I love Breaking Dawn in Edward's point of view!!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I do, too! :)

Whoa. I don't think I've ever read a BD fic that's ever embodied or encapsulated as much of the EPOV distilled from Stephenie Meyer. It's angsty, and wry, and sardonic, all sorts of 'distracted', and way too many steps ahead. I can only imagine how long it takes you to write a single chapter - and feel finished with it. This definately goes to the top of my list.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

Edward is highly emotional, and his mood can change in a fraction of a second; sometimes even I have a hard time keeping up with him! ;)

And yes, it can be very time-consuming to construct a chapter and feel good about it. Actually, the one I'm working on now has so much in it that I've had to break it into two segments.

I hope that you'll continue to enjoy reading this story!

I think for me the most perfect moment of all was the scene with Renesme and the flowers - it was so joyous and beautiful in its simplicity, and having her 'show' her parents how she saw them was lovely.   I would guess that might be your favourite. 

That said, as always all your 'extras' fit exactly like lost bits of the puzzle! 

Author's Response:

That little family moment is joyous and carefree, and it is very beautiful... but it's not my favorite.

My favorite emotional moment comes when Edward and Bella are in their room, talking about the trip to Brazil. It may seem a bit trivial, but I love that scene because it shows them putting aside their worries about Renesmee and coming together to find comfort and strength through each other. A close second, however, is the part where Bella fiddles with Edward's wedding ring. That is simply adorable.

And thank you! I'm so glad you enjoy all the 'extras'!

I LOVED this chapter.  It felt way more complete and satisfying than the same one in BD.  The scenes directly from the book are way more enjoyable with all your extra details in Edward's thoughts.  And as for the extras...I truly can't choose....I loved Renesmee putting the flowers all over E and B.  Especially having kids, that is actually something I could see a toddler do. To me, it made Renesmee more realistic than any other scene in BD.  I also liked the little exchange when Bella played with Edward's wedding ring, as well as his desperate thoughts with Bella leaving him to go to Italy. (SO sweet..)  I adore your Edward!   I knew the gift from Charlie would be a wolf.....that was a fun part to read. 

Regardless, I can't tell you how much I look forward to your chapter updates. I absolutely LOVE your book. Thanks for making my dreary, rainy Chicago Sunday so much more enthralling.  Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

The 'flower' scene is very cute. While I was writing, I remembered when I was little I used to pick dandelions and weave them into little crowns, and I thought that Renesmee would do something similar with her parents. I really wanted to add more interaction with the three of them as a family, because there isn't a whole lot of those moments in the original novel.

And my favorite funny moment is Charlie's gift to Renesmee. I was laughing as I pictured it in my mind. But my favorite emotional moment is the scene where Bella and Edward are in their bedroom talking about the trip to Brazil. I love it because they use that time of respite to focus on one another and just share their love. But a close second is the part where Bella plays with Edward's wedding ring.

There should another update on the way in a few days. :)

Excellent chapter well done, can't wait for more.

 

As for your favourite i really don't know, but i really loved the little bit of just Bella, Edward and Nessie having some alone time with Ness covering them  in flowers. In the real BD there was very little parenting time and that part was really sweet.

Oh and i also liked the stuffed wolf lol.

Author's Response:

Thank you!

I agree with you about the lack of parent/child interaction between Edward, Bella, and Renesmee – which is why I came up with the flower scene. It struck me as something very carefree and idyllic, and I wanted to put a little 'fluff' in the chapter.

Renesmee's gift is my favorite funny moment. My most favorite scene is with Bella and Edward in their bedroom, discussing the planned trip to Brazil, because they use that time to find strength and comfort in each other despite the circumstances surrounding their daughter's future.

This chapter was very good. Brilliant job of doing the 3 months that were kind of bare in the book. It's difficult to decide which is my favourite bit because they are all very good but I think the best bit was when Nessie walked in with the stuffed wolf. I was picturing everyones expressions in my head and I was lmao. I just wish Rosalie had been there when it happened. Her thoughts would have been HILARIOUS!! :)

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Renesmee's gift is my favorite funny moment in this chapter. And you're right – Rose's reaction would be highly entertaining to witness.

But my most favorite moment is between Bella and Edward when they're talking about the trip to Brazil. I love it because it shows that even though there is so much uncertainty surrounding Renesmee, they can still turn to one another for comfort and strength and can just celebrate their love freely.

I absolutely love everything in this chapter, but if you want me to be more specific then I would have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed the part when Bella was reciting the Tennyson poem to Nessie and when she was determined to go to Italy to see the Volturi alone (the conversation B had with E) These two moments really describes B&E's relationship and what Bella truly means to Edward. Oh ... the plush wolf toy that Nessie got was priceless ... okay, make that three moments that I loved in this chapter ... hee hee.

Btw, your version of BD in my opinion is way, way better than the original!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the Tennyson poem! I had looked up his work to see the entire poem that Renesmee begins to read, and was just digging around when I read "Now Sleeps The Crimson Petal". Like I said in the Author's Note, the line about a 'silent meteor' hit me like a ton of bricks, and I had to use it in this chapter.

It was fun, too, to fill in the blanks in regard to Edward and Bella's discussion about Italy. He is very intense about her safety, even though she's now a vampire, and I wanted to capture that kind of explosive emotion.

My favorite funny moment is when Renesmee shows off her stuffed wolf; the best line in my opinion is Bella's: "It is pretty...cute."

The most poignant scene for me is between Bella and Edward when they're in their bedroom talking about the trip to Brazil. It seems almost mundane, but I love it because it shows that even though there is so much uncertainty surrounding Renesmee's future, they can turn to one another for comfort and strength and find freedom in celebrating their love.

And thank you very much for your compliments!

I just knew he would take her back to the meadow eventually. It's a very special place for them both and even I would have a hard time not going back, to reminisce and to rekindle things.  You wrote this perfectly and I applaud you wholeheartedly for it!

"He will not make it easy on me, I know – but now that I have this hope, this knowledge that I can redeem myself in the eyes of at least one person who perceives me as something other than human – perhaps I can one day look at my reflection and see the man that Bella loves and not just the monster."

I felt exactly this way as the reaction for Edward in this situation. Through Renesmee, Edward feels like he achieves this goal of a loving being and not a monster. That perhaps there is hope for him after all. Beautiful, hon. Just beautiful.

Author's Response:

The added 'meadow moment' is one of my favorites that I've written thus far, and I'm so glad that my readers love it, too.

Edward's sort of epiphany in regard to Charlie's opinion of him was a treat to write. And you totally caught what I was hoping to convey through that passage – that Edward is not limited to what he is but who he is to Bella and Renesmee, and who he can become in the future. Hope is kind of a recurring theme throughout later chapters of this story, so it's neat to me that you picked up on it in this chapter. Just hold that thought – it comes into play later on!

And thank you so much! :)

Ma'am, I cannot begin to say how wonderful your interpretation is. My try at this pales in comparison, that's for sure. You write so well, so descriptively. And, sare I say, much better than even Stephenie herself would have written this. You add things I was curious about and you remind us the whole newness again of this moment in the story.

Besides, your writing sends me into fits of giggles every time I read Alice talking about Bella's wardrobe. I can only imagine how the cottage scene will take.

"They're the only pair that matches the dress, and they're from Chanel, Edward! Do you know how many women would kill to have these shoes?"

Perfect Alice inner dialogue with Edward! Thank you for doing this and I am going to stop here and go on to the next chapter. :)

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I've read your story, "Consummation", and thought it was very good. (I should have left a review, I know – but I will!)

A lot of the things I added were moments I was also curious about, or that I thought could have happened during the course of the story.

And Alice... ah, how I love Alice. She is so much fun to write. There are quite a few little moments for her throughout later chapters; I hope you enjoy those as much as these earlier chapters.

Awwwww that last part was so beautiful. You did a fantasic job write more please.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

The next chapter will be up soon, I promise.

Oh. That was just beautiful. I loved it. Well done. xxx

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

Love it!  You have really stayed true to the story, thank you!

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Thank you very much!