i loved it!!!!!! though i would have liked to see the conversation the next day...

Author's Response:

Thanks!!!!  And you just might be in luck . . . The idea's been brewing in my head to write a one-shot sequel, Bella POV, that takes place the next day.  I've had some questions concerning what was going on in Bella's head, and how the conversation would go the next day, so the idea of writing it is very tempting.  :)

Um, this was Hot.  Great job!

Author's Response:

'Hot' is definitely what I was going for!  :)  Thanks!

Oh no, this is only a one-shot? Well, I suppose there isn't a whole lot more you could do except a few different versions on this chapter and a repeat of Twilight while still keeping it canon. I'm glad they didn't go all the way, it definitely added to the story.

 

Still, I really liked this. I haven't read one where Bella's period was addressed, and when it got into it I wasn't initially sure if I liked it or not. But I kept reading anyway and I'm glad I did because it was very good. As I read, it seemed so natural for him to desire so much more, and to not be able to resist it. I don't know how SMeyer's Edwards did it. 

 

I think it is a very strong portrayal of Edward's desire, and his guilt at having to leave Bella in such a hurry. I felt pretty sorry for her there too. And I also loved the details about Rosalie and Emmett really funny, I always enjoy little quips about their sex life and how Edward feels about it. Then his guilt about what Alice might see him doing added to that, but in a way that wasn't so much humorous, but realistic.

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for reading and taking the time to write a review!  I'm very glad that you kept reading even though you weren't sure you were going to like it or not.  I mean, I realize that this isn't everyone's thing, and so I'm appreciative that you gave it a chance, and that you enjoyed it.  :) 

Honestly, it's not like I normally write about guys going down on their girlfriends while they're on their periods, but, well, Edward *is* a vampire, so I really felt like this issue should be addressed.  And I'm glad that I did write it, seeing as how other people have wondered how Edward coped.

Once again, thanks so much!  :)

That was amazing.  Wonderful!

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I'm very glad that you enjoyed it!

I really enjoyed this on a lot of levels. I have read one or two addressing the menstration effect on Edward, but this is much better.

I enjoyed that he lost control but didn't LOSE control completely, you described the internal struggle wonderfully. I did feel bad for B that he bolted after going down on her...bc it was her first time, although it was pleasurable, I would imagine that she would be somewhat embaressed about the whole thing and his leaving so quickly (but we won't know since this was a one shot! LOL). I was GLAD that E took care of his own needs when he got home (OMG he so needed THAT during the books LOL), and his arousal at thinking that bella masturbated as well (hey that is a normal healthy thing for all creatures! So well done YOU!).

I, like a lot of the female population that read the books, wondered about E during that time of the month. He had to be aware of it...yet SM never addressed it, that those 5 days a month would have been, understandilby more difficult for him. And it was nice that you addressed it in the beginning - that he knew when she menstruated, and he knew that she had obviously gotten her period since he saw her at school.

My point - nice details. Not offensive in the least (when I read your warning I thought he was going to eat her...um LITERALLY...bc you seemed so worried about people's reactions. SO I was greatly relieved that she had not become a snack food! LOL

 

Author's Response:

Wow.  Okay, first of all, I'd like to start out by saying that I read your profile page, and I'm very, very flattered that someone with a PH.D. would have so many wonderful things to say about my writing, considering that I'm just a stay-at-home mom with a handful of college credits that don't add up to squat, lol.  (By the way, I'm very interested in reading your own work, and will do so the next chance I get.)

Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to leave such a detailed review.  I know that when I read other people's work I like to be as specific as possible about what I did and/or didn't like about their work, and so I appreciate it when others do the same for me.

I agree about Edward needing some relief during the books, lol.  :)  Especially after the parts when Bella would practically throw herself at him!  I mean, I've known a lot of guys, and I've never met anyone with the kind of control he has.  (It must be tough being a hundred-year-old-virgin.)

Anyway, about the warning I gave - When I wrote this, I honestly didn't know if people would like it, or if they'd be like, "Wow, what a perverted weirdo!"  Looking at all the positive feedback I've received, however, I realize that my warning probably seemed a bit dramatic.  Still, this isn't everyone's thing, and I wanted them to be aware.

Once again, thanks so much, and I look forward to reading your work!

A sexy approach to a question we've all wondered about. Nice.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!