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Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 04:18 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 2:42pm
still going very well congrats. Can't wait to see what it like when she meets edward??? The razor comment is she into cutting her self or am I miss reading the enuwindow?
angel 057
Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 04:02 AM · On: Saturday 1st January 2005 - 1:30pm
Definetly, has my attention and I will continue to read future chapters. Your doing a great job by the way.
Angel 057
Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 03:35 AM · On: Saturday January 1st 2005 - 12:35am (V)
Seems interesting I am looking forward to reading the following chapters that are available. But I do like the start. Keep up the good work.
Angel 057
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen (Signed) · Date: October 29, 2009 01:00 PM · On: Chapter 9
I really like your story. It's interesting and unique. I'm looking forward to reading more.
One tiny thing--you really use way too many commas. This sentence, "The journey, was tediously boring" is an example. You don't need to put a comma between the subject and the verb. It's just a detail, but it can be distracting.
Please don't hate me. I'm an English teacher, so I'm picky. :o)
Reviewer: buckwheat (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2009 10:16 AM · On: Chapter 14 (vjgm)
O really like this story so keep it up please! it took awhile to get the last chapter up but is was worth the wait! Update soon!
Reviewer: dani18 (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2009 12:48 AM · On: Chapter 14 (vjgm)
i love your story i have read a few where bella is mute but yours is by far the best!!! D
Reviewer: Twilightlurrvver (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2009 12:08 AM · On: Chapter 14 (vjgm)
i can relate to the history part, ive known my oldest and best friend since we were both in cribs. i adore him to bits and if anything were to happen to him i would be incredibly sad.
Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2009 11:35 AM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
i love it.please update soon.
Reviewer: blessthecharter (Signed) · Date: July 07, 2009 09:04 AM · On: Saturday 1st January 2005 - 6:37pm
Can you stop with all the fucking commas?!?!?! Really, you don't need them. Especially not before prepositional phrase or between your subject and verb. Also, you should really make sure you proof read your chapters before posting. Quite a few times, you don;t even include a verb/subject. And although "that"s are normally left out in spoken English, sentences like "something they could never live without me" should be few and far between or use the word "that" when writing. NEVER subsitute a word with a comma. As much as I want to read this story, I can't. The grammar needs serious work that the BETAs obviously aren't catching. I think you have an amazing idea, but you true talent is clouded by the comma splices. The world deserves this story, and you deserve the chance to be published and adored. Feel free to email the chapters to me, and I will edit them.
Reviewer: lucyv (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 06:10 AM · On: Saturday January 1st 2005 - 12:35am (V)
Dear, you seem to have dropped the story. Still I hope against hope that you'll return to it 'cause it's really worth it! Your style is great, so is the idea... It just breaks my heart that your Bella might never be happy again. Please, please finish the story!
Reviewer: Sheaden (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2009 07:43 AM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
I like it and would like oread more. : )
Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 07:42 AM · On: Saturday January 1st 2005 - 12:35am (V)
Good intro chapter. I read a story similar to this one, so I'm curious how this one pans out. Good job so far!
Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: May 29, 2009 11:06 AM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
Looking forward to the story picking up! I'm interested in what happens!
Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: May 29, 2009 10:24 AM · On: Monday 3rd January 2005 - 5:25pm
The cutting thing throws me off a bit, but I like the story regardless.
Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: May 29, 2009 10:01 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 2:42pm
Looking forward to longer chapters! And of course the big move to Forks!
Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: May 29, 2009 09:31 AM · On: Saturday January 1st 2005 - 12:35am (V)
Interesting beginning! Before reading I found your chapter titles interesting too. Now, of course, I understand.
Can't wait for the rest of your story! I love long fanfic! Happy writing!
Reviewer: dnabgeek (Signed) · Date: May 26, 2009 08:42 AM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
you have to have filler.. not all enteries in a diary can be ground breaking... it wouldn't be realisitc :)
Reviewer: serchn4heavensg8 (Signed) · Date: May 25, 2009 08:46 PM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
I like it so far!! Just wish they were longer chapters.
:-) Keep writing!
Reviewer: lucyv (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 06:26 PM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
I like the story a lot - it's nothing like anything else i've read here so far. The only thing I can ask for is PLEASE UPDATE SOONER AND MAKE IT BIGGER!
I feel so sorry for Bella. Why would people be so mean to her? It's quite common for kids, i know, but teachers? Our family doctor says 10-16 year olds are like wolves trying to tear each apart. It's a part of their psychology she says. I hope your Bella survives. I really like her and I can't wait for an update.
Reviewer: mjbabe58 (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 03:37 PM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
This is so gooood!!!! i usually read the whole story and then review(well i read whatever is posted!) this is so good, so raw! it's sad, yet for some reason i feel like i can relate to Bella. Now don't think i'm a emo mute, i'm not. Just the whole being called a freak thing. I'm the captain of the cheerleaders and President of my school, but there is always jealousy and people who call you names, I also have a strange obsession with Michael Jackson, so people obviously make fun of me for that, and it makes me relate to Bella, it's so amazing, when yuo can make someone relate to your character, it's the true sign of a great author! Very well done
Snaps, claps, and lollipops for you
Reviewer: Venus_Star2_com (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 02:09 PM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
Wow...i just read all chapters in one sitting...and I wished there were more....so edward is a vampire in this story i guess it will be revealed soon....
poor bella....something must've happened BIG TIME and I'm looking forward to more
rachie
Reviewer: 8th-cullen-is-here (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 12:24 PM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
ummmz i like it... dont get me wrong its good but do we ever see outside of her diary... umm like does she tell her story away from the diary... it would be a big step but other then that i liked it cant wait to read more
Reviewer: Kitten the Wolf (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 12:00 PM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
Sweet, you updated.
Reviewer: JShay (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 11:58 AM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
I am convinced high school is one of the cruelest places on earth and that you can find more respect in some prisons than you can there at times.
I can't believe even the teachers....absolutely ridiculous. I can't wait for it to progress more. This should be interesting with Bella unable to make straight comments to Edward.
Reviewer: Kaytee (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 10:15 AM · On: Friday 7th January 2005 - 7:46pm
i can't wait till edward comes back
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