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Reviewer: bellas shrink (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 03:44 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Loved the WHOLE thing...In the middle when E was all angsty and whiney loved Jasper putting him in his place (bc he was so into himself he missed B standing there) BUT Great Make Up Lemon! LOVED IT!
I thought it was cute the way your "reviewer rumor mill" went - very very clever! I am sure they LOVED your shout out!
Love the story...and love how it is all coming together. I think this is interesting bc she is changing in stages (as opposed to everyone else's stories where it is 3 days of writhing in pain and peeing on the bed! NOT that I don't enjoy that - well not the peeing part! But this is just different...and I LOVE different!)
Sorry that Charlie is being an ass...although he did have a line that i actually laughed out loud at (which was probably bad bc Bella was crying after he said it! WHOOPS!)
Well done, as always!
Karen
Author's Response: Thanks Karen. I'm happy you like what I did. It was fun to write.
You're review made me laugh out loud. The peeing comment is too funny! Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 03:15 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
I loved the Edward speech too! :) Really good chapter!
One thing I'm wondering is what are the wolves going to do since Charlie is left alone to ponder stuff... will the wolves try to jump in and convince him otherwise of the Cullens??
Author's Response: Hmmm...great question. You'll find out next chapter. Thanks, Lynnlin!
Reviewer: edward08 (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 03:14 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
that was amazing cant wait for the update
Reviewer: nidka (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 02:49 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
I loved that speech too!
SM didn´t address the whole Lauren situation in her books. I never cared for the character anyway but, I loved the telling off.
One small thing, there were a few typos in the chapter but the essence was great. Keep writing.
sincerely,
Karina.
Author's Response: Sorry dear. I thought I got all the typos. I'll look at it again. Sometimes I see what I want to see and not what is written. My computer also doesn't type letters as fast as I type at times, so letters get omitted sometimes, and I dont' catch it. Thanks for saying I made mistakes in such a nice way.
Reviewer: Twilight Addict (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 02:49 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Go Edward! Way to put Lauren in her place!
Reviewer: Nannabell (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 02:39 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Okay, so Billy's noseyness has finally gotten on my nerves for the last time. I loved the speech that Edward gave to Lauren. ( Although, he should have told her that she had something on her nose or in her teeth to make it a little funnier). I think it is OOC for Edward to say "baby", but I thought it was adorable. I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Forgive me, but what on earth is OOC? I'm so out of the loop with internet jargon. That's one I don't know.
Billy and the pack are being a bit of a pain. I haven't decided exactly what I am going to do with them yet. Lauren's speech was fun to write. I love your suggestion, but I didn't think about it at the time. I could just see them all turning to leave and Alice saying, "By the way, you have some lettuce in your teeth." Hahaha! Maybe I'll use that later.
Next chapter explains what he's doing with the whole "baby" thing. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Iris917 (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 02:37 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
I think this is one of the best stories I have ever read! I definitely didn't see Jacob telling Charlie about the Cullens. Hopefully Charlie will learn accept the news and be okay with it. Lauren really needed to be put in her place, so good job with that. Also, I think it's okay that you had Edward call Bella baby. I find it hard to believe that he never called her baby during their entire time together, even if it wasn't mentioned in the books. It also worked really well where you used it. Edward was definitely "in the moment."
Author's Response: Thanks for the review and kind words, Iris. I'm glad you like what I am writing. I am an aspiring novelist, and am working on my very first story now. It makes me feel like I might actually be able to make a go of it when I hear such nice things. Thank you.
I like to surprise my readers and take them directions they don't expect. I don't want to be predicatable.
Reviewer: Re-Re (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 01:40 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Excellent chapter!
Always a pleasure to read.
Author's Response: Thanks, Re-Re.
Reviewer: Stellarrose (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 01:29 AM · On: Chapter 24: Don't Hate Me Because I'm Beautiful
Whoa!!!!! don't stop there!!!!!! AAARRRGGGHHH!!!!!!!!! OME...Jacob just broke the treaty!
And Charlie!!! LOTS of stuff about to happen!
Author's Response: Next chapter is up, so it will explain a lot. I tried not to keep you hanging for long. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Clancy67 (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:56 AM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses
Wow, I'm totally stunned at how incredible this chapter is. I love it. I've seen the title around for a few months, I'm not sure why I waited to read it, but I'm glad I decided to do it today. What a fantastic story idea, really original and well written. Thanks for sharing your story, I'm looking forward to reading more!
Author's Response: Thank you, Clancy. What a kind thing to say. I'm glad you weren't creeped out by Chapter 1. Some readers have been, thinking that Edward was "stalkerish". That is not how I perceived my Edward nor did I wish to portray him in that manner. I'm so happy it clicked with you. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: twimomgina (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:48 AM · On: Chapter 22: Changes
what a fantastic way to change!!! you hit the nail on the head with this chapter.
Reviewer: The Wicked One (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:31 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Ok this was just awsome... I am so enraptured in your writing... I always get caught up in the story...
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm working on my first novel, and I only have the tiniest bit of it done. I hope people respond to it as well as they do my fanfic. You all are so kind to me! Thanks Wicked One.
Reviewer: twimomgina (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:27 AM · On: Chapter 21: Sentimental Reasons
beautiful andmoving
Reviewer: zahir (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:26 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!braaaaaaaaaaavvvvvvvvvvvvvooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I am crying over Charlie but Lauren needed that and more!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: Mora-Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:16 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
wow, what a tangled aray of ups and downs with wonderful outbursts! Love it!
Reviewer: NicoleCullen (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2009 12:08 AM · On: Chapter 24: Don't Hate Me Because I'm Beautiful
mean!!! that cliffhanger is so not cool! ;). I cant wait to see how poor charlie handles all the details...we all know how much he loves those!!
Reviewer: eternallyedward (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 11:48 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Go Edward! Too bad we can't see him deliver that speech in a movie. I like the idea of Billy and Jacob exposing the Cullens-it seems more believable. Great job.
Reviewer: rhiannon113 (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 11:25 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses
Perhaps Kleenex should add a new warning to their packaging: Warning! Tissues not intended for consumption! LOL
I LOVE this!!!
Author's Response: Hahaha! Hilarious. Thanks for making me smile today.
Reviewer: tooblu96 (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 10:49 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
I really hope Edward gets over his self-loathing soon. Sometimes it's a bit too much! My goodness! I hope he gets over it soon.
Reviewer: twogoods (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 10:40 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Burn! I loved that speech! Great update. can't wait to see how the rest of the "change" happens. I have a feeling it's going to be..interesting!
Reviewer: Laila Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 10:30 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Go Edward. It was awesome how Edward told Lauren off. I like you're Edward more than the book Edward because unlike the book Edward your Edward is growing as a person and overcoming his problems. Your Edward is more forward and he isn't running away from his peoblems that's great. I'm sorry for Bella and what Billy and Sam did to her i hope Charlie can accept Bella as she is now.
Thanks for posting.
Author's Response: Wow Laila. Thank you. I guess in my stories, I try to fix what I didn't like about the characters in the books. I love the idea of the Twilight saga, but I guess that I wanted more character development. As always, thanks for reading.
Reviewer: goldeneyedgirl (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 10:12 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
Are you kidding???? That was great!!!!!!! Edward finally got BALLS!!!!! Yea!!!!! And with that fact alone he might say baby for emphasis!!
Lauren is a rotten dirty skanky bitch!!!! She deserves more torment and abuse, I sincerely hope you condsider that for future chapters....I am really enjoying this story. Thank you so much for writing!!!!!!!!!
I also have to add that it is extremely refreshing that Rose has a heart!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I'm happy that you like what I am doing with the borrowed characters.
The situation with Lauren will be resolved in a way that none of you expect.
One of my pet peeves was how awful Rose was in the books. I hated reading about her. She was so cold, and since I'm sort of a warm and fuzzy type of person, I have a tendency to write her with less iciness.
Thanks for reading, goldeneyedgirl.
Reviewer: goldeneyedgirl (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 09:44 PM · On: Chapter 24: Don't Hate Me Because I'm Beautiful
I don't know how I missed this chapter, but I finally read it and I am moving on to the next. Thanks for writing, I am truly enjoying this story.
Reviewer: tooblu96 (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 09:30 PM · On: Chapter 24: Don't Hate Me Because I'm Beautiful
I love the turn this is taking...I am anticipating what Charlie is going to do. Awesome!!
Reviewer: binki (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 09:19 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling
I'm so glad Bella is helping Edward because they do belong together. Maybe Charlie needs to be saved by the vampires including Bella so he understands how good they are.
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