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Reviewer: cdls1992 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 09:41 PM · On: Secrets
I Love This!!!
You do an Amazing Edward BTW!
This is awsome, so much emotion in it!!!
Plz PLz Plz Continue soon!
This is excelent!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
The next chapter is in progress, and should be ready in a week or so.
Reviewer: showme8900 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 02:26 PM · On: Surprise
the perfect tightrope walk between R and PG13....excellent
Author's Response: Thank you!
I wanted to keep it from becoming too...intense...while also focusing more on the emotion rather than the details.
Reviewer: hg20 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 02:10 PM · On: Secrets
Again, an amazing chapter!!! I always wanted to know what Edward thought when Bella was gone. You added so much emotion and detail to his thoughts. I love the Kate and Garrett scenes they are just so adorable. I always beleived Tanya had to feel lonely and I'm glad you touched on that. As always can't get enought, update soon!!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
The flirting and interaction between Kate and Garrett is a lot of fun to write; I think they're adorable, too.
And Tanya sort of took on a life of her own in this chapter, though I also found a little bit of myself in her while she was speaking to Edward. She is a very interesting character.
I've started working on the next chapter, and my goal is to have it posted by the end of the month. Keep your fingers crossed! :)
Reviewer: showme8900 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 01:49 PM · On: Memories
terrific...
Reviewer: showme8900 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:56 PM · On: Promised
More! More! :)
Reviewer: etoile-fleur (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:37 PM · On: Secrets
This is really very well written. I particularly liked the portion while Bella has gone to Charlie's. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you!
I definitely had more creative leeway to work with in this chapter, as I had to fill up an entire day without Bella. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Reviewer: showme8900 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 06:52 AM · On: First Hunt
Another AMAZING chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Reviewer: OzNimbus (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 06:22 AM · On: Secrets
Fantastic work! Keep going!
Author's Response: Thank you!
I've already started working on the next chapter. It should be ready by the end of the month.
Reviewer: showme8900 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 05:27 AM · On: Awakening
This was FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Wow.....
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: ejh0904 (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 11:52 AM · On: Secrets
Beautiful ending - you're making me tear up again. I'm so proud of Edward for extending his trust to Bella; given his personality, I know what kind of struggle he is facing to do that.
This is gorgeous, gorgeous stuff, and even though I don't think I've made this observation before - you must be very observant, or have very observant betas, because your grammar is flawless (I'm an English teaher, so I tend to notice that kind of stuff). I almost never find any mistakes in your wonderfully long chapters at all, and considering how rare that is, I thought I'd better say something. It's extremely impressive.
Looking forward to more writing perfection...
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I would hand you a tissue if I could. :)
It was my feeling that, given the way Edward was acting when the Volturi arrive - that he wouldn't say goodbye to Bella or Renesmee - that he must have at some point confronted his trust issues, and this felt like the perfect chapter to address those issues.
Plus, I really wanted to use the bottle cap as a symbol, because I thought that moment from "Midnight Sun" was just too adorable.
I think you would be amazed by how many times I reread my own work. Sometimes I feel like I have OCD, because I'm so obsessed with having proper grammar and punctuation. But considering that you as an English teacher aren't finding a bunch of errors, I must be catching most of them, so that's good news.
I'll be working on the next chapter some more this week, so hopefully it will be ready soon. My goal is to have it posted by the end of the month.
Reviewer: Candi_ass (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 08:18 AM · On: Secrets
ummm wow... that was so beautiful. you are doing a spectacular job!!! =)
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Reviewer: SeeMyEvil (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 08:05 AM · On: Secrets
*listens to Reverie on Youtube*
It is a lovely piece...I agree. :)
Fantastic chapter, like always! Please update soon...
Author's Response: Isn't so beautiful? I love listening to it just for ambiance while I'm writing.
And thank you for reviewing! I'm hoping to get the next chapter done this week. Cross your fingers! :)
Reviewer: LadyMacKenzie (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 06:42 AM · On: Secrets
Great Chapter and I can't wiat for the next chapter. If I am slow to give feedback, please know that I will read and give feedback as soon as I can. My pastors' 10 year old granddaughter drawned Sunday evening and my kids were friends with her since she stayed in the Children's Church sometimes. My son knew her better since he is also 10 and this is just really bringing home to me that I need to spend more time with my own kids.
{{hugs}}
Mac
Author's Response: Thank you!
I'm so sorry to hear about your pastor's granddaughter. I'll be praying for the family, and for your kids, too.
Reviewer: loveAnnie (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 06:30 AM · On: Secrets
Fantastic!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Reviewer: vamppy (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 06:16 AM · On: Secrets
wow great chapter
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: nidka (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 04:04 AM · On: Secrets
Hello!
As I write this I realize I don´t even know your name, but it doesn´t matter because I sense that you are a beautiful person. How do I know that: Because such a person must have a beautiful soul to transport into words feelings of warmth. Yes I know you will say It´s E voice, but still the way you write is distinct; You manage to make it your own.
I have to tell you this chapter is rounded perfectly, such emotions and thoughts are well defined for each character. I think this chapter is the best so far.
sincerely,
Karina.
Author's Response: Aw... Thank you so much! Your compliments are deeply appreciated. I think you're a beautiful person for offering them. :)
I think that this chapter came out quite nicely, too - which is good, considering how much time it consumed. But that's okay. Writing is sometimes like therapy for me: I can disappear into another world and sort of 'live' through the characters.
Reviewer: Starlight623 (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2009 03:44 AM · On: Secrets
More fantastic work!! You wrote Edward and Tanya well together. Can't wait for another great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Reviewer: Cheyenne (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 11:24 PM · On: Secrets
Ah how i've looked forward to the missing chapters where Bella was out. And you have not dissapointed me, though i never thought you would. This was a wonderful chapter. I really wish i had something insightful to say but instead i'll just say i loved it all.
Particularly, Edwards moping and stressing and failing to distract himself while she's gone. He does love the angst that boy doesn't he??
But i loved 3 other bits in particular, first Benjamin, that was fab. You know how i like him and anything with him in is good by me.
Second, Mama Esme getting straight to the point. I love her treating him like a son, it was a lovely interraction.
And third.. Tanya and Edward sitting in a tree LOl. I hate fanfics that portray Tanya as some scarlet woman who's trying to steal Edward. So she tried it on with him a few times when they were both single, but she did nothing in the books after he met Bella for her to warrant being treated as some kind of home wrecker. So i loved the honest way her and Edward talked and especially the way she cleared uo her feelings for him. That was brilliant.
On a final note my favourite line was "I'm thirsty," she tells him very slowly, as though explaining herself to someone incredibly dense.
That is of course how any woman should speak to a man. LOL. I loved it.
Thanks
Chey xx
Author's Response: I really can't say anything else, either, other than thank you so much! :D
And yes, I remembered that you are the Benjamin fan. I enjoy writing him, too - he's quite fascinating.
The 'mother-son' moment between Esme and Edward was a long time coming, in my opinion. I had requests for more interaction between them, and I wanted to write that in, because I adore Esme. She is so sweet.
I completely agree with you about how some fan fics treat Tanya as a 'home-wrecker'. I really don't get that vibe from her at all. Actually, I think I may have channeled some of myself into her words during that conversation, and now I see her character in a new light.
LOL - the bantering with Kate and Garrett. That was so much fun to write. Sometimes guys really do ask the stupidest questions. ;P
Reviewer: dancing_in_my_underwear (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 08:08 PM · On: Secrets
Okay so this chapter was a little long so I didn't read it all in one go cause I saw a shiny thing and was distracted but I did really like this chapter. I liked Tanya and Edward's conversation in the tree and my favourite bit was Edwards memory of writing Bella's lullaby. It was really sweet and I adored it.
Author's Response: Yes, it is long... but I just couldn't stop! I felt like, in Bella's absence, Edward would fill his time with as many distractions as possible to avoid his usual over-thinking, and so I ended up with all this material.
But I'm glad you liked it, all the same. :)
Reviewer: binki (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 08:03 PM · On: Secrets
Great Chapter! I always wondered what Edward thought during this time period. It was very good through EPOV!
Author's Response: Thank you!
There was definitely more room for creativity in this chapter, which is part of the reason why it's so long. Once I got started, it was hard to stop! :)
Reviewer: Antonia Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 07:18 PM · On: Secrets
WONDERFUL job on this chapter!!! I loved everythinhg I read, especially the Edward and Bella moments. It's just great how you write this story. :) :) :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Reviewer: AmberrrJune (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 06:35 PM · On: Secrets
Very Very romantic ending...
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: AmberrrJune (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 04:58 PM · On: Practice
Can't wait for the rest.
Reviewer: Beckylady (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 03:42 PM · On: Secrets
Lovely, as ever. The last scene made me want to cry it was so beautiful. My heart just aches so much for both Bella and Edward during this whole time waiting on the Volturi. Thank you so much for tackling EPOV for us!
Author's Response: Thank you!
I really loved writing the last scene with the bottle cap. I wanted the chapter to end with Edward and Bella being together again, especially after he makes the decision to trust her, and this was the perfect avenue to do so.
Reviewer: KTCullen (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 03:13 PM · On: Secrets
Can I tell you how much I adore you (and your story:)? WOW! That was an amazing chapter. Let me tell you some of the many parts I loved... 1. The conversation with Esme about trusting Bella...Esme is a rock star! She pointed out Edward's real issue in the perfect way for Edward that didn't put him immediately on the defense. 2. The beautiful way that you slowly developed Edward's suspicion and then realization of what 's going on with Bella. (THe word omniscience being the final clue to lock it in for him was brilliant!) I also loved his side of the chat at the piano, when he silently agreed to trust her...and then my FAVORITE...3. the last scene with the bottle cap when he actually told her that he knew something's up and trusted her completely. I was a big pile of teary mush when he told her the significance of the bottle cap and why he was giving it to her. Complete and utter SWOON! All the scenes when Bella was gone were very compelling also. Poor Tanya...:( She never does find anyone, does she? And anything borrowed from "Atlas Shrugged" is fine by me, as it's another of my favorite stories.
Anyways, thank you again for another INCREDIBLE chapter...I eagerly await more!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Esme IS a rock star, I completely agree. I love writing her as the wise, loving mother.
And I've always thought that Edward would have figured out at some point what Bella was attempting to keep from him; he is much too observant to simply overlook certain aspects of her behavior, and it was already addressed in an earlier chapter that Aro has plans to recruit him and Alice to the Volturi guard.
I really, REALLY wanted to work in the bottle cap to the story line, and was absolutely tickled when it meshed with the underlying 'trust' theme of the chapter. I'm so glad that you enjoyed that scene! :D
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