Great job using Jessica.  Jessica's enthusiasm for Mike is what Bella needed.  She needed to realize that she is in a safe relationship with Jacob. Sure there is some chemistry but not passion.  That is what Bella needs.  Three cheers for Oxymoronic8!

Thanks for bringing Emmett and Jasper to the store.  I know that they were just checking out Bella.  I was so happy when Edward invited Bella to eat at his table.  Yes!!!

Great drunk Bella.  Love your stalking Edward.  The banter was fun to read.  It is time for Jacob to meet the competition. 

Jacob made a huge mistake.  I see this as the beginning of the end for Bella and Jacob.  Jacob's description of Bella is going to bite him in the booty very soon.

I love this ramp up to Bella's rebellion.

Great job stepping up the timeline.  I loved Bella and Charlie's conversation.  I am enjoying your writing style.  I already know that you have stopped writing this story.  I really appreciate that you didn't pull it.  It is well written.

I am enjoying your writing. I like your timeline with this story.  Showing us Bella would have survived the van and other things without Edward.  Well done.

I think it's great the adults in this story are aware of what is going on with the Cullen's moving into town.  Of course, fanfiction readers know Harry and Billy's reaction is a result of the Cullen's presence.

You wrote a great Bella and Jasper kiss.

Hi, I just wanted to drop a comment on how AWESOME your writing is!

 

This is the second time I've read your story, and I'm sorry for not posting a review earlier, but I've got to say, I just love your Bella voice in this fic. She's real, she's gone through a lot of stuff and your take on her makes me really relate to her. I know this is kind of a crappy review to such a gorgeous story, but all of your characters are so fleshed out and real.

 

Although I am sort of sad that Jacob turned violent and attacked Bella, it's refreshing to see that he is really struggling with his emotions and not just a RAGE machine. All too often in fics that are Pro-Edward make him out to be this violent, jealous maniac.

 

However, I am glad that Mike Newton is not written off as just a flat, Bella-obsessed character. He does like her, true, and he offers to carry her books for her, but I'm glad that he's branching out to other girls as well. Again, many fanfics portray him to do nothing but stalk Bella all day. 

 

And your take on Leah - oh my gosh, it was so heartbreaking. I know that she was originally with Sam before he imprinted on Emily, but you can't help but feel so bad for her. I hope she'll get a happy ending and live easier.

 

I'm so glad I found your fanfiction again, and I hope this review was helpful!

ugh. i want to know what it was emmett was thinking that made edward come into the store when he did

Dear Author, I have just finished reading your story to date in one sitting and what a great read it was.  I can't wait for more, please....write to your heart's content.  We, your readers, are enthralled.  Your Bella is interesting as she grows through her experiences, smitten, brave, angry, angsty, annoying, smart, bitchy, scared, overly dramatic, but increasingly likeable as her self awareness grows and she softens us with tiny glimpses of her quick humour peeking through.  She is young, vulnerable and scared and you have done an admirable job of drawing her character dynamic in that way. Your Edward was well sketched too, old but so young, endearingly vulnerable as he tries to do the right thing, quite lost. I liked that you made him put himself out there and make him fight a little harder for Bella as his awareness grews.  He's not into extraordinary self discovery but you made have made him think. I liked that you made Bella call him to account on his actions and beliefs.   Please keep him fighting for his Bella.  Your writing is growing more confident with each chapter and I think that these last two chapters were particularly good, a believable emotional journey of early reconciliaton, ready for healing (at least I hope that's where you may go....)  It has been a most enjoyable journey and I'll be checking daily for more from you.........Thank you dear Author.