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Reviewer: ejh0904 (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 06:10 AM · On: Memories
Love how you portray Edward's growing friendship with Seth in this one. Also enjoyed Edward's irritation with Jacob for impressing Renesmee. Edward was always a protective boyfriend/husband, but now we can see him as a protective father too. Very nice.
Author's Response: Seth is such an awesome character; I really enjoy writing him, and his friendship with Edward.
And I always picture Edward as the overprotective father. It fits with his personality, and, as you said, he's always behaved that way with Bella.
Reviewer: ejh0904 (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 06:05 AM · On: Promised
I loved how this one focused more on Edward's feelings toward Renesmee - how much he loves and adores his little daughter. I also noticed the bit where you spoke about his regret of ever considering her to be a mindless monster that he was intent on killing before he could hear her mind; that was interesting as well.
Author's Response: I felt like Edward needed to come to terms with what his original intentions had been when Bella's pregnancy became known. He makes a complete switch after hearing Renesmee's thoughts while she's in the womb, and when Bella awakens and asks about their daughter, the original text says that he spoke of her in awe. I wanted to try and capture a little bit of how his perception changed from hostility to embracing his role as a father.
Reviewer: ejh0904 (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 06:03 AM · On: First Hunt
My favorite part of this one was the way Edward kept fighting his "selfish impulses" to make love to his wife. He's so utterly selfless it's insane, but he's still Edward so he still feels less good than he really is. I love being inside his head.
Author's Response: Yes, his selflessness is an embedded character trait that affects every part of his existence. I think Edward was prepared to wait longer before Bella was 'mature' enough as a newborn to continue their physical relationship, but because she wakes up as a highly lucid vampire, his desires are heightened.
And I love being inside his head, too. It's a fascinating place.
Reviewer: ejh0904 (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 05:59 AM · On: Awakening
Found your story and I absolutely love it. Now I'm going back to review your chapters.
Favorite part in this one: Edward waiting for Bella to reawaken. It's poignant and excruciating for him, but I love how you added in the little part where he suspects that Bella was hiding her pain from him. It would be just like him to be so intuitive.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I really appreciate you taking the time to add your thoughts about each chapter.
I do think that Edward is fairly intuitive, though perhaps Bella's perception is more...intense than his – but on the other hand, I think Edward is much more observant of Bella and would easily distinguish when she's keeping something from him. That assumption, of course, plays a larger role in a future chapter.
Reviewer: principessa (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 05:32 AM · On: Practice
Another fantastic chapter, though I admit that this one was very hard for me to read with Edward's thoughts of harming Bella. You interpreted his reaction to himself perfectly. I can't wait for more. The training sequence was perfect and I think Edward's take on the Romanians helps us understand better what their presence means. Again, great Midnight Sun reference! :-)
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
The fighting practice scene was something that, as I said at the beginning of the chapter, has been sort of brewing in my head ever since I first read "Breaking Dawn". Edward has always struggled with self-loathing in regard to what he is, and it seemed to me that it came into play during this part of the story. I'm glad that you felt it was an accurate interpretation.
And I adore "Midnight Sun", so it's fun for me to reference it at certain points in the story. Actually, there's a moment in the next chapter from the partial draft that I added. I'll be interested to hear what you think.
Reviewer: Alice Mary Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 04:33 AM · On: Awakening
OMG am,azing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I felt like I was reading something by stephenie meyer. Obviously u will have read midnight sun well i felt like it was a follow on from tht wish I had done tht ida i have so many ideas of wt to do it about like wt he wud be thinkin but gr8 work please carry on so i can read more!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Reviewer: soccergirl23 (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2009 04:26 AM · On: Practice
Wonderful chapter as always!! Can't wait til the next one comes! Please hurry!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
The next chapter should be up in a few days.
Reviewer: emmabella (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 10:05 PM · On: Irresistible
I absolutely adore the way you are writing Edward, poor tortured Edward.
Thank you so much for writing this
Author's Response: Thank you, and you're welcome!
Reviewer: moonstruck (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 05:10 PM · On: Practice
Even in amongst all the very interesting drama and tension and characters of this story I always love the little sections of tenderness and affection between Edward and his family. It makes me all gooy every time :)
Author's Response: Thank you!
I love putting in those little 'family' moments; they warm my heart. Since they make you all gooey, then I guess that means I'm doing my job well. ;D
Reviewer: Tqwerty (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 03:55 PM · On: Practice
oh my god! i just cant get over how awsome your writing is! i love it love it love it!!!!
and it seems fairly acurate! keep writing i am so desperate to know what edward thinks when bella lets him see her mind!!!and during the fight and everything!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Everything is still coming to a head in the storyline, and once we get to the confrontation with the Volturi, things are going to get VERY interesting. I'm a little nervous as to how it's going to work out, but I'll cross that bridge when I get to it.
Reviewer: AmberrrJune (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 02:55 AM · On: Awakening
It seemed to get better the more I read. I think the problem at first, was even though it was in Edward's perspective there wasn't much that was said that the audience wasn't already aware of, but the more I read the more it felt like you were learning more about his character. I liked it.
Author's Response: Thank you!
It has been a learning process, writing this story. Edward is an incredibly complex character, and delving into his psyche is a journey, to say the least. But I'm enjoying it, and it makes me glad when others read my story and feel like they're on the same journey with me.
Reviewer: soccergirl23 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 09:44 AM · On: Practice
I love this fanfic sooo much!!! Please make another fanfic for Edward's POV on Bella's pregnancy! It would so much better than Jacob's pov.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I've considered tackling Book Two from Edward's perspective, but I really want to finish "Metamorphosis" before starting anything else. We'll just have to wait and see. :)
Reviewer: SeeMyEvil (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 08:08 AM · On: Practice
One more beautifully written chapter, I enjoyed it! Now we just need another chapter... ;)
Author's Response: Thank you! And I'm glad you enjoyed it.
An update should be posted in the next few days.
Reviewer: aussievamp (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 06:45 AM · On: Practice
FANTASTIC! AMAZING!!!! I enjoyed that so much! Thank you! I especially LOVED all the family tenderness,,,LOVED IT AGAIN! I cannot wait unti the next part!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
The next chapter will be posted soon.
Reviewer: dancing_in_my_underwear (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 10:04 PM · On: Practice
I loved the fighting practice to see what you thought Edward was thinking and I think you've hit close to the mark! I also like the opening bit with the snow fight. It was very sweet and it was nice to see themselves enjoying themselves during such dramatic time.
Author's Response: Thank you!
It seemed like, in the midst of all this emotional turmoil and the approaching deadline of the Volturi's arrival, that there needed to be a moment where the three of them could be a family and just enjoy being together. The snow fight provided that lightheartedness.
Reviewer: claw (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 07:03 PM · On: Practice
W-O-W! It's official - I'm addicted. I've been checking every day for an update, and when you finally did, I let out a squeal that possibly sent my neighbors into a tizzy. Beautifully done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Squealing is totally allowed; I myself am prone to it while I'm writing, or when one of my favorite stories is updated.
Reviewer: pink_photographer (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 05:27 PM · On: Practice
Great story so far! I love your writing process and I think you really portray what Edward would have been thinking! GREAT story! Can't wait tell the end scene when Bella drops her sheild to let him hear her thoughts! It would be awesome if you could extend that more than Stephanie Meyer did!
Thanks!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Yes, the finale should be a lot of fun to write. I've thought about it a little bit, but there's still quite a ways to go before we reach that point. But I probably will extend that moment some, just because I can. ;)
Reviewer: Starlight623 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 12:06 PM · On: Practice
I honestly think I'm running out of words to describe how much I love this story. The emotions, the thoughts, the interactions ... they're all dead on! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
The next chapter should be up soon.
Reviewer: LadyMacKenzie (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 11:40 AM · On: Practice
Great Chapter!!! I can't wait for the next one!!!
{{hug}}
Mac
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: nidka (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 11:40 AM · On: Practice
Loved, loved the fighting practice session. E was panicky. B was Bella!!!!
As always very well written. More of the Romanians, pretty please.
sincerely,
Karina.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
There's a little more of the Romanians at the beginning of the next chapter. They are an interesting pair, to say the least. Hopefully, I'll get to add them during future chapters, especially at the end of "Declared", when everyone decides whether or not they'll stand with the Cullens if it comes to a fight.
Reviewer: Vayls Girl (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 10:00 AM · On: Practice
I wondered about Edwards thoughts then too! as always you did a magnificent job, as if you tapped in to my imagination! I liked the repeat image of Bella worrying with Edwards wedding ring like it has become her good luck charm!
Loved the snowball fight too so playfull in spite of the ret of their circumstances!
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the practice session between Edward and Bella. And the wedding ring thing is just something small that I love, so I keep bringing it back at certain moments.
Reviewer: AndraLee (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 09:50 AM · On: Practice
This was your best chapter yet! Many kudos!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Reviewer: Sheeijan (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 09:33 AM · On: Practice
this was a huge chapter! Thank you for that. I know what you mean about being curious about that aborted fight training scene. I wondered too. And I remember thinking how sweet it was of Edward to submit to being tortured for the sake of Bella's training. I must admit I kind of expected more interaction between Edward and maybe the Denalis that Bella isn't aware of. Private congratulations for his wife, his child, who knows what else because they have known Edward a long time and how alone he's been.
Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: It is a huge chapter, and would have been even longer if I hadn't broken it up into two postings.
And if you're looking for more interaction between Edward and the Denali family, then I think you'll enjoy the next chapter. It should be up in a few days. I'll be interested to hear what you think.
Reviewer: Cheyenne (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 08:55 AM · On: Practice
Ah poor troubled over thinking Edward, he does love to torture himself doesn't he??.
I love Daddy Edward, and appreciate your style of putting a lighthearted moment at the beginning of this chapter, to help with all the angst that was to come later. That was a nice touch.
The training in the meadow was fab, and i loved the training with Kate, her tactics may have been rash but they worked didn't they. Amd oh how i enjoy Kate and Garrett, it must be love if she electrocutes him lol.
Zafrina is also a fascinating character isn't she. I adore the relationship she builds up with Nessie. Whats also nice is that Nessie seems to be the only one not intimidated by her.
Great chapter, as always i look forward to the next xxx
Author's Response: I really liked the snow fight at the beginning, too. As you said, it's a nice lighthearted moment to counterbalance all the emotional strain and angst surrounding the story.
All the different training sessions were fun to write, and, like you, I enjoy Kate and Garrett immensely. I hope to expand a bit on their blossoming relationship in future chapters.
And Zafrina is very fascinating. I think she and Renesmee have a certain camaraderie because their gifts are similar; they both make people see and experience things that aren't really there. But while Zafrina creates illusions, Renesmee shares her own memories.
Thank you for reviewing!
Reviewer: lacygrace (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 08:10 AM · On: Practice
This story is one of my favorites - it is beautifully written.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
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