ugh...he should have listened to that inner 17 year old and just bit her already....i know his reasoning was sweet...but damn...this decision will bite them both in the ass when James sees her...ugh...i hate him...nice job! 

i hope you have him explain to her the meaning of vampire mating...but i am pretty sure she gets that already...

As always, Great chapter! I'll have to say I'm amazed, (truly, I am) by how well written the whole chapter was, including the graphic part! I think you captured the feelings and actions very well, and if I may say so, I'm proud of you! (That may sound stupid, but I don't care) The fact that you cut up the story for your more "sensitive" readers is remarkable. I think I've said it before, but I'll say it again, you're an amazing writer, and I love your story! 

Baseball scene... Nomads... That can't go well.

Keep up your great work on this, and update soon ;)



~Sizone

P.S. I love that you base Emmett on your husband! And the way the character cracks me up, you must have hit jackpot when it comes to sense of humor ;) There definitely should be more people like that around!

Author's Response:

Hi Sizone.  Great to hear from you as always.  I'm glad that you enjoyed what I wrote in this chapter.

Yes, my hubby is amazing.  There is a lot of laughter in our house.  I think the sweetest thing about my husband though, even more so than his sense of humor is the way his eyes soften when he looks at our boys.  Or when he laughs at something they've done and his dimples show in full force.  I love his baby-face--he's so damn handsome!  He's my rock--he keeps me grounded and helps me to not take life so seriously.  I did hit the jackpot.  Believe me, I know just how incredibly lucky I am.  Thanks for reading.

That was a great chapter..Great job with their first time...So romantic...I loved it..Yes, please explain that about their lovemaking and mate..I pretty much know, but I want to read it...Update soon.

that was great, graphic but not overly so. bravo. :)

I can't wait for her to be changed...

post again soon. xx

Loved it, very sweet and tender!

Ignore the negative reviews.

Please remember this is YOUR story, in YOUR head - as long as you have it rated appropriately, delete the reviews that complain. I am all pro freedom of speech, but for you to be terrified to post bc of a bunch of people that want nothing more than what was in the original books (aka - fade to black) then there are many stories here rated G or PG that will be appropriate for them...and their are the orginal books.

BUT, please, many of us are reading this BC it is an adult story - several of my friends don't want to read SM's books again in FF form...so by catering to the graphic haters you are also disappointing those of us that ONLY read NC 17 work - and LOVE IT.

So, thank you for the lovely lemon. I am terribly sorry that a lot of narrow minded repressed people hurt you and made you doubt your abilities as a writer...please know that Edward and Bella do NOT need to be virgins for the rest of their existence in YOUR STORY! I give you permission to write your heart out - and delete the ones that cannot deall (or suggest they go back to their retentive book shelves and revamp the teen series, if that is what they want...)

**Gets off soapbox**

Author's Response:

Thanks dear.  I just don't want to get so graphic that sex overpowers the story.  This is a love story, and sex happens.  Glad you liked it.  Thanks for being my "bouncer"--lol!

You got a negative reaction before? Goodness what did people think they were reading? If it was clearly marked they should know what they're getting into.

I thought this was lovely and tasteful. Very well done.

I LOVED that chpter, it was sweet and sensual, I don't think it was too graphic at all, but it did get the point or idea across! I can't wait for the next chapter!!! Your story is one of my absolute favorites!!!!! Keep it up!!!

Very tastefully done!  Great job!

 

 

that was great i love your story   please update soon

I thought that you did an awesome job with this chapter! I think the scene was tastefully done and honestly, I like a little maturity in their relationship! Looking forward to your next post!

LindyP :)

I thought the love-making scene was very tasteful and showed the love they have for each other. It wasn't unnecessarily graphic or objectionable. So, I thought you did a very nice job.