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Reviewer: One way (Signed) · Date: August 25, 2015 01:56 PM · On: Chapter 1 - First Meeting

Awesome, I felt from the beginning Scripture has a much bigger part in 

Carlisle's life than indicated.  Thank you



Author's Response:

Thank you.  For me, it only makes sense, given his background and the period he was born.  I truly appreciate your review.  :D 

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2014 04:19 PM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

  'He sees his daughter as young, with her whole life ahead of her and doesn't want her to be trapped into, or brought down by, the responsibilities I bring to the table.(...) If she chooses me and grants me the honor of being a part of her life, I will not let her put off her dreams and goals.'        Not to mention she will have a lot of time to achieve them.        ;)

   "Hello, Mr. Black. My name is Carlisle Cullen. I'm under the impression you have some shifters on your reservation now and was hoping to speak with the Alpha about boundaries."(...)        The same reddish-brown wolf from earlier begins growling his protest and slowly advances forward.(...) "Jacob! Enough! We understand and will hold to the terms established by our ancestors. We will remain within our terrain and expect you to do the same."        Always the diplomat.  Heh, better to prevent an explosion than pick up the bits later.  I still wonder what is in Jake's head now.  Friendly protectiveness?  Or...?

  'Thanks to one of Emmett's experiments several years ago, he discovered our bodies are able to process alcoholic beverages and water, but milk and thick drinks, such as shakes, do not mix well in our systems.'        Seriously?  I thought he was joking about liking to experiment with human food.  But I'm not totally surprised either.        ;)

  'Emmett reaches for a breadstick sitting in the center of the table and his jacket sleeve brushes against the candle flame a bit too long. In his haste to put it out quickly, he jumps up in surprise in order to put his arm out in the wine bucket between us. When he shoves his chair backward, it slams into a passing server carrying a full tray.'        LOL!!  No comments.        X-D

  '"Bella?" She looks for the source and begins laughing when she sees Rose is pulling Mr. Coward toward us by his ear.(...)        When Rose stops in front of us, she simply clears her throat and gives him the evil eye. "Uh, um, well," she increases the pressure on his ear slightly. "Okay! OKAY! I'm sorry I bumped into you and ran off. I should have apologized and helped you out instead."'        Oh, yeah, Rose was definitely letting Bella in a bit at this point.        ^_^

  "Hello Dad. Carlisle was just telling me good night."        "Sure he was. Well, thank you for bringing her home safely. Good night."(...)        I smirk at my father, lean into the door, and whisper in his ear. "Thank you, Daddy. I'll be in shortly. I'm going to talk with Carlisle for a bit and wish him good night. Love you." I give him a kiss on the cheek and pull the door closed.(...) "Now, I believe you were wishing me good night, yes?"        Hahahah!!  Good girl.

 You know, non-canon couples usually are not my thing.  But that's just because it usually mean the canon couple broke up (like, for instance, Bella not forgiving Edward after his misshap in New Moon).  No-no.  The way you made it, though, is perfect!  And, since we didn't even get to the really fun part, with Bella learning the secret, I fervently hope the sequence is alive and well in your head.        ;)



Author's Response:

That's true.  She will have a lot more time.  LOL

LOL - I like the way you put that "than pick up the bits later." Patience, Jacob is a mystery.  *winks*

No, Emmett is not afraid to try new things.  :D And isn't he so much fun when it comes to fire?  *winks*

Rose is quietly loyal, isn't she? 

Yep, Bella knows how to handle Charlie, just enough to let him know she is a grown woman, but still his "little girl" too. :D

I'm so glad you gave non-canon a try by reading Waterfall Beginnings.  There are so many fanfiction stories that start out with Edward/Bella and have those two split (after Italy, before Italy, cheating, death, etc.) that I didn't want to go down that same path.  Then again, I am a non-canon gal, so it wouldn't have sat right with me anyway.  Although, my first attempt at a fanfiction story has Bella with Edward.  That one was supposed to be a OS, but the few pre-readers I had suggested I do a lot of edits and make it into a multi-chapter story.  I have gone back to it, but keep running into my own road blocks.  :P

Anyway, back to WfB...

I have been working on bits and pieces here and there, but I need to tie them together.  Plus, the "what comes next" isn't there yet.  Weird?  Yep, tell me about it.  I have gone back and forth.  Part of the "what comes next" is in Bell's Chronicles, my outtake "story".  This will comprise of outtakes from any story I have written, or will write.  Right now, there is just one chapter with Carlisle's POV from WfB is in there. 

You should give some of my other stories a try.  I hope you won't be disappointed.

Although, (as of right now) I still need to get Lighthouse in a Storm finished posting here in Twilighted. However, it is completely posted in FFn, TwiWrite, and The Writer's Coffee Shop. 

Thank you so very much for taking time from your day to review EVERY chapter of Waterfall Beginnings.  Each review has made me smile. 

Bell :D

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2014 08:49 AM · On: Chapter 5 - Thanksgiving Weekend

'“Yes, I’m fine.  No, he didn’t hurt me.  He wouldn’t hurt me.”  I silently groan at this.  She has no idea how much danger she was in.(...)  Thankfully, his father took precautions by asking her to wait for his call before visiting.  I won’t keep her from her friend, but I also know that when she does, I will not be the least bit comfortable, happy, or relaxed.'        Nice.  A mistake that won't be repeated.        :)

  'As he begins pulling the plastic zipper apart, a roar erupts and before we even know where it came from, Edward is crouching in the doorway.  His coal eyes search the room and land on the bag in Jasper’s hand.'        Geez!!  I noticed that you made their instincts, in this story, much more overwhelming than in canon, didn't you?  From Carlisle's own urges toward Bella to Edward's reaction...

  Man, had he shared a classroom with Bella, this Edward would have slaughtered the whole school, ideals be damned.  Hell, he was dragged away to Denali, hundreds of miles away from her, and is still psychotic.  And all that because of a dry blood stain!!

  '“I’m here, kiddo.  Uh, I have no idea what could be happening, but if Billy asked you to wait for his call, I think that would be best.  I wouldn’t want you getting hurt after all.  I’m glad you’re safe.”  That catches my attention, having heard it for the third time today.'        Ok, weird-o-meter pinging here.  Is this Charlie less clueless than the norm?  

   “Miss Isabella Swan, would you do me the honor of allowing me to take you out for an evening?”(...)        “I’m fine.  I was, uh... I was just pinching myself to make sure I am awake.”(...)        “Why would you do something like that?”        “Really?  Haven’t you ever heard the old adage, ‘Pinch me, I must be dreaming’?”(...)        “Yes.”        “Yes?”        “Yes, I would love to spend an evening with you, Carlisle Cullen.”        Sweet!!  Though Carlisle needs to do more casual reading, or watch movies, so he would know what she was talking about.  But I guess that, from now on, he will have a reason to.        ;)

  Just a small mistery still nagging.  Why 'Sparky'?  I felt he had a reasoning behind it, but didn't want to say.  I confess I didn't get it.



Author's Response:

Sparky is just a nickname that came to him based on their initial meeting and the reactions he had toward her; they "sparked" a mostly dormant part of him.  The best way I can explain it here is, he was thinking about her, the short amount of time they have known each other, and the reactions she evokes within him... creating a "spark" in a sense.  *winks* Maybe I'll try to work that into the story later. 

Carlisle is in the know about a lot of things, but not really completely up-to-date on everything because he mostly focuses on the medical aspects, as well as a few other interests.  While he enjoys modern movies, TV shows, etc., he isn't as versed in those areas, mostly because they didn't exist for most of his life (human, or vampire).  Does that make sense? IDK, I guess it does to me.  :P

As far as their insticts, I guess I see their senses as being hightened. Based on the way SM put it, I think she made them seem so much grander than how she wrote them out.  I mean, they could hear conversations from other rooms or from distances. Edward could hear thoughts that weren't in the same room, or even the same building/house.  If they could really hear that far and their gifts could work over great distances, why didn't their sense of smell and taste do the same?  Again, it is just how I see it, I suppose. 

And remember, Edward has no ties to Bella.  He doesn't see her as he did in the Saga and doesn't want her involved in their life.  So, his reactions are like those of Emmett in the Saga when he was unable to stop himself from obtaining and draining his singer.  The difference this time is that Carlisle does have an interest in this particular singer.  Therefore, the family is going to protect her from the same fate to save, what they believe to be, Carlisle's mate.  They want him to be happy and have what they have; someone to share his eternal life. 

You've made me think about the soundproof thing and their abilities.  Carlisle hasn't found a good reason why their abilities haven't worked due to the soundproofed room... yet. I don't know if he will in this story, but I mostly wanted a place where they were save from prying and intrusive gifts.  *shrugs* 

I really have to thank you so much.  Your reviews have meant so much to me... so much so that my mind has been on this story  quite a bit lately.  So... THANK YOU!!! :D

I do not claim to be a perfect author, or that my stories will make complete sense the entire journey, but I do try to tie things together and explain as much as I can.  So, when you ask the questions, or make the comments, like you have... in a nice, curious manner... it truly helps me to think through the story.  THANK YOU FOR THAT!!! :D

 

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: June 03, 2014 03:51 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Separation

  “Jasper, how on earth will the bottoms be any different than the top?”        “Um, well, as you know, Bella wore these pajamas recently.”(...)        “Okay.  What are you not telling me?”        “Well, it would seem…”        “Yes?”        “It would seem shegotabitexcitedwhilewearingthem.”        “I’m sorry Jasper, but I didn’t quite catch that...  Oh. OH!  Um, well, okay then.”        BWAHAHAHAHAAAHHH!!!        X-D

  “Well, I would like to ask your permission to call on your daughter.”        “You want to call on my daughter, Carlisle.  What on Earth are you talking about?”        “I, uh, um, I am asking for your permission to court Bella, Sir.”        Suddenly he bursts into a fit of laughter.  “Court my daughter?  Seriously Son, who asks to call on, or court anyone these days.”        Heheheh!  Man, I swear I felt embarassed for him.  Even Charlie knows the protocol he's following is dated.  Well, since he's out of the game since the 17th century...  At least it shows how much he wants things to work right with Bella, so I should cut him some slack, I suppose.        :-]

  'It’s not as though I can tell him there is no need to worry about any of them getting pregnant because we are vampires and unable to create new life since we are already dead.'        Dead, unable to create new life...  Hmm, this makes me wonder how you feel about hybrids, as far as this story goes.

  '“Bella, listen very carefully.  I need you to slowly back away and get inside the house.”(...)        “O-okay, Billy.  I-I t-trust you.”  I begin heading to the house when I hear a low, intense growling noise.  I quickly look around for its source before realizing it is coming from my best friend'        Well, well, BBW is here.  My first thought was that Carlisle might be visiting Bella, but then I realized Jake was probably reacting to Alice's scent.

  If I got it right, Jake never tried to stake a claim on Bella in all these years of convivence.  Does he have a hidden crush?  Will he be a nuisance now?

  The plot thickens.        :)



Author's Response:

LOL - Some of those answers will be revealed later in the story, so... please forgive me for not revealing anything.  *winks*

Yep, poor Carlisle... and he is really the elder in this situation... think about that.  LOL Maybe he is trying too hard, but he really wants everything to work out right... respectfully... to show not only her, but everyone how much she means to him. 

Ah... the hybrid question... another one of those that will be answered later.  Sorry.  :(

Jake will be another mystery to come. 

Thank you so much for another great review that made me smile and laugh.

Bell :D

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 31, 2014 09:16 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Chance Encounters

  “Okay, Mr. Weber, Joshua will need to keep these stitches from getting wet for the next several days.  Give this note to the receptionist and schedule an appointment to get his stitches removed ten days from today.  She will give you some waterproof adhesive dressing pads which will keep the area dry while he takes a bath.”        “Dr. Cullen, I don’t need those pads.  I promise to keep the stitches dry.”        “Joshua, you are not going without a bath for ten days.”        LOL!!!  Why, the little rascal...        X-D

  'Thankfully, the office can be made soundproof, something necessary to keep conversations private amongst super sensitive ears, not even Edward or Alice’s abilities seem to work for a reason I haven’t determined yet.'        They don't work?  Because of a mere soundproofing mechanism?  Strange.

  “What are you thinking?  I haven’t been able to gather anything from your thoughts since arriving home.  How are you blocking me?”        “I honestly don’t know what you are talking about, Edward.  I haven’t been deliberately keeping anything from you.”        Interesting.  Almost like Bella's shield is "contagious", or as if she was protecting him from distance...  

  “Tell me you are not planning to pursue this, Carlisle!”  Rosalie demands.(...)        “She is a young and healthy human.  She deserves the chance to live a normal human life and typical college experiences.  Go to a public beach in the mid-day sun, date, get married, have children, grow old, and have grandchildren.”        “I agree, Carlisle.  She is a human.(...)  Even though I truly believe we are cursed by this life, I now understand that we can have love and happiness, but I do not think playing with humans is the proper thing to do.  She should not be damned to this life, especially since she is perfectly healthy with a long, human life ahead of her.  We should leave her alone and maybe even move in order to keep her out of harm’s way.”        Playing...  Pfht!!  There's no "playing" in this, redhead.  I knew those two would be the voices of doom and gloom.  I'm glad the rest of the family is more supportive and open.  And very much count on Carlisle to take Bella's opinion and choices on the matter as something to be respected, unlike some people I know.        :-/

  'I am finished by three in the afternoon and the warm day with a cloudy overcast makes it the perfect opportunity to take a walk through Pioneer Square.  I love sitting under the shade at Waterfall Garden.  Thankfully, Alice assured me before I left that today will remain cloudy and I won’t have any problems getting around the city.(...)        Once I finish my soup and salad, I put an ear-bud in my right ear and turn on my MP3 player as I walk through the Iron Pergola toward Waterfall Garden.(...)  This place resurrects the memories of Charlie bringing me here with the Blacks and Clearwaters after Grandma Marie and Sarah passed.  Waterfall Garden is one of my favorite places he took us that summer.'        Ah, the subtle touch of fate to reunite the future lovers...  Heh, and Alice, certainly, didn't want to ruin the surprise.        :-P

  'The week has been very restless due to strange, indecipherable dreams waking me in the middle of the night, each involving the delicious Doctor Cullen.  Strangely, they include people with red-eyes just as pale and supremely attractive as Dr. Sexy, along with horse-size wolves.'        She dreamed WHAT??!?  Are you sure she isn't a precog, like Alice, on top of being a shield?  At least, I assume she's still a shield in your story.

  Lovely, Bell.  And glad to know you plan to expand on what you already done.  I'm really liking how this is going.        ^_^

 



Author's Response:

Thank you.  Each of your reviews has brought a smile to my face, seeing the parts that intrigued, or amused you.  :D

I'm honestly not 100% set on what makes Bella special yet.  Weird, I know, but I'm wanting to keep her in character, yet not at the same time. 

As far as Alice goes, I like the idea that she cannot see everything.  I guess I am not a fan of her knowing everything to the point she tries to control everyone's lives, especially Bella.  So, her gift will most likely be spotty in this fic, sometimes she sees what happens, but other times, she thinks she sees what will happen and is incorrect.  Then there will probably be times she doesn't see anything.  Like I said, I'm not a fan of how Alice typically is in fics and will "play" with her gift a bit. LOL Same idea with Edward. 

As far as her dreams, that's sort of what it seemed like to me while reading the Saga... like she knew something deep down that was revealing itself in her dreams, sort of procognitive.  Again, I am not set on Bella's abilities, they could be nothing much, or something else altogether.  *winks*

Yeah, I had to have some fun with Carlisle's career... it isn't all about doom and gloom, even though that is pretty much why people find themselves in the ER, children can make things fun and interesting.  Add in the parents that know their children pretty well, and you have some light-hearted moments.  :D

I forgot to say it in the last response, but each review means a lot to me... thank you so much.  Putting in the effort to leave your thoughts is very much appreciated.  :D

 

Reviewer: jacksperluvr (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2014 08:20 AM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

i like it a lot so far



Author's Response:

Awww.  Thank you so much!  It means so much to hear that. 

Thank you for taking the time to leave a review.  It is greatly appreciated and loved.  :D

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 27, 2014 03:31 PM · On: Chapter 2 - Revelations

  "Carlisle. Have ya ever considered the possibility that she is your mate, your one true love?"(...)        "No. Why would I? I didn't react to her as Edward did with Esme or Rosalie with Emmett and both Esme and Emmett were near death at the time. I looked directly into her eyes and still didn't behave that strongly."        And thanks for that.  I doubt he behaving like a neanderthal guard dog would have gone well.        :-P

  "When I met Alice, there was no pull for either of us. For me, there was just an intense need to believe and a cravin' for the life she promised me. We're not mates, but we chose long ago to live as a couple. Even though we're not perfectly mated, we love each other deeply and chose to marry based on our love for each other."        Which means that any of the two, at any moment, cold meet the one.  Hmmm...  Interesting choice of yours, Bell, making them not true mates.  Jasper and Alice are, usually, among the most devout couples.  Personally, if was I to make a couple not really mated, it would be Emmett and Rose.  Original, at the very least.        :-]

  'I have been out of the courting game since I was human and then it was almost caveman-like. "Me like you. You marry me, bear many children. *grunt*" Even better were the arranged marriages. "Two sheep, you take daughter." Yeah, that is going to work!'        LOL!!  This passage cracks me up for some reason.

  '"Oh! Please don't be offended if I fall asleep. It has been a very long night, what with the hourly wake up calls." I wink at him. Wink? Since when do I wink and at any male?'        This doesn't get old.        X-}

  Sweet!  All that's left is to see how they will meet again without Bella having to break a bone or something.  I'm also curious to see the family's reaction.  I think I can foresee one or two buzz-killers when Carlisle tell them...



Author's Response:

Uh... regarding your last statement... um... I should tell you, this ends at the prompt I was given.  However, I am working to extend it beyond that because so many were interested in it continuing.  I'm sorry.  :( As I have said in the AN of the last chapter...

*Story will continue, but not until I have it all written out. I am gradually working on bits and pieces. When I am finished, this will allow for regular updates. :D *

Yeah... I think I did this with Jasper and Alice because, in my mind, he is all mine.  *winks* LOL I had to have a reason for Rosalie to be so desperate to save Emmett, without the fact he looks like her best friend's little boy... that was just a creepy thought to me.  :P

Those basic lines always made me laugh.  That's basically how I think of those times, cavemen and arranged marriages.  Maybe there is more to them, but it seems so neaderthal.  *shrugs*

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 26, 2014 02:14 PM · On: Chapter 1 - First Meeting

  'Suddenly something stirs within me and then I'm fighting a foreign, yet familiar, discomfort I have pushed aside throughout all my years(...)        In all my years as a doctor, I haven't yet crossed that line and as much as I yearn to jump the invisible border now more than ever, I refuse to disrespect her in that manner. I've seen many women throughout my lifetime, so why does this young woman evoke such a strong, unexpected response within me?'

  '"Until what, Miss Swan?" Mr. Delicious asks. WAIT! What did I just call him? Trying to ignore the effects his voice has on me and with my eyes still downcast, I take the opportunity to peruse the rest of him. Even with the white lab coat, he seems to be well built from chest down.(...)        A clearing of his throat brings me out of my hormone-induced thoughts. My eyes flash back to his gorgeous and sparkling dark, amber eyes. GAH! Where are these thoughts and feelings coming from?'        LOL!!  Bella's internal reactions are hilarious.        X-D

  You say you are not into instant love, and that's ok, but damn if attraction isn't already there.  And from both sides, which is even more funny.  And, maybe, a instinctive seed of what will become love later?

  Couldn't resist; I guess I'm just not averse to the idea of love at first sight.        :-]

  'Many people think it is a bit creepy to put Edward and Esme together, but I thought it would make an unique pairing... much like many relationships that have a 10+ year age difference.'        From your response to my last review, remember?  About that, well, I'm not one of these people.  As long as she isn't really his mother, I wouldn't care if she was old enough to be, which isn't even close to their case.  And, when dealing with immortals, age differences become even less relevant, don't you think?

  So far, so good.  I really wanna see what comes next.        ^_^



Author's Response:

Thank you.  At first I was confused as to why you included part of my story in your review, thinking uh oh.  However, the fact that you were sharing parts you loved put a huge smile on my face.  :D

Oh! I definitely believe in instant attraction... it's the fighting those urges that would make you seem insane if acted upon or spoke outloud that are fun.  *winks*

Love at first sight is one thing, but it is probably in the way it is written too.  I am a romantic at heart and therefore, prefer the slow build to love, even if the attraction and feelings are there from the beginning.  :)

I agree with your assessment of age difference becoming less relevant when it comes to immortals.  :) 

I am so happy you are enjoying this story.  Thank you so much for yet another review.  I feel very blessed.  :D

Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 25, 2014 08:10 AM · On: Prologue (Nikkipattinson)

  Interesting.  Two major differences:  Edward finding in Esme his other half, and Bella deciding to spend more of her young years with Charlie.  And with that, everything changes.  And theres is also, of course, the Cullens coming to Forks later in her life.  Family dynamics, relationships...  So far, I think you played well how the changes affect our guys.

  To see Carlisle and Bella first meeting, sounds like it will be interesting.  Thanks to Tyler, for so graciously provide this opportunity.  Again.        :-P



Author's Response:

Many people think it is a bit creepy to put Edward and Esme together, but I thought it would make an unique pairing... much like many relationships that have a 10+ year age difference. 

I always thought Charlie got the short end of the stick when Renee left with his only child and wanted to set it right, in a way. 

Thank you.  Originally, this chapter wasn't even a thought.  Then a prereader suggested adding more history to the characters and, BAM, it flooded out.  LOL

LOL - Yeah, same type of situation with Tyler, different setting and different outcome.  :D

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave me a review of your thoughts.  It brightened my day so much!  :D

Reviewer: Sarsacia (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 09:56 AM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

Overall I enjoyed the story. The only criticism I have is with Jasper's accent. It was inconsistent, and a little over the top. Being from Texas, I concede we have a tendency to drop our g's, ya for you, etc. In Jasper's dialogue though you had both your and yer in the same passage. 



Author's Response:

Thanks... I'm glad you enjoyed the story. 

As far as Jasper's "accent", it was "inconsistent" on purpose.  I didn't want to overexaggerate his accent, which is why yer and your are in the same passage.  In fact, I (personally) do this often with dropping the g's inconsistently and when saying ya and you in the same sentence.  I guess I just thought it was more fun and a bit realistic. 

I don't want to make his accent seem like he is uneducated, a "hick", or that he is stupid (overexaggerated).  I wanted him to sound relaxed and layed back, not worrying about his dialect... just casually talking. I also wanted to give the reader the added feel of his drawl... to give the "feel" of being part of the story.

I actually asked for a lot of feedback on writing his accent before I posted it.  Many thought how I did it was good and not overly done, like some other authors. 

So, it was meant for fun, as well as not making him seem "slow" or "dumb".

Thank you for taking the time to review. 

Bell :D

Reviewer: morphinekisses25 (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2012 07:37 AM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

This is a great story and I would love to see it continued!



Author's Response:

Thank you.  I am glad to hear that. 

Unfortunately, at this time I am not sure if it will be continued, but please feel free to vote on my FFn profile if you would like it to continue. 

I am working on an outline and a plot.  With any luck, some of my MANY ideas till come together and I will be able to get some chapters written. However, I will write out several chapters before I post, rather than write and post because I don't want to keep my readers waiting long periods of time between each update. 

Thank you so much for letting me know and reviewing.  I really do appreciate each review. 

Bell :D

Reviewer: Mandarae0611 (Anonymous) · Date: July 24, 2012 07:56 PM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

I'm really enjoying this story! Can't wait to see what happens next!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you are enjoyed it.

If you want it to continue, please visit my FFn profile page and vote. 

Thank you for taking the time to review and let me know.  It means a lot to me.

Bell :D

Reviewer: morphinekisses25 (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2012 12:57 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Chance Encounters

First I want to say that I have really enjoyed this story. I think the Carlisle/Bella pairing is very underused. However I am very dissapointed. I only read completed stories.I have illnesses that cause memory and cognative issues and cant keep up with several and their updates and such, so reading only completed stories is the only way I can really enjoy fanfiction. This story was marked as completed and obviously isn't so I'm dissapointed in that. I really enjoyed the story line and though it was very well written. I'm going to try to keep track of it for updates, but suggest you switch it from 'completed' to 'in progress'.



Author's Response:

I'm sorry you are so thoroughly disappointed. 


However this story is complete to the prompt it was written for on Fanfiction.net.   Here is the link if you would like to read the rest from there:  http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8170711/1/Waterfall_Beginnings


I did not realize I had it marked as complete on this site. Thank you for chastizing me on this overlooked error.  I will be sure to rectify it now.


The reason it was marked as complete is I went to post all the chapters when I had them to post.  However, this site only allows us to post one chapter at a time.  At the time, I had posted all the chapters, I had marked it as complete and forgot to unmark it.  Finally, I do not get notices that the chapter has posted until I get reviews, such as this, alerting me that my latest chapter has posted.  I submitted this chapter several days ago and just now found out that it posted because of your review.  

Once again, I apologize for your extreme frustration in regards to this minor failure.

 

 

Reviewer: gr8k8 (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2012 03:48 PM · On: Prologue (Nikkipattinson)

Oh, good.  Only 5 chapters.  Does that mean you plan to update regularly and quickly?  I do hope so.  I love Carlisle/Bella stories.  However, the authors either quit before the story is finished (an Unexpected Lady) or they only update monthly (sometimes longer) as in Moonlit.  But I remain faithful and hopeful as I check Moonlit everyday.  Please be kind.  I'll be watching for you.



Author's Response:

The updates are only quick right now because it was written as a gift exchange for a Facebook group.  The complete story is on my fanfiction profile:  http://www.fanfiction.net/~bell1

Feel free to read what is posted there....reviews are also welcome.  ;

Finally, there is a poll on my FFn profile, if you would like the story to continue forward....or not. 

Thank you very much for taking the time to review and let me know your thoughts.

Bell :D

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