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Reviewer: RaeRae (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 02:24 AM · On: Chapter One
i like it a lot
Reviewer: demeterloves2 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 08:39 PM · On: Chapter One
This sounds interesting. I'm intrigued. This was a good opener. Do you intend on updating often? :)
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 06:48 PM · On: Chapter One
Really great start-I'm so interested! I can't believe Charlie died on Bella's birthday! And I think-I'm just guessing here-that Bella is going to go with Edward!
Reviewer: RedRedRed (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 10:50 AM · On: Chapter One
Hey cool chap its sad bout charlie =]
Reviewer: cindy75 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 10:05 AM · On: Chapter One
keep going please !!!!!!!! who doesnt love a bad boy!
Reviewer: Regetta (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 07:53 AM · On: Chapter One
I'll give most fics which promise a bad ass Edward a go, but sadly lose interest due to poor writing, one dimensional characters or a lack of plot. So you can imagine my delight and surprise when I stumbled across a fic that was strong in all of these factors in the first chapter alone. I can't help you any more than saying keep doing what your doing, it's golden.
Reviewer: Forbidden Twilighter (Anonymous) · Date: May 15, 2009 07:01 AM · On: Chapter One
Great so far!
Update when you can. Love You.
Reviewer: PCullen1974 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 06:08 AM · On: Chapter One
Very interesting start! I am intrigued and am looking forward to more!
Reviewer: tab83 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 05:41 AM · On: Chapter One
Loving this. Please update soon.
Reviewer: Venus_Star2_com (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 04:42 AM · On: Chapter One
Interesting concept
Normaly I wait unil 2 or 4 chapters are posted but the banner drew me in and I am looking forward to reading more
rachie
Reviewer: iWant2BaMonsterToo (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 04:36 AM · On: Chapter One
ooooh great start, i cant wait to read more
Reviewer: Shannon Carr (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 04:04 AM · On: Chapter One
Hmm...interesting. Sad story about Charlie, but the pacing as you revealed it to set up the story was well done. I'm looking forward to more.
Reviewer: hbgo (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 03:01 AM · On: Chapter One
Gotta love those bad boys
Reviewer: lady jane (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 02:41 AM · On: Chapter One
AHHHHHHHH feel a great story coming on!!!!! cant wait to read more!!!
Reviewer: anna123 (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 10:57 PM · On: Chapter One
Good start, looking forward to read more!! : D
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 10:23 PM · On: Chapter One
WOO HOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!THIS DEFINITELY HAS POTENTIAL FOR FUN!!!!!!
Reviewer: femflorest5 (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 09:20 PM · On: Chapter One
continue please, I want to see where you takes this story.
Reviewer: envy (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 08:55 PM · On: Chapter One
Sounds good. can't wait to read more
Reviewer: tremington (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 08:27 PM · On: Chapter One
I like where this is going! Please post soon!
Reviewer: clairesuter (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 08:25 PM · On: Chapter One
Hmm, can't wait to see where this is going!
Reviewer: littleangel531 (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 07:56 PM · On: Chapter One
you're off to a good start...please continue
Reviewer: sweetnsassy (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 07:38 PM · On: Chapter One
I like it so far. I'd like to read more. It seemed like something was missing at this part:
"As she walked past the other headstones, she wondered about these other people and their families. Every hour, every minute, probably every second, someone was gone forever, and then there were their families. Left behind, to deal with it all.It sucks.
She tried to leave discreetly, but it was too late, he heard her.
"I..um..hi?" she stuttered as he looked at her. "I, um, wasn’t eavesdropping or anything.'"
Is there a missing paragraph? All of a sudden he's there but it doesn't say when she first saw him there or what he was doing that she wasn't eavesdropping on.
Anyway, I look forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Yes, there was something missing. I guess it got messed up when I uploaded the chapter. The error is fixed now, so you can go check it out :) Thanks for pointing that out, btw, and I'm glad you're liking the story so far!
Reviewer: lavishone (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 07:08 PM · On: Chapter One
I am interested in seeing where this story is going. Wonder where Edward is going to take Bella...
Reviewer: Lee Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 06:58 PM · On: Chapter One
Hmmm, I like what I've read so far. I'd love to read the next chapter. I like you rEdward and Bella. I'll comment more when I read more! ;)
Reviewer: ashkan00dle (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 06:55 PM · On: Chapter One
rawwrr ;)
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