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Reviewer: MAliceBWhitlock (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2012 05:58 PM · On: WILL

Hello, I'm new around here. I started reading your story and read it at once time. It's amazing what you have created here. Addictive and perfect. Forgive me if something is written strange, is that because I am not American, but there's no way to not comment. I will continue reading, is incredible.

Kisses. Ana Alice.

Reviewer: JasonCulhane (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2010 09:18 PM · On: VISITOR

This is brilliant, I love that you've created a new character instead of sticking to canon and that you've made it work, which is what I'm doing with my fanfic. It draws me in just as much as Stephanie Meyer's works, and is an excellent first chapter.

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2010 05:56 AM · On: WILL

Hmm... another vampire? Coincidence? I don't know...

Sadly, I have come to the end... if you do decide to continue writing, I will be really pleased. I think you could really go somewhere with this. But, that said, you should only do it if you want to. There's nothing worse than a story that is written for the sake of it...

Hope my reviews are encouragement enough!

( and sorry for all those messy looking reviews earlier with the crappy codes on them... my bad...)

 



Author's Response:

Oh, how I miss the Georgia font. Just sayin'.

Thank you so much for reviewing my chapters so far. I was looking through my 'Story' folder, and found I'd actually already started on chapter 13...see, I didn't even remember. I'm still contemplating whether to write or not, since term's starting soon, but I want to...

Well, if I do decide to finish this, I will certainly let you know.

Thanks for the support!

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2010 05:54 AM · On: MERCY

Oh.

Now that changes my perspective on things...

So Robert did it so he would die...?

Did he really do to Alice what Jasper did to Katherine, or was it another lie???

I must read on. Robert's not really going to die, is he?

 

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2010 05:53 AM · On: POWER

Definitely TEAM JASPER! Grow up, Robert, seriously.

I really hope he doesn't go through with it because I think he'll come to regret it... even though he claims to hate Jasper so much... As always, gripping stuff and a climatic ending. Well done!

 

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 28, 2010 05:51 AM · On: BUILDING

Uh oh... Not. Good.

I'm wondering now whether he is going to get an army... just the talk of being outnumbered made me think of it... But, feel free to prove me wrong!

This was as good as the others, and I'm still thoroughly enjoying your story. On to the  next chapter I go!

 

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:16 AM · On: FLAWS

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*stares at the screen blankly* No. Just, no. How can a brother want to fight to the death?? I have to stop reading now because I have about 4 hours of homework left to do and it’s already late at night... This story is really addictive.

On a side note, have you considered ‘fleshing’ out the chapters a bit more? I feel that they’re a little short considering how heavy the topic is and the pace is pretty quick... Don't take that the wrong way, I just want to drink up as many words of this as possible. It’s just a suggestion :)

Anyway, I will keep reading tomorrow! I can’t wait!

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:15 AM · On: CONTROL

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I wonder how this is going to play out... I hope it ends up all okay.

It’s funny, while I was reading Robert’s POV, the words took on a voice that I’ve never heard before. I’m going to call it Robert’s voice, and it’s probably not a good thing that I’m hearing voices, but I thought you should know how much of an effect your writing is having.

By the way, I have to commend you on the changing of POVs; you actually made the writing different. A lot of stories change POV but the writing stays the same and you can’t really tell who is thinking what. But, you did it really nicely... well done!

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:14 AM · On: INTENTIONS

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That letter he wrote... I couldn’t tell whether it was sarcastic and evil or a peace-offering (with a slight edge)... Which is a good thing. It adds effect.

And is Jasper’s child still ‘alive’ or did it remain human???

So many questions... I’m busting to read on!

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:13 AM · On: WORDS

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What? You ended it there? How could you? *runs off to read the letter*

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:12 AM · On: TRIGGER

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Wow... your version of the sibling hate was so much better than my guess... Wow. I’m sorry that that’s all I can think of, but I think I’m just as flabbergasted as Bella... Just... wow.

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:11 AM · On: PAST

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Wow, moody brother much? I like it so far, and I can see where Robert is coming from. On the other hand, you would think that being the age he is, that he would learn not to hold a grudge... Or did he get mad because he saw Bella and thought she was Jasper’s mate? And so after everything, Jasper was still leading a good life?

I don’t know, they’re just rambles... I could be way off... Yeah, so I loved it and I’m already reading the next chapter :)

Reviewer: enchantedmind (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:10 AM · On: VISITOR

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I first saw this story months ago and I was very taken with the concept of this story, and told myself that I had to read it. However, I was lazy and didn’t get around to it. Then, I saw it again recently and remembered that I had wanted to read it and so here I am. And let me just say, I am not disappointed. I love it so far, and I’m dying (no pun intended) to learn some more about Robert and his relationship with Jasper... Very intriguing, easy to understand, and a totally captivating concept... I shall read on...



Author's Response:

Seriously, you have no idea what a surprise this is!

I've read all your reviews - thank you so much.

I do hope you keep reading, and if you get an email...it's probably me: I have a lot to say.

Reviewer: fanvamps (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 01:13 PM · On: VISITOR

what the heck!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Is that good or bad?...I'm hoping good. Keep reading!

Reviewer: twilight2244 (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2009 11:22 PM · On: WILL

That was really good... please keep updating...please tell me whats going to happen next... update soon...plz and thanks



Author's Response:

Thanks! New chapter still hasn't been written, so I dunno...I'll try and write it before New Year's!

Reviewer: FrozenSoldier (Signed) · Date: December 25, 2009 11:13 PM · On: WILL

Aw that is so sad :(

I didn't want him to die.. even though I thought he had done wrong..

Robert killed Jasper's son? Did you mention him before this chapter? :| Poor Jas!

I wonder who it is that is following Jasper.. can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

I know it's sad. But I really wanted him to be a good guy in the end. He died brave.

Amen.

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 24, 2009 09:01 PM · On: WILL

Aww, I'm so honored that you dedicated this chapter to me! Wow! Nobody has done that before! THank you! I wonder if this vampire he sensed in the airport will come into play or if it was just a random encounter. Hey, you never did tell me who the person is that is Robert in the banner. Great chapter.



Author's Response:

Honestly, I have no idea. I asked roroduff, who made the amazing banner, who the cute guy was...and she said she just google imaged jasper hale to get him! You could try doing that if you really like the look of him!

Actually, I think I might do some research...

Reviewer: Spike82 (Signed) · Date: December 24, 2009 02:17 PM · On: WILL

It's so sad for Robert understand that Jasper loves him, but at the end of his life. This chapter is very good, but you know right i want more??? And i can't say i don't understand Robert and why he killed his wife but Jasper's son too?
Like I said, very sad!!!
Gaia

Author's Response:

Hey Gaia

You're right about the whole 'I can't understand' thing. There's more to it than you think;)

Reviewer: hptwilighter (Signed) · Date: December 24, 2009 01:16 PM · On: WILL

Very touching, but I really want to know about that other vampire at the airport, I have a feeling it has to do with Robert.



Author's Response:

You're right...

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2009 09:20 PM · On: MERCY

Whoa. Great chapter! I have a feeling that they aren't going to just let Robert die. The whole story is about him and Jasper.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing all my chapters! But I'm afraid to tell you that Robert does die...just wait.

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2009 09:13 PM · On: REMEMBER

I'm guessing instead of screaming for her life, Alice saw a vision of something else that she is screaming about. Great job with the letter. I like that she said that she willing to die for love. That's sweet.

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2009 09:03 PM · On: POWER

Awesome power! To be completely invisible even to Edward. Wow. Great chapter!

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2009 08:54 PM · On: BUILDING

Oh great. What is Robert gonna do now. Hmm. Good chapter.

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2009 08:47 PM · On: FLAWS

What? They are going to fight? No. I don't think Jasper will go for it. But then again, he wants to prove to his brother that he's not a coward, so maybe. Great chapter

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: December 22, 2009 08:40 PM · On: CONTROL

Hmm now I'm starting to see it from Roberts point of view. Interesting.

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