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Reviewer: Wish Upon A Star (Signed) · Date: July 15, 2009 01:13 AM · On: Surprise
You thought of some rather interesting conversation. It was very sweet; the perfect balance of everyone-rating and adult, not too much and not too little. And, from an author who is currently trying to do the same with her own story, that can be hard to do. Great job!!
SOOO COOL!!
RSFTC: Don't judge someone until you've walked 10 miles in their shoes. That way, if they get mad, they'll be 10 miles away and shoeless.
Reviewer: Wish Upon A Star (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 11:47 PM · On: Memories
There's my missing scene!! XP
Very neat!!
Random Saying For The Chapter: A black cat crossing your path signifies that the cat is going somewhere.
Reviewer: Wish Upon A Star (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 12:29 PM · On: Promised
You didn't tell us about when she breaks Seth's shoulder!! I wanted to see that part!!
RSFTC: Don't follow in my footsteps; I tend to walk into things.
*Kudos to imaginary Emmett for giving me that one, though it might be a reference to imaginary Bella before she became an imaginary vampire*
*imaginary Emmett slaps himself on the forehead for thinking Wish Upon A Star wouldn't figure that one out*
Reviewer: Wish Upon A Star (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 11:13 AM · On: First Hunt
Reminds me of that (random) saying (for the chapter), "Well, he was never the brightest bulb on the Hannukah tree, was he?"
There is actually an ancient Mesopotamian dialect that is known for its wide variety of curse words.
*Wish Upon A Star starts hyperventilating*
*imaginary Bella calls imaginary Jasper to calm Wish Upon A Star down so she is coherent enough to finish this review*
Oh my freaking god, this is downright AMAZING!!!
You know what they say about pressing buttons, men are like remote controls, women are more like accordions. And that is the random saying for this chapter.
Reviewer: Wish Upon A Star (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 07:21 AM · On: Awakening
Hello, my name is Wish Upon A Star, and I gave a cast of imaginary Twilight characters running around in and out of my head. I recently slapped imaginary Alice upside the head and broke my hand, so imaginary Esme was typing for me. Then she disappeared after mistakenly typing that I like my hotdogs (is it spelled hotdogs or hot dogs?) with mustard. So imaginary Rosalie was typing for me, and she got tired of typing about fifteen minutes after imaginary Esme returned, so I had imaginary Emmett typing for me (biggest mistake of my life - he stole the laptop and ran off with it in hopes of playing imaginary mario kart with imaginary Jasper, because imaginary Esme had confiscated their imaginary playstation). Desperate imaginary times call for imaginary desperate measures. Anyways, imaginary Bella is now typing for me; she is much better than all of her predecessors (no offence imaginary Rosalie or imaginary Esme... Imaginary Emmett can get offended all he wants), so I'm good there. I would never tell imaginary Esme, but I think imaginary Jasper is having imaginary J Jenks forge them another imaginary playstation. Imaginary Carlisle has tried multiple times to diagnose me with schizophrenia, but my argument is, as much as I might wish they were, my imaginary Cullens aren't real, and I know it. Why else would I keep calling them imaginary? Imaginary Edward agrees, though that might just be because imaginary Bella does. Side note/rant over *gasps* The amazing Stephenie Meyer actually typed that on her website!! *cheers like a madman... or maybe just a twilight-obsessed fangirl - take your pick*
Random Saying For The Chapter: When life gives you lemons, make grape juice and listen to people ask you how you did it.
Reviewer: edbellafan (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 05:20 AM · On: Bloodlust
This was absolutely everything this chapter should be from Edward's point of view!!! You are so meticulously detailed in every aspect of this story! I know you said your copy of BD is a mass of notes and I'll bet the binding is about ready to fall off from all the handling it's sustained since you started this project!!
I loved that you included that part from Irina...what SHE saw that day in the forest that prompted her to go to Italy and be the informer. That part DID need to be told...and you did it wonderfully.
I despise Jane...and wish SM would have had her torn to bits by the wolves (gasp!) but alas it was not meant to be. Hateful little wench!!! I'm curious to see how Dakota Fanning will play her in NM in November.
You know what I find interesting? In this chapter in BD we know that Bella has finally mastered using her shield and is projecting it like crazy all over her peeps... but Edward has no clue yet that she's doing it!!! I think it's going to be the coolest moment EVER when he finally realizes what she is capable of...I can't wait to see how you write that moment....he's got to be shocked and in utter AWE of her!!
Aro is such a creepy vamp....with his smooth little exterior..but he's got all this super creepiness going on under the surface, I love how you portray this through Edward's thoughts. At least with Caius...you know he's a grumpy vamp...he doesn't put on airs about it...but Aro...yeah, he's the one that freaks me out a little.
The end is in sight for you! I'm sad for me...but excited for you! What in the world will you do with your free time...lol! Fantastic chapter...as ALWAYS!! :o)
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
My copy of the book is very...weathered...and I am planning on purchasing the Special Edition when it comes out next month just so I'll have a decent one on my bookshelf.
I hadn't really intended to evoke Irina's memory of that day, but when I got to that point in my writing, she just started whispering in my ear and I felt like she needed to have her say.
Ah, Jane... she is a vindictive little demon. I'm very interested to see how Dakota portrays her, as well.
And I think that Edward will be even more in awe of his Bella when he finally sees the power of her ability. I personally can't wait to get there, either, but we have a bit more ground to cover before that moment.
Aro completely creeps me out, and I think what makes him so eerie is that, as you said, smooth and civilized exterior that masks the devious, cunning monster inside. And Caius is just a sadistic fiend - but he's fun to write.
Free time? What's that?
Maybe I'll take a vacation after "Metamorphosis" wraps up, and then who knows? My muse will probably start poking me again to write something else; she's already started dropping hints... whispering, "Eclipse, Eclipse..."
Reviewer: LJ Summers (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 12:40 AM · On: Promised
I still crack up over the fact that Bella flips out over a nickname. That is just so GIRLIE.
Beautiful rendition, of course, with this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Reviewer: hg20 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 12:41 PM · On: Bloodlust
What more can I say than this is how Breaking Dawn should have been written! Excellent as always I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much!
Reviewer: twilightjunebug (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 11:25 AM · On: Bloodlust
YOU FORGOT TO KILL IRENA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Maybe this was an oversight or you have just added more and not as far in the story as I thought you were but anyway please don't forget to knock her off. Great story by the way and can't wait for the rest.
Author's Response: Don't worry, hun: that part is coming up in the next chapter. I've just started writing that particular scene.
But thank you for being so observant, and for reviewing! :)
Reviewer: crazyaboutcullens (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 07:54 AM · On: Bloodlust
Phew!
4 hours of reading your story all the way through. I'm sure that's some sort of record...
I always passed your story on the Most Recent list but ignored it because... well, I'm not a big Breaking Dawn fan.
But, I don't know something told me to read this story, and I'm glad I did because it's brillant!!
One of my main critisims of Breaking Dawn was I didn't feel Edward and Bella's romance as much as the other books (New Moon not withstanding) but you added so much love! I could really feel it.. and between Edward and Renesmee-- I'm so glad you focused on those scenes, a father is really important in a girl's life, so I was happy to see a concrete relationship.
I laughed, cried and sighed at everything. I love how you showed the "intimate" scenes without going into detail- you're absolutely right: why shouldn't our younger audience read this?? And I could still feel the passion, despite the lemon-less sentances.
So hats off to you! You really changed my perception of Breaking Dawn... I may go read it again actually... But now I have to wait like everyone else :( but I know it will be worth it, because you are fantastic!!
Looking forward to it! Till then :)
Author's Response: You know what? You probably did set a record; talk about speed reading - wow! :)
And I agree to an extent with your feelings about "Breaking Dawn". It is missing some of that Edward/Bella romantic intensity, and that is part of my motivation for writing "Metamorphosis". Plus, I wanted to touch more on the family dynamics between the two of them and Renesmee, because I feel that is so important to the plot, and it was sort of glossed over in the original novel.
I like to think of my 'intimacy moments' as lemon zest - like a sugar cookie flavored with a hint of citrus. ;)
Anyways, thank you so much for giving my story a try, and for your positive review! And yes, you'll have to sit in the waiting room with everyone else now, but I'll try not to keep you all in suspense for too long.
Reviewer: lalinda1236 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 06:56 AM · On: Bloodlust
this was an amazing chapter can't wait for the next one
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: lada_8 (Signed) · Date: July 12, 2009 03:56 AM · On: Bloodlust
OH WOW.
You've blown my mind away.
Guard dogs with leather collars?? livestock?? oh my god i could kill Aro just for picturing that. argh, so infuriating.
Emmett almost bouncing "pick me! pick me!" that was hilarious. I released all my tension with that one. perfect.
Everything was just perfect. Jake, Nessie, Sam, Jane, Esme. just everything. please dont lea e us hanging too long. please??????
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Yeah... Aro sort of took over that moment. I was only wondering what he could possibly have been thinking that would make Edward react so furiously, and that was what materialized in my head.
And Emmett is just a doll; I love having him bring a little levity into the serious situations.
I promise to work as hard as I can to bring you all the next chapter. The wait won't be too long, if I can help it.
Reviewer: uinen (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 07:04 PM · On: Bloodlust
love it, can't wait for more, again, xx
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: AmberrrJune (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 06:40 PM · On: Bloodlust
Wow. What can I say? That was intense. It's brilliantly written, and I love all the insight into the characters. Thank you for writing it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Jacque (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 06:12 PM · On: Bloodlust
Wow this is an epic chapter! You have done a spectacular job expressing the characters here. I know that you have some really stiff competition in the awards. Having read them all I really can't say I could choose among them. This story definfitely deserves the nod and I wish you all the luck.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
That this story was even nominated for both the Bellies and the Indies is overwhelming and incredible to me, so no matter what happens, I am so grateful for the recognition.
Reviewer: Starlight623 (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 03:44 PM · On: Bloodlust
Jane scares the crap out of me, too! I think you did a fabulous job with her. And Irina too. I just really love what you're doing with the whole thing (but I know I've told you that before!).
Author's Response: Thank you!
Like I said at the end of the chapter, Jane is a character I love to hate. The Twilight universe just wouldn't be the same without her. And Irina has evolved for me through this story, which is interesting, because I was ticked off at her when I read the novel. Now, I find that I'm...empathizing with her a bit.
Reviewer: dspring (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 01:58 PM · On: Bloodlust
i LOVE LOVE LOVE this story. everything is better from edward's pov. :) you did such a good job with all the different things going on.
eagerly awaiting the next chapter. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
You know, while I was writing this chapter, I sometimes felt like I had multiple personality disorder because I was trying to connect with so many different characters at the same time. So I'm glad to hear that I was able to make it all come together in a way that made sense.
And I would ask for your patience for a little while in regard to the next chapter. I have started writing, but it is quickly turning into another epic segment. To put it another way, two pages of original novel have turned into almost four of mine. O_O Yikes.
But that's how it usually goes, so it's not too big a deal.
Reviewer: Antonia Cullen (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 01:45 PM · On: Bloodlust
LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Phae (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 12:15 PM · On: Bloodlust
I always hate it when I get to the end of one of your chapters. Right now though, I am grinding my teeth in frustration. I wanna read what comes next!
Yeah, yeah, I realize that chapters this long don't appear by magic. I'm going to do my best to remain patient. But keep this in mind: the teeth? They're only so big, and I'm grinding them. So on behalf of my dentist, may I wish you *speedy* writing??
;-) Phae
PS: Congrats on the nominations - you totally deserve them!
Author's Response: Thank you!
I'll try not to keep you waiting for too long. Though when I finished this chapter, my entire being breathed a quick sigh of relief - and then it was like, 'okay, let's keep going!'
So I have already started the next chapter, but I think it may take a little while for everything to come together. Don't give yourself a headache - or an unnecessary trip to the dentist - from the grinding teeth. I may end up feeling obligated to pay the bill. :)
Reviewer: Anya Cullen (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 11:13 AM · On: Bloodlust
If addicted to this. This is probably my favorite fan fiction I've ever read. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I promise to do my very best to bring everyone an update as soon as I can. Please be patient. :)
Reviewer: jen_nah (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 11:03 AM · On: Bloodlust
I absolutley love your story and your writing. Please consider writing EPOV on Eclipse & New Moon. I would LOVE to see his side of how everything took place. Please keep up the great work. Your story is my all time favorite and I have voted for your stories on both sites. Thank you so much!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I am seriously considering "Eclipse", but I highly doubt that I will go near "New Moon", since I believe that Blondie has already done a brilliant job tackling that book from Edward's perspective with "Dark Side of the Moon".
Of course, my brain might be so totally wrung out that I may turn into a basket case by the end of this story... ;P Just kidding.
And thank you for your votes; I truly appreciate the support!
Reviewer: dancing_in_my_underwear (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 10:45 AM · On: Bloodlust
Okay what I liked most about this chapter is the fact that Edward doesn't hear the thoughts of the vampires on his side when he is with Aro. I don't know if you actually meant to do it but Aro was so distracted by Reneesme and Edward was distraced by Aro's obssesion with her that neither of them seemed to notice that the thoughts on that side of the clearing couldn't be heard because Bella was using her shield. It's something that wasn't mentioned in the book but with this chapter you could see why it might not be noticed.
Author's Response: You know, I didn't intentionally limit Edward's ability - but it must have been in the back of my mind, because someone else on another site mentioned the same thing.
I do feel that he wouldn't notice exactly how powerful Bella's shield has become until Chelsea tries to manipulate the connections between their group, and then Jane and Alec attempt to attack... though I'm thinking that I may drop a few hints in this next chapter, because Edward is far more observant than people give him credit for.
Anyways, thank you for the review, and for your attentiveness to the story! :)
Reviewer: Calling_Siren (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 09:49 AM · On: Bloodlust
You're doing really a great job, I love this story as much as Dark side of the moon: I think you and Blondie are really able to show Edward's mind, almost like the great SM! :) Really, 2 more than believable stories! If I'm able to, be sure that I'll vote this story in the belly award! Now nothing else to do but wait for next update! :)
Author's Response: Thank you!
I am so honored and humbled that you hold my interpretation of Edward on the same level as Blondie's from "Dark Side of the Moon". That story is truly a masterpiece. Thank you.
And I would really appreciate your vote for the Bellies. But don't forget the Indie Awards; "Metamorphosis" made it into the final round, which is AMAZING to me! I think that round of voting doesn't start until the end of the month, so just keep it in mind...please... :)
Reviewer: SeeMyEvil (Signed) · Date: July 11, 2009 09:36 AM · On: Bloodlust
Wow, this chapter was immense. I adored it, you got everything so...spot on I think - I wouldn't be surprised if that was what Stephenie imagined was happening. I'm guessing this chapter was 40 pages judging by how long it took me to read it. Am I right? lol
Update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
'Immense' feels like a bit of an understatement - at least to me. Though I enjoy every moment that I'm writing, this particular chapter effectively stretched my brain into new and sometimes disturbing directions. But as I said, I'm loving it. :)
And actually, this chapter is only about 16 pages in the Word document. The entire story is just now at the 250-page mark, and that's only because I have some written for the next chapter - which is also incredibly immense (there's that word again).
Hopefully, it will come together within the next couple of weeks, without leaving me comatose or bouncing off the walls. ;P
Reviewer: calvin78 (Signed) · Date: July 08, 2009 11:02 PM · On: Deadline
I hope you are almost finished with the next chapter. I have been holding my breath for quite sometime (Or atleast it seems that way). You have me mesmerized. I love this story and have recommended it to so many people. I love Edwards point of view. You have done such a great job with this story. So please please please hurry.
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