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Reviewer: LilacHoneySunshine (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 03:03 PM · On: Tightrope

Chapters 33 & 34 are impressive!!! I love how Bella kissed him when she was unconscious, and I love them kissing at the end of 34! And when he cools down her scalded hands, I totally went "Awww". This story just makes me happy and I look forward to the following chapters.

Reviewer: bubbadoghouse (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 02:32 PM · On: Tightrope

No.  It's perfect.  Awesome.  Thanks!

Reviewer: all_appologies (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 02:08 PM · On: Tightrope

no, definitely not a wtf moment. but i liked the twist about her unconscious kiss.
her little speech of how he was a coward was so well written. it's a different perspective than the one he keeps on trying to shove down her throat, now if only he could change his sate of mind.
i usually hate bella and her stubborn ways, but this isn't it. if this were all human, and real, anyone would be just as distrusting and broken.

Reviewer: CleanEco (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 01:48 PM · On: Tightrope

I think I'm part of the group that would say about time this happened. I'm pleased with the chapter and the progression of the story. You just keep your story your way. I'm just along for the ride and loving every update.

Reviewer: twilover09 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 01:34 PM · On: Tightrope

No apologies for the kiss are necessary!!! :o) Definitely an AFT moment for me!

The last two chapters were fantastic. Jake's letter was so sad, but at the same time, Bella's revelations stemming from that were great. It was important for her to finally face what had happened and realize the truth of their relationship. I was so glad that she sought out Edward and that they are finally moving in the right direction.

These chapters were worth the wait! Awesome job!

PS- Edward scaring off Mr. "Napolean-complex" Huntley was amazing!! lol

Reviewer: StarryStarryNight (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 01:29 PM · On: Tightrope

Talk about About FT!!!! I looove this kiss!! I don't care that it's emotional or if they have to work things out, I am just so glad that they finally have kissed. I am so excited because they have a chance to move forward from here, and not only that, but if they felt the pull to each other before, imagine what it's going to be like now, so hopefully they won't be able to stay away from each other!!

Reviewer: btvsna (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 01:22 PM · On: Tightrope

It's about time!  I mean, I know Bella has things that she still needs to work through with Edward, but I think in order for her to get to the place where she could start working through them, she and Edward needed a kiss.  Oh, and could we get an extra moment, of Edward's POV of this kiss?  Please.  Pretty please?

Reviewer: nofangsallowed (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 01:16 PM · On: Tightrope

They are very good at mirroring the book.  I think you are touching on some of the more poorly explained things in Twilight.  You're explanations for their actions go so much deeper, and I love this story for that.  You've captured the reasons why Edward feels the way he does.  Your Bella has so much more strength, for which I am thankful.  I hated how she just took him back in the books--get some self-esteem, girl!  (I'd find myself yelling at the book quite frequently.)  I'm happy on both accounts.  It's good and angsty, and I thought their kiss was well done.

Reviewer: crf720 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:55 PM · On: Tightrope

well, i suppose im in the middle between the two groups and see that they both have lots to learn about each other still...and are slowly but surely working on it.  and people do crazy things when they are emotional, so i think it's just right.  great chapters!

Reviewer: jaimejo2929 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:45 PM · On: Tightrope

I'm glad I waited to read these two chapters together.  You were right they really are meant to go together.  So much of the turmoil and angst would have lost  momentum if read separately.  Excellent work. 

I'm on th AFT team.  Although I think Bella is being a little hard on Jacob, I can understand her fear of seeing him again right now.

I hope this is a new direction for Edward and Bella.  I hope her trust in him continues to grow. 

Looking forward to more!

Reviewer: SuperFrog101 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:43 PM · On: Tightrope

yay finally

Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:33 PM · On: Tightrope

Hey- do you hear the angels? They are singing the Hallelujah chorus after that ending!

Reviewer: caperves1979 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:27 PM · On: Tightrope

I want them to be happy!  She needs to listen to her mom and forgive him.  I have an idea for his punishment.  Since he hates ABBA, he has to sing ABBA's Take a Chance on Me (after convincing/bribing his brothers to be backup singers) to her in a public venue with a lot of people and/or werewolves. 

Thanks for the great story.

Reviewer: all_appologies (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:26 PM · On: Sixty Seconds

it was really useful that you posted up a summary, because lord knows i was going to have to re-read it all. i may have to either way, the details of the car reinforced that most of the story has been forgotten. i remember loving it though.

Reviewer: Babe (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 12:19 PM · On: Tightrope

You are my new favoritest favorite for posting back to back so swiftly!  Excellent work on this chapter.  There has to be a break from the angst for Bella.  The respite is due.  I am sure that your Bella won't be a doormat after one kiss!  And...it serves my personal purposes:  I hope Jacob flips and we get to see some vampire/werewolf carnage.  SM wrote that just a little too "kumbaya" for my taste!  Your Jacob truly deserves to be running on 3 legs!

Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:53 AM · On: Tightrope

I can't tell you how happy I am that you write it the way it needs to be, rather than how you think we think it should be. Because you are an amazing wunderkind of a writer. I am over the moon happy that you have not yet figured out that you should be getting paid for this kind of thing. I also applaud your grammar skills. Really top notch, and thank you for those wonderful, readable details.

 

~Mia

Reviewer: Clean0002 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:52 AM · On: Tightrope

Oxy, once again I bow down to you and your brillance.  I absolutely loved both chapters!

I am actually on vacation right now in California and was out in the vast Californian wilderness when I received the message that both chapters were up.  When I got back to civilization, I found the nearest computer so I could read the updates.  I have to tell you, I was anxious all day because I wanted to be able to read them sooner.

Anyway, I am actually not on either team, Bella or Edward, but instead on team Bella AND Edward, because I realize both are very multi-layered characters, which is credit to you, and with that means they both have a lot of faults and make a lot of mistakes so why would I choose sides?  I might get annoyed with them from time to time but I know they need to both grow and that is a process.

I thought the kiss was awesome and the placement and timing was perfect.  It took 34 chapters for goodness sakes so I think everyone should be happy we finally got out kiss!

Thanks Oxy for giving us this wonderful story and I know it will continue to be great!

Reviewer: Rowzy (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:26 AM · On: Tightrope

omg awesome.  I like the Fire and Ice refrence as well.  Anyways I like the path this seems to be going down.
Please update soon!

Reviewer: angelvamp (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:26 AM · On: Tightrope

I'm not in either group, I think they bith have issues. great chapter.

Reviewer: SottoVoce (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:23 AM · On: Tightrope

lol 34 chapters to progress even to handholding. SM would be proud.

I think this is the only story without lemons or intent of lemons that I like... It's my favorite actually. :)

I hope you can find the time to do more frequent updates now--its going to be hard to have to wait a while after getting two chapters in a row! But Im glad you take the time to make them good. Your A/N's about keeping your fanfic writing secret from everyone always cracks me up--I have a hard enough time keeping my READING of them secret, so I cant imagine writing them on the DL. Honestly, tho, if I wrote this good I would want to show everyone.

Reviewer: jfk06 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:20 AM · On: Tightrope

Well, i did as you asked and waited .... man, was that hard!

Great story progression though.  I am so glad Bella told someone her fears about Jacob!  I think it's important for her to talk about it.  Although it did very quickly turn into Edward talk ;-)

Either way, I'm happy that she let Edward in a little bit.  They have a long way to go, but one step at a time will eventually get them there.  Yay!  AFT!!

Anyway, as you can tell, I really loved both chapters.  I was SOOO excited when I saw the update, you have no idea!  My top two favorite stories updated on the same day this week (both after month+ of no update), so whoo!!  Thank you.

Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:13 AM · On: Sixty Seconds

I'm so afraid Bella will never forgive Edward and allow them to move forward together. Chomping on my nails just like Bella!

Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 10:48 AM · On: Tightrope

oh man i thought i'd be robbed of that kiss, like some werewolf army came trouncing about just before their lips met, but hurray for some action! excellent work on this chapter, can't wait for the next installment! :D

Reviewer: Itsallintheleading (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 10:32 AM · On: Tightrope

Edward was an ass, but I would've kissed him too ;)

Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 10:28 AM · On: Tightrope

Bravo! Really well done. The dialogue and pacing in this chapter were phenomenal. I was surprised by the arrival of Jake's letter, but not by what it contained. He was only thinking about what he wanted like that day on the beach. That is what was playing in Bella's dreams--her knowledge that he will never let her go. I can see that now. Edward was good in realizing Bella needs her space since he royally messed up and let her come to him. I realize that they are far from being together, but the kiss was just great. I look forward to hearing more about it later.  

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