So really brilliantly written.  It is a beautiful story that we already know but somehow you add such richness and depth.  I look forward to more .

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

Another great chapter....keep them coming!

Author's Response:

Thank you!

The next chapter should be up soon.

This is the first time that I have ever gotten involved with fan fiction. When I read the first four books of Twilight – I found myself not wanted to let go of Edward and Bella. I then proceeded to read the first 12 chapters of Midnight Sun. I liked this better. Through Edward’s perspective there was a new edge to otherwise subtle characters, a deeper look into his thoughts and not just Bella’s. Because of this I am both incredibly happy and bitter at the same time. I am very happy that I chose this to read as my first fan fiction piece. I love the way it is written – from Edward’s point of view. More than that – I absolutely adore the fact that this writing didn’t stray too far from the original book, direct quotes and all. I am glad that you stayed true to form and just expanded on what was already great to begin with – this makes it more real. It’s not like you took away Edward’s powers and made them normal people – after all that would be completely out of line :) The reason that I am bitter is because I know that not all fan fiction stays true to the original – I have heard that some are just downright.. Wrong! So with this all in mind I just wanted to say that I really did enjoy reading this. I look forward to the first part of the book from Edward’s perspective as well – maybe this is the much needed material that will fill the void of Midnight Sun (if it ever gets finished *sigh*). Once again thank you for not straying too far from the original and giving a better insight to our beloved Edward. Keep writing!!

Author's Response:

Well, I'm honored that you chose my story as your first fan fiction.

It has always been my goal to keep as true to the characters as possible. I love each one of them so much, and wouldn't want to change a single thing about them.

And yes, there are fics out there that can be very OOC (out of character). I try very hard to keep my story out of that category – not that there's anything wrong with creative expression, I just enjoy Stephenie's characters as they are that I prefer to write and read stories that stay relatively true to canon.

So, thank you for the review, and I share your longing to see "Midnight Sun" completed. We can always hope!

oh my god, i cried. this is my new favorite meadow scene. i got goosebumps just reading it. you are so poetic! kudos.

Author's Response:

Aww, I hope it was a good cry. :)

The meadow scene was a lot of fun to write, so I'm glad that you enjoyed it – and I'm flattered that it's your new favorite moment. Thank you!

I dont think it was to much angst, or well, It was atleast the "right" kind of angst, something thats makes me want to read more. I love your long chapter aswell. :)

Author's Response:

Adding in a strong dose of angst was kind of inevitable, given the direction of the story line, but I'm glad that you thought it was the right kind of angst. It's a staying factor in the next few chapters, and then it comes to a head during one of my favorite moments in the entire story.

Thank you very much for reviewing!

I thought this was excellent.  And no, not too agonizing!  I keep saying this but honestly I just absolutely adore the way you flesh out these scenes. 

Thinking back on the books, I swear I think Bella's smarter than the other vampires.  In Eclipse she was the one to figure out the whole thing with Alice's visions and the Seattle newborns, she was the one who outwitted Jasper and Alice in the airport in Twilight, and now she's the one to figure out what caused the Volturi to come. 

Anyway, thanks for the new chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

I think that Bella is incredibly intuitive, both as a human and a vampire. It's not exactly that she's smarter – she just sees things a bit differently and is able to make connections that most people would miss. That's just my opinion, though.

It's a dark chapter but necessary. beautifully written (as always) =)

Author's Response:

Yes, it is dark – as is the next chapter, and part of the following chapter as well. But, like you said, it's necessary.

And thank you!

Bella stares back at me with an anguished fervor that matches my own, and I lose myself in the depths of her wide, beautiful eyes as the stars wheel in their courses across the black velvet sky and the peach-and-rose glow of the sunrise paints the horizon with yellow-gold light.

this is fantastically well written-its so poetic! its wonderfull to read but, it does pull at your heartstrings as you read it; not many authors can do that!
congrats on another great chapter, i can't wait for more!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

I try to sort of paint mental pictures through my writing, because I am a very visual person with an overactive imagination. :)

And I'm glad that you felt the emotion of this chapter; the intensity is there in the original text, and I hoped to channel that and maybe amplify it because it's happening through Edward's eyes.

As for the punched in the gut bit, I can agree. I have traitor tears on my cheeks for proof, too. Darn it.

The most beautiful line however was this:

"We are halves of a whole – fused into one through body, mind and soul – and the proof of our union is a living, breathing miracle, sleeping beneath our hands."

It summed up exactly how I knew he felt and how the whole situation meant to him: Bella and Renesmee are his everything.

 

Author's Response:

I would give you a tissue if I could. My poor heart has been wrenched quite a few times as I've been writing this story, but in a way I'm glad, because it helps me understand what Edward and everyone else must have been going through in these moments.

And yes, I really like that line, too. Edward has found all he could ever need in Bella and Renesmee, and he's terrified of losing them, because he would lose himself in the process. That intensity of emotion and raw need is what gets to me the most, I think.

Perfect, as usual.

Reading this is like the ultimate indulgence, really. So, so beautiful and enchanting.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Mmm, an indulgence... Like chocolate. :) Thank you very much for the compliment; it really is the ultimate indulgence for me to try and climb inside Edward's head and see through his eyes.

I have to say I found the part where Edward, Bella and Renesmee are in a glad together, with E/B curled up, and Renesmee picking wildflowers to put over them. THe most siginificant part was when little Nes climbed between them, putting her hands to their faces, showing them themselves.

The way you described it reminded me of the ending of Revenge of The Sith, with Padmé's funeral. She was beautiful, covered in flowers tucked in her hair, the look of a peaceful death. Which, inadvertly reminded me of Edward and Bella... and their impending battle with the Volturi coming later. When they thought everyone would die...

For me, this was foreshadowing and I found the scene (in its innocent form) intriguing and delightfully light-hearted.

Author's Response:

Wow... I never really thought of it that way. I love using foreshadow in my stories, but I honestly didn't have it in mind when I wrote the 'flower' scene. Since you've mentioned it, it definitely fits with the context of the plot.

And I like it. A lot. Thank you!

My mindset when I wrote that scene was to show a little more family interaction between Edward, Bella, and Renesmee, and to insert a bit of carefree innocence into a timeline that will soon be utterly decimated. But I REALLY like the comparison you drew between that moment and the finale of RotS; it fits so well that I wish I'd thought of it first. :)

My favorite moment, however, came when Bella and Edward were in their room talking over the plans to go to Brazil. It is a time of respite for them from worrying about their daughter, and they connect emotionally on such a deep level that they find strength and comfort from each other to sort of put aside their anxieties for a while.

I love it, you capture Edward brilliantly, and even though i know how the story ends im desperate to read more just to get a further insight into the mind of Edward Cullen and the thoughts of his family around him.

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