absence without losing the ability to take matters into her own hands :)
Reviewer: Cerena (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2010 11:31 PM · On: Prologue: Memories
I really like the mood of your storytelling :) I was browsing the list of fics signed up for r4r, and this stood out to me because it had such a nice blend of retrospection, movement toward future intrigue, playfulness, and pathos.
Reviewer: BSean (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 08:33 AM · On: Chapter 6: Joy Ride
Oh snap!
Reviewer: BSean (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 08:21 AM · On: Chapter 3: Conundrum
Dude this is some crazy stuff, Im lovin it more than a fat kid loves McDonald's
Reviewer: BSean (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 08:13 AM · On: Chapter 2: The Unthinkable
DAMN this chapter was crazy I have to know what happened.
Reviewer: BSean (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 07:39 AM · On: Prologue: Memories
Hey I have to admit I'm curious. I don't really know where you're going with this but I guess I'll see. I saw your story on review for review so hit me up. If it ain't your thing thats cool just let me know why.
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc (Signed) · Date: January 07, 2010 04:10 PM · On: Chapter 7: The Meadow
So hear I am, bumping up against the end of the posted chapters. They are so short and tasty (like delicious little cookies). Your names are cool and I'm very intrigued about the premise that you have just presented.
You have a talent for naming your chapters and your story title is great as well.
I'm glad I found your story on review4review. I hope you post quickly. If you get a chance please take a look at my story and hit me up with a review.
http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=9164
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc (Signed) · Date: January 07, 2010 04:06 PM · On: Chapter 6: Joy Ride
I love love love the chapter title, that was a moment of inspiration.
Another highlight for me was when she cursed him in English and Spanish!
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc (Signed) · Date: January 07, 2010 03:57 PM · On: Chapter 1: Ditching
curiouser and curiouser.
I like your Bella. It is so out of character for the canon Bella to think she could give advice on men. The Bella inner monologue is very unique to your story.
Reviewer: Alizabeth Roc (Signed) · Date: January 07, 2010 03:51 PM · On: Prologue: Memories
I liked the prologue, you tripped very swiftly and smoothly into the twist at the end and hooked me right in.
I have been longing for a family scene with Edward, Bella and Nessie so I was sad you had to skim over that, but of course that's not the point of this opening. Moving on to the next chapter with excitement.
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 08:14 AM · On: Chapter 7: The Meadow
Oh, I get it now...this is a perfect idea! So sci-fi, I love it!
Author's Response: Yes, indeedy! I consulted Mr. Spock himself for this one. He said it would work better than the trasnporter, which was always breaking down. Lol.
Thanks for your loyal readership!! I REALLY appreciate that!! Live long and prosper, and may the force be with you! :-)
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 08:07 AM · On: Chapter 6: Joy Ride
Mmmmh, I feel like I keep on repeating myself about how this story is totally original and unexpected. Edmund is Edward, but he doesn't have the same voice? And the vampires in your alternate universe have fangs?
Author's Response: Yes. And yes. Weird, huh?
I love your comment about this story being "totally original and unexpected"! Music to my ears!
Thanks for reading and reviewing yet again! =D
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 08:00 AM · On: Chapter 5: Speed
Ugh, the suspense...I don't even care anymore that I don't know at which point in time I am in the Twilight Universe.
Author's Response: Hey, I'm really happy this story has grabbed your attention to the point that you no longer care about its time setting! Lol. Thanks for continuing to read and review!! =D
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 07:52 AM · On: Chapter 4: Journey
Has Edward gone missing? The story is so totally original, but all the characters are the same. Alice & Jasper were in school while Edward was gone? I'm intrigued.
Author's Response: Yes, noble Edward took it into his head to get away from Bella,so that she could have a "normal" life without him. In Chapter 3, we found out that he had gone to Denali for a while. He was on his way back when...well, he met up with some big, bad vamps! And yes, Alice and Jasper kept going to school. I'm sure poor Bella asked Alice where Edward was keeping himself, but Alice never told. She's very loyal to Edward. Besides, I'm also sure that she didn't want to cause Bella any emotional pain.
Thanks for your comments! :-)
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 07:43 AM · On: Chapter 2: The Unthinkable
Spooky...and so creative. I like where you are taking this in this chapter. Was there another time shift that allowed her to escape the massacre? I think the story is a great idea. I just want a clue as to what point in time in Twilight she went back to.
I'll keep reading, maybe I'll figure it out!
Great writing by the way!
Cheers,
Belle
Author's Response: Thank you! Did I say I like "a little flattery"? Well, i can always accept a bit more! :)
You'll see that this story is chock-full of time shifts. That will make for some very unusual events later on...you'll find out!
Thank you for your continuining encouragement!!!!
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 07:34 AM · On: Chapter 1: Ditching
I'm a little confused....we are in Twilight - right? I like your Bella's POV - I think she is more alive and normal than SM's version. Newton is very pathetic. Reading next chapter to find out what's going on.
Belle
Author's Response: Actually, this story is a hybrid, if that term applies. Lol. It's in three categories -- Twilight, Breaking Dawn and alternate universe! How's that for complication, eh? Remember, though, it IS an sf tale, too. That's why it's so...convoluted.
Thank you for your comment on my Bella, but I must tell you that I find SM's Bella to be quite alive and normal herself! She IS SM's creation, after all. So I would modestly say that I take my cues from Steph where the character is concerned. I do enjoy a little flattery, however, Hee, hee!
Thanks for continuing to read and review! =D
Reviewer: BelleDean (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 07:19 AM · On: Prologue: Memories
I think this is an excellent prologue. I totally didn't expect the ending and I can see that you are into sci-fi. I think introducing that genre into the Twilight genre has great potentia! I'm anxious to read more.
Cheers,
Belle
Author's Response: Yes, I am indeed an avid science fiction addict. Thank you for appreciating the sci-fi elements I've introduced! =D
Reviewer: maggieloo402 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2009 04:30 PM · On: Chapter 2: The Unthinkable
Ok, scratch that. I said I was confused before? I don't even know what confused is any more! You've done a great job with this though- very interesting!
Author's Response: Thanks for another review! As I said, I hope to continue with the interesting confusion. Hee, hee! =D
Reviewer: maggieloo402 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2009 04:10 PM · On: Chapter 1: Ditching
This is a great story! I just found it on the review for review boards and I thought I'd check it out. At the moment, I'm utterly confused, but I guess thats kinda how it should be at this point. Just confused enough to make me feel like I HAVE to read more! Looking forward to reading!
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments! Yes, I guess it IS a confusing series of events I've presented here. I'm glad your confusion has caused you to want to read more, though!
I've been away from the site for a while now, but will be updating this story soon, never fear! I hope to make it even more confusing ...er...interesting, too! Lol.
Thanks again for the review! :)
Reviewer: Scorp112 (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2009 10:35 AM · On: Chapter 7: The Meadow
Whoa baby!! Didn't see that coming!! Can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Once again, thank you very much for the encouragement! I really appreciate it!!!! =D
Reviewer: Scorp112 (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2009 10:22 AM · On: Chapter 2: The Unthinkable
Hi - found this story on the "review for a review" thread; I gotta tell you, I'm completely stunned by what's going on!
You're a great writer and you've built a world that is all sorts of confusion and I love it. Cannot wait to see where this goes. I still have 5 chapters to read, but I had to stop and tell you how great this is so far!!
Author's Response: Wow!! Thank you so much!!! Reviews like yours make me want to stay up all night writing!!!! Thanks for the shot in the arm!!!!! =D
Reviewer: EliseShaw (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2009 03:45 PM · On: Chapter 7: The Meadow
Oh wow, this is a really great one! I love the reveal at the end... all suddenly becomes clear as we figure out what the crazy vampires are there to do. My favorite part was their reunion. I could feel the relief right along with Bella as Edward was finally there to hold her in his arms.
Great!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Elise! I always enjoy your reviews -- you're so upbeat and positive! I'm also very happy that you empathize with the characters! Writers just LOVE to read such comments.
Thanks again for reading, and caring enough to provide encouragement in your review! :)
Reviewer: Rosalynn (Signed) · Date: September 27, 2009 06:58 AM · On: Prologue: Memories
i found your story on the review for a review thread and i have to say i am intriqued!
Author's Response: Well, I do hope you continue to feel that way. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! =D
Reviewer: content1 (Signed) · Date: September 26, 2009 02:13 PM · On: Chapter 7: The Meadow
Okay - Now you have me. I will patiently await the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for yet another review! I've been at work on my second story, but I will return to this one, never fear!
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