Reviewer: candycane323 (Signed) · Date: April 21, 2009 02:21 AM · On: Chapter 7
Good idea but there are WAY too many grammer mistakes. Get someone to edit, or proofread a little better. And, you put commas in where they don't belong a lot. It makes the story kind of awkward to read. Again, proofread or get an editor.
Other than that, I think the story sounds great. I really want
Reviewer: candycane323 (Signed) · Date: April 21, 2009 02:21 AM · On: Chapter 7
Good idea but there are WAY too many grammer mistakes. Get someone to edit, or proofread a little better. And, you put commas in where they don't belong a lot. It makes the story kind of awkward to read. Again, proofread or get an editor.
Other than that, I think the story sounds great. I really
Reviewer: candycane323 (Signed) · Date: April 21, 2009 02:21 AM · On: Chapter 7
Good idea but there are WAY too many grammer mistakes. Get someone to edit, or proofread a little better. And, you put commas in where they don't belong a lot. It makes the story kind of awkward to read. Again, proofread or get an editor.
Other than that, I think the story sounds great. I re
Reviewer: sweetcrimefighter (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 08:06 PM · On: Chapter 7
LOVE IT! UD SOOOOOOONNNNN PLEASE!
Reviewer: Akalei88 (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 07:29 PM · On: Chapter 7
I just read your story and it seems promising so far, I'm interested to see what happens next.
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 12:53 PM · On: Chapter 7
Its coming along!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm guessing that in your story Edward will be able to read Bella's mind, so he won't be mute to him?
Reviewer: Autumnmissa (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 12:35 PM · On: Monday 3rd January 2005 - 5:25pm
GAH! Why are teenagers or kids in general so freekin mean? Things that they don't understand, that they have gossip as their 'source' make people's lives miserable. How many more days til Forks? Just countig them down! More please.
Reviewer: instantkarmagirl (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 12:19 PM · On: Monday 3rd January 2005 - 5:25pm
Poor Bella. Get her to Forks so that Edward can help her!!
Thanks for posting!
Reviewer: buckwheat (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 11:38 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
mmm I love it!!!! I love the diary perspective you've got going there! Well update ASAP please!!!!!
Reviewer: nothing_is_as_it_seems (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 04:07 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
:) liking it :)
Reviewer: roze (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2009 03:06 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
I love your story please update soon
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 10:09 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
And for that brief moment, where they didn’t notice me, I wanted more than anything, to be in their very position. Kissing the one I loved the most. Poor Bella she seems so trapped in her head. I hope she's treated better when she moves.
Reviewer: Blood donor (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 09:26 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
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Reviewer: sweetcrimefighter (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 08:06 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
Good chappie, can't wait till she gets to Forks! UD soon please!
Reviewer: vamppy (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 04:56 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
so far so good cant wait for next chapter
Reviewer: JShay (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 01:00 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
Hey, I really like getting to know Bella. Thankyou for posting so often. It is nice to be able to follow a story consistently from near the beginning. I can't wait for Forks though. Happy Writing.
Reviewer: Autumnmissa (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 12:53 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
more plz...
Reviewer: wandering-home (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 12:00 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
Hm. It's good, but I'm not sure about it yet... (I'm picky, I know)
I'll keep an eye out for the next couple of updates.
Interesting idea.
Keep updating!
Reviewer: Sheaden (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 11:31 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
Interesting so far. Would like to see what else you do with the story
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 11:09 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 11:50pm
More Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: nothing_is_as_it_seems (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 04:17 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 2:42pm
OMG loving this story :) hee hee wish i knew wot the acciedent was but im geussing it has something to with Melanie right?? lol can't wait for the next update hee hee
Reviewer: Camilla (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2009 03:18 AM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 2:42pm
Very sad, but the diary form makes for an interesting reading. I hope that the plot will not mirror Twilight page by page, as I could not stand it. Even if it is a long story I do need to read something that evolves differently.
Well, I'll be looking for updates
Reviewer: sweetcrimefighter (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2009 06:46 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 2:42pm
great update! please ud again soon!
Reviewer: JShay (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2009 05:13 PM · On: Sunday 2nd January 2005 - 2:42pm
Sweet. I dunno why but I really like this story so far. It is deep, serious and she has issues. I wanna see how they work out. Keep it coming. I'll be patiently waiting.
Reviewer: JShay (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2009 05:09 PM · On: Saturday 1st January 2005 - 6:37pm
I really like the serious tempo here. I can't wait for longer chapters and when she actually gets to Forks. Is this all going to be BPOV? Just curious. Not that I mind.
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