Great Chapter and I can't wait for the next chapter!

 

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Mac

I ABSOLUTELY loved it.  I loved how you described Bella and Edward hunting together that was my favorite part. The rest of the chapter was just as amazing. Looking forward to you're description of the fight. Update Soon!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

The hunting scene was a lot of fun to visualize through writing, and I think it's my favorite moment in this chapter.

I've started on the next chapter, and will do my very best to update in a timely fashion. Scout's honor. :)

More perfection from LivesAmongtheStars!  Bella's fears and the Christmas party at Charlie's were just ... well, perfect!  More please!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

The Christmas party was an interesting moment for me to write. I had to take a few moments to sort of get in the mood, and then everything just fell together. And I was so thrilled to put Seth into the mix again. I love that boy. :D

Loved this latest chapter.  You really write Edwards POV so well. 

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I swear my playlist is psychic, from Bella's mini-breakdown in the forest to the end of the chapter, the songs playing were somehow fitting. I had Yellow by Coldplay, then Weight of the World by Evanescence, Times Like These by the Foo Fighters and then Everdream by Nightwish. It was bizarre. But pretty cool too; coz it added to the atmosphere. ;) Great chapter, as always! Beautifully written interpretation of a rather pivotal chapter in Breaking Dawn. Well done!

Update soon. :D

Author's Response:

That's awesome, about your playlist coinciding with the story. Music is such an integral part of my creative process; I have certain songs that I like to listen to when I'm writing because it helps me get in the mood, so to speak.

Thank you for reviewing, and I've started on the next chapter, so hopefully it will come together soon. :)

Aw i feel all christmassey now lol. I as usual adore all the missing pieces and dialogues you include in this and am still falling immensely in love with Benjamin.

Although it was only a small part i love the little exchange between Seth and Edward. Seth was the only wolf i loved (i'm a team Edward girl and couldn't stand Jake) And i absolutely adored the relationship that Edward and Seth built, so i'm beyond happy that you managed to get a little bit of that in.

Oh and i adore the idea of Nessie building the replica town of Forks on the floor, that was brilliant.

So we're getting closer to the battle and i don't envy you the challenge of deciphering all the thoughts Edward was hearing, but i know you'll do superbly with it.

Another fab chapter hun, well done.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

It was a little difficult at first, trying to capture a little of the emotions surrounding the Christmas season, but the overall stress of their situation made it easier to just touch on that spirit.

Yes, Benjamin is very lovable, and I too was so glad to put Seth into the story again. I don't think it's possible to NOT like either of them.

Renesmee is an interesting character to try and interpret. She's a child in many ways, but her mind is almost like that of an adult. I thought it was a neat idea to sort of capture both sides of her personality by having her and Jacob build a tiny model of Forks out of Legos on the living room floor. I could see it in my head and it was just too adorable to let fall by the wayside.

The confrontation with the Volturi is definitely looming on the horizon, and I am starting to feel the tension in my nerves. There's one more chapter to go before their arrival, so hopefully I can gear up and get ready to charge headfirst into the fray.

THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU for posting before the month was out...

i kept checking everyday for new posts from you...I love this so much...

The ending was perfect...they just don't know it for sure yet, but their union is blessed. :)

Author's Response:

You're welcome!

I was afraid that I would begin to feel a little rushed – and I would hate for that to affect my writing – but everything came together at the end of this chapter quite nicely. Even I was a bit surprised. ;)

AWESOME! I love how you showed that Edward truly understood how Bella felt about having Charlie in her life some way or another.It makes me love Edward even more!!!!!!He is a true one of a kind.It is absolutely amazing at how you are in his head.Keep it up!!!! I also wanted to encourage you to write the part of the story before book 3.Especially Bella's pregnancy.I haved read the book and that part is so cloudy from Jacob's point of view because he really does not understand how much Edward truly loves Bella.But Edward's emotions aren't really explained in that part of the book.So I hope this encourages you to ponder that thought.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I've thought about writing other parts of BD, but I would like to finish "Metamorphosis" first before getting too involved in planning another story. Book Two would be a challenging undertaking, but it is something to ponder nonetheless.

What I've thought of doing is, instead of writing each chapter from Edward's perspective – as I've done with this story – I might choose certain moments, especially when he hears Renesmee's mind for the first time. But like I said, we'll have to wait and see.

I appreciate your encouragement, all the same! :)

I hope you write the first part of Breaking Dawn from Edward's POV! I have read a lot of stories written from Edward's POV, and your writing is really the best, in my opinion. Edward's thoughts and perceptions are entirely in character, with no exception. It's like you are so attuned with Edward so you can write exactly what he is thinking and feeling. And  we also get to see what Edward is reading in the minds of the other Cullens--and Jacob, although I must admit I don't care much what Jacob thinks. Thanks for writing this and for filling in these interesting, missing details from Edward's POV. I can feel the love that he has for Bella from his thoughts about her...

Author's Response:

I've thought about tackling other parts of BD... but I don't know for certain yet.

The first half – the wedding, honeymoon, etc. – has been done a lot, and very well, by many authors, so I'm not sure what to do. I guess that I'll keep mulling it around in my head and see if anything 'clicks'. :)

But thank you for reviewing, and for your compliments as to how I interpret Edward. It's a fascinating experience, trying to crawl inside his head and figure out what he's thinking and feeling throughout this story, and quite honestly I love every second of it. Plus, as you pointed out, Edward's ability to read minds lets me connect with the other characters, as well.

Ah, Jacob... He is a mixed bag for me. Sometimes I have to crack up over how he acts or his little snide remarks, and other times I just want to slap him upside the head. ;P

That was SOOOOOOOOO good....i ALWAYS wanted Edward to share his memento from the cafeteria with Bella. That was so very clever of you to turn the trust back around to him trusting her...i loved it. i cried...i CAN'T WAIT til the next chapter....hurry! LOL

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I loved that moment from "Midnight Sun" too, and was looking for a way to work it into the story.

I am working on the next chapter already, and am hoping to finish it up by the end of the month. That's my goal. :)

Oh my! That was gorgeous! I absolutely love the additional married moments between Edward and Bella. BD seemed to be in a race to the end (or maybe I just read it that quickly!!) But this chapter felt like it savored the emotions and dialogue between the characters. The bottlecap part was tearjerkingly sweet. I also loved reading Edward's feelings of being left out of Bella's secret. Of all the phenomenal chapters you've written, this is one of the very best!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I agree: the original novel was very fast-paced, and it was easy to get swept up in the urgency of the whole situation. I've been trying to insert a few more romantic moments because I think that in spite of what is coming, Edward and Bella would seek to be together at nearly every opportunity.

I loved the symbolism of the bottle cap as it was written into "Midnight Sun", and I wanted to use it in this story. I'm so glad that you liked it; I really like how that last scene played out - it's now one of my favorites.

I can't tell you how lovely the last scene is! i had to go get tisssues, and the moments with Tanya - those would explain so much. 

I'd leave you a review as long as your chapter if i mentioned everything i love about this!

Author's Response:

Thank you!

I wanted to end the chapter with Edward and Bella being together again, since they were apart for the day, and I wanted so badly to use the bottle cap in this story. Everything just sort of came together for that last scene, and I'm so glad that people enjoyed it. I loved writing it.

And Tanya as a character has taken on a whole new dimension for me. I found a little bit of myself in her during this chapter, and it felt like she and Edward needed to have this type of conversation to 'clear the air', as it were.