wow! I can't imagine what Bella must be going through! I hope Bella gets her revenge and keep writing so you can update soon!

Great chapter! Bella is really starting to become her own in her new life. I like how you incoperated all of the Cullens in the chapter each with their differnt means of importance. update soon great job again!

I still love this story... I am sorry if I forgot to review last time...

I just can't wait to read more.

This is really interesting.  I'm so curious about what's going on w/ Bella.  Why no thirst? Why no pain during the change? Why couldn't Alice see her during the change?  Can't wait to find out.  Also, I love that Edward was right there when she woke up in the last chapter and that he's helping her get through this.  I don't go on the forums b/c I already waste enough time on this site, lol, so I'll be looking forward to the next chapter :-)

I really really like this. But I feel like the way Edward speaks is kind of awkward, like when he says I could not bear to lose her to Carlise. I love BPOV but EPOV isn't quite working as well for me right now. Great job though and keep writing. 

I'm still reading...and still enjoying!...but I wonder why someone didn't try *calling* Renee?  Phone's much faster than a flight.  All it would have taken was a word dropped about how Bella was in danger, Bella needed her, or something had happened and no one knew where she was, etc, and Renee would've come running...probably passing Victoria at the airport.  They could've dealt with the effects later, but it would've gotten her out of harm's way.  I get that you no doubt have a specific storyline in mind, but I think I would've accepted it a little easier if someone had at least *thought* of that option.

Other than that, though I'm enjoying the story so far, and can't wait to read more :)

-sil

Author's Response:

Actually...what you said kinda got to me, so I went back and edited that chapter. Now, they do try to call, they just don't reach anyone. At first I thought, well, I guess it's just not the way I saw it, but then it kept bugging me - good call on your part, now I think it's much better! It didn't help Renee or Phil, as that would have just confused the storyline too much, and caused me to go off on a tangent of some sort, but at least they tried to call now. Thanks!!  :)

Nice   very nice  I like how everything is going slow so as not to overwhelm Bella,   she seems to be in shock    which is understandable.   Jake is a dick.  

And could Bellas eye color be because she had almost no blood left in her at the time of her change?

Author's Response:

LOL - Jake is not very nice right now, but he'll come around. Eye color...hmm.....  :)

I like how the story is piecing together now that Bella is awake.. I hope the next chapter comes out soon!

Great chapter.  Poor Bella.  She is overwhelmed!  I hope Edward and Bella get to share a few private tiem moments before the shit hits the fan.  Her mind must be going a mile a minute.  I can't wait for more!!!

Author's Response:

Yes, Bella is just trying to process things right now. The story has a way to go, so I hope you continue to enjoy it!

This was a lovely chapter. I'm glad you're moving things on and not lingering. I hated how you had Edward so unmerciless in his execution of Riley. I think it was very OOC. But I respect that you stuck to what YOU thought was right for your story. I thank you for this story, it is quite entertaining. And, as you can see, I have not been scared off by anything. And I doubt I will be, even if I occassionally disagree.

 

~Mia

Author's Response:

Hi! I'm sorry you felt that way about the Riley/Edward thing. I understand what you're saying, but at the same time, I thought Edward would just let the rage consume him and take it out on Riley - he was so upset at not being able to take care of James himself, that I just assumed he'd be extra lethal to Riley now that he had the chance to get revenge. I actually went back to that chapter and added a couple of things to possibly explain his actions better. Anyway, I really appreciate your input and opinion, even if there are things we disagree on sometimes - I'm glad you haven't been scared off, lol, and I hope you keep reading (and enjoying). Thanks!!  :)

Hih, they don't know what they're missing out on not playing on the thread. We're just too much fun!!! lol

I really like this chapter. ALOT! But Jake is an ass, really he is. I kind of liked him by the end of BD, just not the whole "will you please consider having my wifes babies with her?" thing...pukety puke... anyway, he was not very nice. And I have a prediction on what Em and J are gonna tell Edward. I think... I'll share it on the thread lol

 

Great job!!

Author's Response:

Well it looks like you convinced them, some more people have shown up - yay!

Jake will come around, don't worry, I know he's being a jerk right now.

Good chapter.  I can't wait to read more.  :)

Author's Response:

Thank you.