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Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2009 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 1
Another great chapter Jay. The dialogue between your characters was again, sharp and sassy. I love this moody Bella, and dogmatic unassuming Edward.
Reviewer: justafan (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 09:17 AM · On: Chapter 5
That was a fun chapter.Though I'm not sure what the pain was on their noses, so I'm guessing it was their electricity that flows between them. any way can't wait for the next update.
Author's Response: They bumped noses cause the ringing of the phone scared the shit out of them. It ruined their "moment".
Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 04:55 AM · On: Chapter 5
i'm really hoping the person on the other line of that phone is not tanya and he's got some bitchy exgirlfriend drama going on :( i love this story, bellas funny, i can't wait fore more :)
Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 02:23 AM · On: Chapter 4
:) Loved it!! Bella the party girl. Thank ye jesus Edward is coming on to her. His persistance is admirable!
Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 02:05 AM · On: Chapter 3
Thank you so much for putting Converses on Edward. Muuah.
Excellent chapter. Love the tension and electricity between Bella and Edward in this one!
Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 01:46 AM · On: Chapter 2
Bella the pothead? Awesome. That fits you know that? Bella lovin' the chronic. I like Angela as the typical preacher's kid and Bella's partner in crime and witty repartee. Better actually.
You are doing an amazing job with this fic. It's different, and I've read so many fics it's really nice to come across one that is original.
Reviewer: justafan (Signed) · Date: April 28, 2009 03:41 PM · On: Chapter 4
I love this story. Again Bella cracks me up,her singing is hilarious. And Edward ever the gentleman. Thanks for the update I've been waiting patiently.
Reviewer: jules cullen (Signed) · Date: April 28, 2009 03:11 AM · On: Chapter 4
Oh my goddd I LOVE this story!! This made my day :) Can't wait to see what happens nexttt
Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: April 28, 2009 12:23 AM · On: Chapter 4
So happy to see the update. I hope Edward sticks around for a while!
Reviewer: Irritable_Grizzzly (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 05:29 PM · On: Chapter 2
Hmmmm...well now she seems like the girl who PLAYS Bella...
I'm assuming if she's spending her free time getting f-d up, she has some issues. Lots of issues.
Antisocial? Check. Insecurities up the wazoo? Check.
Those are book Bella's issues, only they obviously deal with it in different ways. This Bella obviously uses substances to forget her life. I feel so bad for her. That's no way to live.
Reviewer: Irritable_Grizzzly (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 1
You know, this is really weird to say, but I feel you've actually captured the Bella from the book. It's like, if Bella said the crap that was inside her head and had no filter, this is how she'd be!
Bella turned inside-out, you know?
If she hadn't been an only child and had to defend herself, I think book Bella would have been like this.
I mean, look at it this way: You're a hundred year old vampire? You wanna kill me? OK. Just let me go to a secluded spot with you and not tell anyone about it. Oh, and I totally don't mind that you're a vampire. I completely dig you. That blood-drinking thing? Whatever with that. I don't care. Let's make out.
So you're not worried about going to a house full of vampires, you're just worried those vampires won't like you? Yeah.
See? You've captured her essence! I love it! The writing is snappy and for once, stuttering Edward! He's always this smooth-talker and she's got him stuttering over himself! GREAT!
Reviewer: RowanMoon (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2009 08:00 AM · On: Chapter 1
Hey Jay! Saw that you checked out my story, so I thought I would return the favor and take a lookie loo at yours!
You have GREAT turn of phrase. This was the first one to impress me:
"It's left a burn mark somewhere in the abyss of my black heart, but there's no pain."
I ADORE your Bella. She's quick witted and saucy..but still self deprecating and honest. You kept the core there and gave her some more...ooomph.
Edward's reaction to her is really great. I bet he was smitten with her right away. I know I am! I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: justafan (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 11:34 AM · On: Chapter 3
Oh! I can't wait for an update, I love Bella in this story.I can't wait until she get her hands on Edward.
Reviewer: Melsie (Signed) · Date: March 22, 2009 06:49 PM · On: Chapter 3
Oh lordy! Alice is JUST like my sister, seriously. Do you know her or something? lol she's cool as hell now but when we were younger, damn she was on my ass! JUst being protective and shit but still, let a girl party and breathe!
Love the fic; love the relationship between Bella and Rose the most so far. That hardcore bitchiness that actually hides genuine love and care is always fun to read, prolly fun to write too =)
Melsie!
Author's Response: Oh my, thank goodness I'm not the only one who knew an Alice like mine! It's true they learn to kick back and relax, but it was irritating before. I'm just happy =)
Reviewer: khhc (Signed) · Date: March 22, 2009 03:11 PM · On: Chapter 3
its good. i hope she doesnt shit on eddie....
Author's Response: I had a mental picture of that in a totally different context. =D
Reviewer: kARLOTITA09 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 07:10 PM · On: Chapter 3
im irritated at alice... why is she all up in the bella's casE?
Author's Response: It'll be explained as the story progresses. You should meet the real one lol
Reviewer: Chickey (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 06:41 PM · On: Chapter 3
BAHHHHH Nooo....It can't end there *zombie* moooorreee brraaaiinnnss
Loving your story, can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Shucks, thanks =)
Reviewer: keerplunk2809 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 05:01 PM · On: Chapter 3
aaagggrrr...!!! omg!!! hahahaha... this is soo cool!! i'm totally squeakig right now!!
Author's Response: squeakage *thumbs up*
Reviewer: twilighted007 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 02:36 PM · On: Chapter 3
I dont understand?
Why does alice keep nagging bella about what shes doing?
Author's Response: Over protective sister motto really, but it'll make sense later. I kind of started the story right smack in the middle of their lives.
Reviewer: jewelryjunkie (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 01:12 PM · On: Chapter 1
I'm really liking this story! I hate to be a nitpick, but the only thing that really stands out is that Bella putting herself down is a little extreme. I totally understand your trying to develop her character, but it just seems that sometimes she takes it a little too far.
I hope she gets a backbone and some more self esteem! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Yes, it's true she puts herself down, but I've actually known a few people who think the same way. They're gorgeous from the inside out, but they constantly belittle who they are. I know it's irritating the way she sees herself, but this is why Edward enters. I'm glad you're enjoying this though. Thank you =)
Reviewer: kg15 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 09:56 AM · On: Chapter 3
Can't wait to see what happens at the party!
Author's Response: I love party scenes.
Reviewer: kimpy0464 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 02:33 AM · On: Chapter 3
Aww, this is sweet, and I love Edward's persistence at getting through Bella's wall. I'm curious to find out what caused her wall in the first place, something you eluded to with Derek's comments. Soo, I'm pretty anxious to see what happens at the party, update whenever, just make it soon!
Author's Response: Aw, shucks. I'm so glad you picked up on Derek's comment. Bella's wall is a pain in the butt, but very real. =)
Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 02:25 AM · On: Chapter 3
Oh man. Please don't leave us hanging too long. I can't wait to see how Edward handles Bella at the party!
Author's Response: I would never! Edward handling Bella *smirks*
Reviewer: kg15 (Signed) · Date: March 18, 2009 03:25 PM · On: Chapter 2
Good chapter, update soon!
Reviewer: lovelikethemovies (Signed) · Date: March 18, 2009 07:53 AM · On: Chapter 2
I love the Bella&Angela scene! ..and the red eyes + YouTube comment, too.
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