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Reviews For Naughty Vampires
Reviewer: VaniV (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2009 10:29 PM · On: Naughty Vampires

*gg* that was definitely a good one... I totally loved the inventiveness (is that a word ?) of Bella with the gel... although in my experience it doesn't really get too warm... but then again, for vampires it might be different... great story

Reviewer: juggalettels (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2009 07:38 AM · On: Naughty Vampires

Ha a human moment I love it that is pretty erotic stuff though

Reviewer: msashlyjudd8 (Signed) · Date: March 14, 2009 11:28 PM · On: Naughty Vampires

Lmao buy the company that makes it, priceless. Great story.

Reviewer: Jace Nox (Signed) · Date: August 31, 2008 02:21 PM · On: Naughty Vampires

That was a great first story. I love the warming gel idea.  Keep fantastic writing.

jace

Reviewer: Nightmare and Dream (Signed) · Date: July 18, 2008 09:37 AM · On: Naughty Vampires

AWESOME smut!!! *imagines Edward buying a warming gel company* xDDD

Reviewer: ali_cat (Signed) · Date: July 15, 2008 10:54 PM · On: Naughty Vampires

*fans herself* 

Reviewer: ej-ink (Signed) · Date: July 15, 2008 12:48 PM · On: Naughty Vampires

You definitely have a talent for the sex scenes.  Very hot! 

 Some minor details that bothered me a bit ... the moose.  I can see that Bella hunting might turn Edward on, but tackling her right there next to a dead animal (assumed) takes a bit away from the scene.  Not to mention that a moose doesn't exactly say 'strong and sexy.'  Even as a vampire, I think a dead animal close by might distract me. 

 Also, having her backpack RIGHT THERE seemed a bit convenient and unrealistic.  Unless she was hunting with the backpack ON and happened to drop it as she was taking down the moose, I'm left wondering how it got there. 

 As insignificant as these details seem, they can really distract the flow of a story. 

 All-in-all, a really great first fic.  I look forward to more! 

Reviewer: bbtasha (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2008 08:54 AM · On: Naughty Vampires

Very good!

Author's Response: A pink thank you for your review!

Reviewer: NoMoreThanUsual (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2008 05:36 AM · On: Naughty Vampires

Oh my!   Great response to the challenge!  Well done!

Author's Response: My cheeks are turning pink!  You are such a great writer! *dies*

Reviewer: Jennmc (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2008 01:32 AM · On: Naughty Vampires

Very good for your first fanfic.  I look forward to what else you have in store.

Author's Response:

I'm tickled pink that you read my story!  Wow!

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