Enjoying it very much.  It's a wonder how you managed to put thoughts with all the different characters, yet Edward's gift mandated it.  I think this is much harder than what was presented in canon, don't you think? 

 

Author's Response:

Thank you!

It does make it more challenging to write because of Edward's ability to hear everyone's thoughts, but I do my best to keep it as close to the original text as possible.

I know SM had to keep the stuff with the new vampires short considering how long the book was, but I always felt kind of cheated because I was fascinated with them. It's a glimpse into vampire culture that we missed out on. So this was a lot of fun for me to read. Thanks very much for writing!

Author's Response:

Thank you!

I'm sure that when the "Twilight Saga Official Guide" is released, that will have more detailed information about the other vampires – but until that time, I want to try and make them more real through my writing.

And I'm glad you have fun reading this story; I always have a blast while I write. :)

I like it alot too.  Actually, I think you put it more succinctly than the great SM herself.  I also enjoy the E/B interaction you provide.  I missed that with all the drama in BD.  Good job!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

There is so much going on in "Breaking Dawn", the romance between Edward and Bella kind of became a footnote in the story line. I missed their moments together, too, and try my best to insert little 'fillers' within the original novel's plot.

Briliant, brilliant, brilliant. Have I told you that I love this?

 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Another excellent chapter! I like how you use subtle allusions like the word 'muse' though that has popped up maybe too many times now? I can not wait to read more!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

You know, I always wonder if I'm using a particular word too many times. But I really like 'muses', 'musings', and so forth as a substitute for 'think', 'contemplate', etc. I'll have to bear that in mind while writing future chapters. It's sort of a pet peeve of mine to use the same verbage over and over again in a story. I'm kind of OCD sometimes when I proofread. ;P

The next chapter should be up very soon.

Another great chapter.  I liked hearing Edward's side of things as they realize Aro could use he and bella against each other to get what he wants.  Very scary and sad.

I once again am amazed at how your depiction of the "thoughts" Edward hears flow perfectly and make perfect sense with the rest of the conversations the characters are having. 

I love this story! Your update once again made my day! Can't wait for more...

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

I think it was a kind of terrible epiphany for both Edward and Bella when they realized that Aro could get either of them to do whatever he wanted just by threatening the other. And you're right: that is a very frightening idea.

Adding the thoughts of various characters is a lot of fun for me; it allows me to add a bit more creativity without detracting from the original text. I'm glad that you think it's meshing well.

The next chapter should be up by the end of the week, and it is considerably 'meatier' than this one.

Loved it ... just as always!

have i writien yet how much i appreciate your story? well i do. very much, keep up the good work! i'm looking forward to the next chapter and the next story you write. =)

Author's Response:

I think you might have... but that's okay! Thank you very much for your review!

The next chapter will be up soon. And I have written two other stories related to the Twilight universe, but I haven't posted them on this site yet. I'll get to it eventually...

Loved this chapter and I can't wait for the next chapter!

 

{{hugs}}

 

Mac

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I'm hoping to post the next chapter by the end of the week at the latest.

Ok- your favorite part was the wolf toy? Or the chess match? Both had me laughing! You are an amazing writer! Keep going please! I love how you worked the chess symbolism in. Perfection.

Author's Response:

The stuffed wolf is my favorite funny moment, though the chess match is a close second.

My favorite emotional moment is when Edward and Bella are in their room, talking about the planned trip to Brazil. It seems a bit mundane, but I love it so much because it demonstrates that in spite of everything that's happening in their lives, they can still turn to one another for comfort and celebrate their love.

And, since I was writing about chess, I just HAD to add a little symbolism with the white queen. The opportunity was too good to pass up. ;D

this line really irritates me,

Jacob dashes across the lawn to the fringe of the woods on the far side. "I can share," he pleads.

I mean seriously, he knows hes in big trouble, Bella, Renesmee's Mother says shes mine not yours( which is totally true after all) and he says I can share ?!!  What an idiot!!  She should have killed him right there!

Author's Response:

LOL, I totally understand where you're coming from.

If I was Bella, I would be having a conniption, too. Jacob should count himself very lucky that Seth stepped in to save his butt, or he would have found himself without a head.

Just found this story (4/24).  Very good job so far.  I always thought there was a lack of affection (Fatherly or otherwise) from Edward towards Renesmee after her birth...we only get a couple of moments and his tone when talking to Bella about her.  

Edward's thoughts are heartwarming to read.  Thanks.

 

 

Author's Response:

Thank you!

I agree that Edward's feelings as a father got sort of pushed aside in "Breaking Dawn", so I've been trying to insert little moments here and there throughout my story that showcase his love for his daughter.