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Reviewer: BellaEdwardFan2009 (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 01:26 PM · On: Classifieds
Hey great story! Can't wait 4 the nxt chapter! Hope u get it up soon! Keep up the great work with the story and goodluck with the rest of it! Well, like I said, great job, keep it up, and gooduck with the rest of the story! I enjoy reading ur work and when my friends ask what's a good twilight fanfiction site, I say "twilighted.net" and then they ask if there r any stories I recomend for first-timers to "twilighted.net" I say "Captivated" by Paulette! They tell me that they can't wait to read it b/c most of the time if I recomend a story/fanfic to read, it almost always a good one. I've had friends come back to me after they've read it and tell me that I've once agian made an excellent recomendation, which is saying something b/c usually I will not recomend a story if fit's not a really good one, so goodluck, and keep up the great work! If you want to contact me outside of this website, just e-mail me at dancer_chick_1995@yahoo.com, dancer_chick_1995_lovesdancing.9513@yahoo.com, p.cody99@yahoo.com, or ashton07@bellsouth.net. But I'll most likely be on either the first or the third, so if you really want to tlk to me, I would suggest one of the two that I said I'm on most of the time! The first two have underscores(_) where the big spaces are! Sorry ab that! I had no clue that it would do that! Bye!
-BellaEdwardFan2009
Author's Response: Awww. Thank you soo much for telling your friends about my story! That really means alot to me and I'm soo grateful for all your support and kind words. I'm,like, about to cry!!
You can reach me at: lilbrowneyedangel89@yahoo.com if you'd like.
One agian, thank you- and the next chapter is being looked over by my beta so it will be up shortly.
Thanks agian,
Paulette
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Reviewer: hershortness (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 05:31 AM · On: Classifieds
Can't wait for what comes next. Thanks for writing this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading it! lol
Reviewer: twimommy (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2009 04:21 PM · On: Classifieds
Good thing she spoke up and didn't chicken out!
Author's Response: Haha,
I totally agree with you! Where would we be without Rob as Edward? lol
Reviewer: obsessed668 (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 05:14 PM · On: Classifieds
awwwww
so cute!!
im glad she's standing up for him,
love it
Cant wait for more
Oxo
Author's Response: hehe. Thank you. I'm glad your enjoying the story.
^_^
Reviewer: Edwardia Maven (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 08:15 AM · On: Classifieds
it's good so far :)
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 08:13 AM · On: Classifieds
This is truly interesting.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words.
^_^
Reviewer: magicdreams (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 07:00 AM · On: Classifieds
Ooh!! So glad you updated! You really portray Kristen true to form, I think. Quiet, but assertive. Playful at times. Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you for saying you like my portrayal of Kristen. I'm trying to do her justice and your review made me feel like I did a good job.
Next Update shall be soon ^_^
Reviewer: darkling (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 03:04 AM · On: Classifieds
Am enjoying this story, but I do have a bit of constructive criticism for you. This particular chapter seemed to get dragged out with details that weren'[t really necessary. They didn't move the plot forward, they just served as filler. Most of this chapter could have been handled in one paragraph by hitting the facts and moving on:
My mom woke me early, which was odd seeing as she's been bugging me about not getting enough sleep. I caught a shower and got dressed in my favorite jeans and tee and she drove me to the studio to meet with Catherine and some others about callbacks. Evidently they wanted my input, which I was pleased about, but I didn't want to come off as a diva. On the drive there I tried to catch a few more z's. I did a quickfix to my hair and smeared on a little lip gloss to be presentable. Catherine and the others greeted us amicably and the meeting went smoothly with about five guys being mentioned for callbacks. Nobody, however, mentioned Rob. At the risk of sounding like a diva, I interjected, "What about Rob? Patterson? Pattinson?"
See what I mean? That was an on the fly summary sort of, but it takes the whole chapter and plops it into one paragraph without the painful minute by minute playback. She took a shower, it was warm, she liked it warm, etc.
I'm not trying to be cruel, I just wanted to point out that perhaps it would make for more effective writing to work on the pacing. I know what it is like to write fanfic, I have done so many times in the past for other storylines. There are times when it just doesn't come together easily and you feel pressured to publish even though you probably should rework it more. I do appreciate your efforts and am enjoying the story, I just wanted to be honest and let you know what I thought. Please don't take the critique too harshly, it isn't meant to be hurtful, rather helpful.
Author's Response: Thank you for your suggestions. They are really valid points and I thank you for bringing them to my attention. I'm so happy that you are invested in this story enough to offer insight and let me know what you as the reader would like to see.
It was extremely helpful
^_^
Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 01:30 AM · On: Classifieds
I really am enjoying this story. I love how detailed the writing is and how it goes over the start of Rob and Kris' relationship.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad your likeing the details. I try to make it believable.
^_^
Reviewer: deep_blue (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 05:54 PM · On: Pressure
This is an interesting story =) RPOV is okay but maybe not repeating the whole chapter? How about you continue to the next chapter in his head instead?
I hope you will continue this story to the recent happening between them.
Keep up the good work =)
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! As for your request about next chapter being in RPOV, i'm afriad that chapter is already written and it's in K-POV, you'll understand why when I post it. I've decided to only do a POV change if it's neccesary to the story.
And I don't really have a plan as to how long this story will be. I have so many ideas! Especailly with all the new drama and rumors that are flying around. I could have so much fun with that,lol.
Reviewer: cherry (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 04:15 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
i actually like kris' pov better, and most def cant wait for next chap. it's enthralling!
Author's Response: Haha. Well,everyone has there own taste.
Thank you for your review.
Next chapter is on it's way.
Reviewer: Forbidden Twilighter (Anonymous) · Date: May 15, 2009 02:47 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
Love It =D
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: mandacullen (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2009 11:53 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
hey, i have to say first... 1st chapter was depressing without rob... lol and what was that of kris talking with her stomach??? just HILARIOUS!!
now, will be there another audition right?? with the kiss scene??? and this chapter was great, very funny!! rob is 1000000!! and he thinking like edward "stubborn, ungrateful brat! she should be dead by now..." was amazing and funny!!
looking forward the next chapter!!
=*
Author's Response: Lol, thank you so much. Yeah, the first chapter was kind of empty without Rob,huh? I felt sad without him. Which is why I re-wrote the second chp in his POV. hehe.
I'm glad you liked the bit with the stomach. = )
And yes, there will be a second audition scene, kissing and all. ^_^
haha, I'm happy you liked my RPOV. This is my first fan fic and I've never written another POV like his before so I was nervous. Your comments made me feel a whole lot better about it, thank you.
Next chapter will be up very soon!
^_^
Reviewer: hershortness (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 08:21 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
I am loving this story. I was hoping someone would write this story. You are doing a great job. Keep up the good work. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm happy your enjoying the story. Thank you.
^_^
Reviewer: magicdreams (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 07:59 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
OH MAN! That was excellent! Truly fabulous... you are a great writer, and this story is just... it's awesome! Keep it coming! : ) : )
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much. I'm very flattered you think i'm a good writer and like my story. I'm blushing,lol.
Reviewer: twimommy (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 05:01 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
Enjoyed the RPOV!
Can't wait for more
Author's Response: Thank you ^_^
Reviewer: amylily123 (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 02:44 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
*Clap clap*
Well done!
Chapter 4 is coming...
Reviewer: ladymagenta (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 05:12 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
Yay! Another wonderful chapter..Thanks for updating regularly! Wow! i really love what you did with Edward's POV. I'm not suprised if real Rob's Pattinson's audition experience is similar to your interpretation..Love it, love it! Can't wait for the second audition...Please update soon...
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much. I'm so happy you enjoyed this chapter. I'm pretty sure the real audition went nothing like this,but a girl can dream,lol. Either way, i'm flattered-it means the chapter seemed really realistic. So thank you.
Next chapter will be up soon.
^_^
Reviewer: Antonia Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 04:12 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
"Think, think. How does Jack Nicholson do it?" LOL That part was funny. So far the story has been GREAT. :)
Author's Response: haha, i'm glad you liked that line. It was kind of out there and I'm sure a lot of people didn't get it. So thanks.
Thanks alot for your review.
Reviewer: selene_romanov (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 03:27 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
dude it was awesome, everything from the RPOV was gravy, pure genius, any chance the second audition is the kissing scene?!? ;)
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so so much. I'm glad you liked the RPOV change. ^_^
And, yes, the second audition does involve the bedroom/kissing scene. hehe.
Reviewer: darkling (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 03:25 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
I like this very much, a good attention to detail and has that "real" feeling to it because of it. I would suggest that rather than just recapping the previous chapter in a different POV, that you advance the story a little past the recap with each chapter, so that the reader doesn't feel that it was a total rehash.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad your enjoying the story so far and like the details I put in. ^_^
And thank you for your suggestion. The next time I switch to RPOV it will definately be an original chapter. I just wanted to re-do this chapter in his POV to see what he was thinking during the audition, since it is so important to the story.
^_^
Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 02:37 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
Great chapter, I really enjoyed reading Rob's POV. Cannot wait for more Rob/Kristen salty goodess.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you liked the RPOV.
^_^
Reviewer: jenjan24 (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 12:49 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
I loved it!! I can't wait to read more!!
Author's Response: Thank you. More is on the way!
Reviewer: twiwriter (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 09:00 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face
I really like this. I can't wait to see what happens next!
--Blair
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review.
Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 01:34 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face
Awesome start of a story. I love that you're exploring from the auditions on. Great Job!!!!
Author's Response: Aww,thank you.
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