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Reviewer: pricel (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 04:54 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Fantastic job with the story. Very well done. Really enjoying it. No thoughts of killing anyone...author or characters.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad! Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: steflynno (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 04:13 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Oh my goodness. What a twist, but a good twist. Bella is quite intelligent in this story. The power of a woman. The fact that she was able to make Edward become submissive to her spoke volumes. Trust me I glad the way you took the story. I was afraid that he would try to harm her in a physical way, so I was not dissapointed with the twist. Keep writing.



Author's Response:

Yeeeey, I'm happy you liked! I know, so many people said they were terrified he would get violent with her once again. No, I'd never do that to you guys, that would be beyond horrible. Thanks for reading, I'm so glad you are liking the story :)

Reviewer: newbie20 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 04:03 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Oh my goodness, what a cliffie! I loved the way the tables turned in this chapter - in more ways than one with Edward submitting power to Bella and looking like Charlie's people rescuing Bella. Will Edward now become a hostage himself?

Author's Response:

Hmmmm, we'll see. He'll ahve a tough time though, so will Bella. It needs to get just a tinsy bit worse before it gets better. Thanks fro reading and reviewing :)

Reviewer: Twilighter21 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 04:02 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Great chapter! nice cliffhanger... I bet Charlie got Bella's letter so he came for her.

update soon please!

Reviewer: mandilm14 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 03:40 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Agh!  I really, really hate cliffies.  For real.  Well, I loved that chapter.  Yeah, except for the cliffie.  I'm guessing her dad found out where she was.  That would be the obvious answer.  I hope this isn't over soon.

Reviewer: cullenfan8 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 03:36 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Its getting good!

Reviewer: Katie Bee (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 03:25 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Hm...Bella's father has come to get her? Another rival gangster? Awesome chapter. I'm on the edge of my seat wondering what's going to happen next...

Reviewer: angiepie02 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 03:15 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

UGH you need to update! I looove this story!

Reviewer: twilighteyes (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 03:11 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

oh no. he hasn't been caught has he?

Reviewer: Sunfeathers (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:54 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Holy CRAP! I am stunned by that last paragraph, Lee!! I am going to guess it is Bella's father's men come to save her? 

Oh my gosh - and is she pregnant by Edward??

That was an amazing chapter - can't wait to discuss more at the thead. :)



Author's Response:

Thanks, SF! I am glad you were surprised! Next chapter is done! I'm posting it as soon as I finish here! :)

Reviewer: Autumn Dawn (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:51 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Theory: Charlie found out about where Bella was kept and had his men come and get her. They just happen to have excellent timing and came after Edward and Bella had their "moment", dragging off Edward to be punished and taking Bella back home. Then Bella will face her father for the first time in years and tell him she's in love with Edward. I don't know exactly which direction you'll go in after that.

So, am I right?

Please hurry with the next chapter

Reviewer: Steelerfan (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:32 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

love this story i am going to be late to work because i wanted to read this ha

Reviewer: Steelerfan (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:32 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

love this story i am going to be late to work because i wanted to read this ha

Reviewer: Gelsamina (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:25 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Daddy to the rescue when rescue is unwanted??

Reviewer: hellopretty (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:19 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

i am LOVE-ING this fanfiction.
Seemed a bit dark to start off with (not my usual sort of read), but i'm really liking where it is heading.

Keep it up
xxx

Reviewer: purplemon1 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 02:17 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

about time she stopped being weak (also glad crazy vase throwing Bella did not make an appearance).

My guess is her father's goons.

Reviewer: SnowWhiteQueen (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 01:43 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

the cops showed up!!! holy shit that's what it is!!! aw, man bella better be able to free him!



Author's Response:

Ha ha ha! I'l never tell! ;)

BUT, next chapter is done, betas are working on it, but it shouldn't be long now.

Thank you SWQ! :)

Reviewer: HeavenDust (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 01:24 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

:O

Color me shocked. Reasons... one, I did not expect Edward to be in love with Bella already. Two, and sudden burst of men into the room. wtf? Bella's rescue team is finally here... at the worst time possible! :D Well, this will certainly get VERY interesting from now on. You did awesome! I'm yearning for more, so please indulge me? :) Thank you so much!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much HD! Next chapter is almost done, promise!

I'm so happy I did surprise you! Yeeey! :)

Reviewer: Tasia93 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 01:21 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

omg! what just happened???????????? UPDATEEEEEE please !

Reviewer: Jadalulu (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 01:12 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

NO!NO! NO! Finally the dam breaks and NOW someone comes for her! I'm sure it's Charlie-damn him! :-) PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

Reviewer: melonburst05 (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 01:05 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Wow.  Well it looks like he came to his senses.  I can't wait for the next update.  I'm DYING to know what's going on, lol. 

Reviewer: rubytuesday (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 01:00 AM · On: Chapter 1- Imprisonment

I can't wait to find out what happens next! It sounds to me as if Charlie is finally stepping in and things are gunna get dirty.

I hope there is more info on Edward and his background, it would be great if he had/has some obsession with her that is revealed/the other motive you mentioned.

Love this story. :D Ruby



Author's Response:

Yeah, we'll get more on Edward's past, I promise. I know he is still such an enigma right now.

Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: fuckward (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 12:25 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Man, I have have no idea how you do it, but you always shock the fvck right out of me with every chapter. rotfl. You never write what I expect. My mouth is hanging open and I have so many questions...just..fck.



Author's Response:

Ha ha ha, I'm glad, Fuckward! I'm so glad! I never know if it'll work, so it is so fulfilling to find it does!

Thanks as alwyas! :)

Reviewer: trutwilightfantasy (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 12:17 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

This whole damn chapter just blew me away! Bella definately held herself together a hell of alot better than I would have through his belligerant rage. I'm not sure if I would have been able to see his fear through my own red haze. I know I've said it before but, God, I really wish I knew what Edward was thinking. I found it incredibly endearing how frightened he was/is. And then the lovemaking and 4 kids, June wedding, freakin' SIGH! (I'm an idiot I know) But DAMN IT! What's up with home invasion?!! I find myself extremely over protective of the asshole I wanted to kick in the nuts the last chapter, and ofcourse, I hope Bella is ok. I'm curious if the "invaders" are the calvary Bella called in during Edward's time away?(I noticed you glossed over the time that Joseph left Edward's office unlocked, so ofcourse I have nothing but assumptions)    

Reviewer: didodado (Signed) · Date: July 23, 2009 12:01 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

OHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!

When they are finally in the same level and confesing their fellings to each other they are pulled apart.

I think that these men are Charlie's men. And now Charlie is going to torture Edward? Maybe Bella will have to rescue him.

Will Bella find out in the next chapter  Edward's past and why of his obsession towards Bella?

What will happen with Joseph and Mary?

I know so many questions but I'm so intrigued. I'm getting obsessed wih this story. ;-)

By the way. as always I love the chapter

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