I was close to tears when I saw this was the same chapter as the last time xD Pretty Please with sugar on top update with the new chapter?

Author's Response:

I checked with my beta, it was a glich in the system that marked my story as having been updated when it hadn't been.  She's intends to validate 16 tonight, and I've got 17 ready to go in the validation queue right behind it.

Sorry about that, thanks for letting me know!

Excellent chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you liked it!  Chapter 16 is in the validation queue.  This chapter was actually posted a week ago.  I have no idea why it's showing an update date of yesterday since the next chapter is still in the queue.  I e-mailed my beta to let her know something's gone awry.

This is a duplicate of the last chapter. How about the next chapter??

Author's Response:

I'm sorry.  I don't know what happened.  Chapter 16 was sent to the validation queue last week, and it's still there.  I never got an e-mail saying the next chapter had been updated.  I don't know why it's showing an update date of yesterday since the next chapter is still in the queue.  I e-mailed my beta to let her know something's gone haywire.  Hopefully 16 will be up soon.  Sorry about that.  Thanks for letting me know.

You know, I really try hard not to incorporate my thoughts on where a story line is going into reviews.  I understand that a lot of stories are WIP's and I would hate to steer (inadvertantly) an authors creativity in a direction that it otherwise wouldn't have gone.  However, I know you have finished this peice and it's clear you get off on feedback because you spend more time writing back to reviews than I have on Christmas cards for the last 10 years.  (Don't worry, this is a good thing.  Everybody loves reading back from you and I never was very social anyway)  So, here I go:

I personally loved Sue and Charlie, but you have me thinking I might love Tanya and Charlie better.  100 years, give or take, is a long time to go without confiding in anyone.  You have already shown that Edward can't keep a secret worth a damn.  Especially when he has proof in the form of all these letters and pictures, one of which convienently shows her with a very attractive, mature but not old, individual...  These people are sure to insprire curiosity in whoever sees these pictures, because the girls fate to a certain extent is sealed.  She will write these letters and gain a relationship at some level.  Maybe, somehow, it lessens the taboo against getting to know the older guy in the pic, too.  He's going to be involved at some level as well, right? 

I'm looking foreward to seeing if I'm right about that.  Mostly though, I'm just looking foreward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:

So sorry for the delay in responding to your review.

I do definately get off on feed back from my readers!  I get so psyched when I see new reviews I could just squeal!  Even though the story is finished, it is still being betad and edited, and I do take reviewers comments into consideration when editing, if something wasn't explained clearly enough or something like that, but the plot line and course are pretty much set in stone. 

Personally, I never really cared much for Charlie and Sue.  Something about hooking up with your friend's widow a year or so after his death is a bit of a squick for me.  Like your friends' ex's.  They're hands off.  After a longer period of time, OK, but after a year?  I think tongues woud start wagging.  "Just exactly when did they start seeing each other?  Before Harry died?"  Something like that.  But, that's just me.  I love Charlie, though, and I wanted him to be a bigger part of my story than I felt he was in canon.  I also liked Tanya.  Even though Edward turned her down over and over, she was still supportive of him in both Midnight Sun and Breaking Dawn.  Yeah, not in Eclipse, but he was aligned with people who killed her sister's mate, granted they were justified, and her mate was about to kill Edward's mate....  Not an envious position to be in.

I think it's one thing to keep a dangerous secret for almost 100 years when you've got no one to tell that secret to, and another to keep something huge and that makes you very happy from people you love and trust.  When you fall in love, you want to tell the people who are the most important to you, even if you don't realize you're in love.

The next chapter is in the validation queue, and teasers are on the Forums page under Shameless Plugs.  Thanks for reviewing!

 

Another excellent chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

Soo good, can't wait to read more!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you like it!  Check out the Forums page under Shameless Plugs for teasers!

Thanks for reviewing!

I am so ridiculously excited about this scenario!  You're descriptions are so spot-on!  I really love your writing style.

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you like it!

Thanks again for reviewing!

♥ ♥ ♥ !!!

might as well be a telepath cause all your footnote explanations were kind of confirmation more than the former :) the reversed sense of self preservation in relation to the Cullen / Wolfpack issue and Edward being a leg man, like your reviewer said!

I like how it is very subtle your change from canon to AU, with the pack (and therefore the imprinting) happening much sooner in your timeline, the fact that (i think you mentioned) Jake keeps his hair long, which made me doubt at the beginning if he had phased yet. Also the fact that Bella goes to Forks before she was supposed to in canon, and how Tanya and Charlie are a couple here! :) It always fell to me that a relationship with Sue was kind of off, you know?

There is something in this chapter that made me think of a possible reason for your mentioning his family in detail, both his mom's side and his dad's side, but especially his mom's side, you said before that there was, and i think that you began to hint at it with this chapter, i'll keep this to myself cause there might be a slight chance i'm right... well probably not but maybe...

Author's Response:

Oh, I do SOOO love nice long reviews!

Bella does go to Forks sooner than she does in canon, but they're just visits.  As for actually moving there, that will be more in line with canon.

I have to admit, I never liked Charlie/Sue.  Pairing up with your friend's widow just about a year after his sudden death?  Little uncomfortable.  Like dating your friend's ex.  It just felt to me like it should be on the "You just don't do this." list.  I think it would start people talking, "How long has this been going on?"  There'd be talk that she'd been cheating on Harry with Charlie.  I was glad Charlie ended up with someone, but someone else would've been better, I thought.  Now, Emily's widowed/divoreced/whatever mother who came to visit could've been interesting.

I try to explain things in my notes because I have to keep reminding myself that something that is clear in my head, because I know what I meant and what's to come, may not be so clear to someone reading it.

There is a reason why I made Edward go into such detail talking about his family and friends, but if my reason is the reason you're thinking of, I don't know.  But there is a reason.

Thanks so much for reviewing!

 

Lovely.  Just lovely.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

Another great chapter! This is the first story I have read that wasn't complete...now I know why.  I want to devoure this story, its that good. I have to be patient and I will because you are a great writer and this story is worth it! 

Thanks for answering everyone's questions, mine are all answered.  Just wanted to pass along how much I enjoyed chapter 15!

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you like it!  Personally, I tend to prefer finished stories, too.  But I do promies the story is fully writen, it's just still being betad and edited.

Thanks for reviewing!

Fascinating chapter!  I like the nuances of subconscious Cullen loyalty you've interwoven.  Very neat!  And I'm guessing it might have been Tanya who was waiting in the trees?  Maybe Charlie is Tanya's mate?  Or just a happy fling?  I'm not sure which, but I think there's a possiblity it goes deeper than usual.

Great responses from Edward, to Bella's pictures!  I think your take on it makes perfectly good sense!  Lol.  :)  What a despairing thought, though, that neither one of them can imagine ever having the chance to be with the one they love.  That would be so hard... but I'm glad they'll ultimately find a way.

I wonder what Bella will be able to learn about the epidemic, and where that will take them...  Neat story!!  Thanks for writing!

Author's Response:

Charlie is Tanya's mate.  I think being walked out on once is enough, I wouldn't do that to poor Charlie.

Oh, they'll be together in the end, but getting there won't be easy.

I'm glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing!

Love Bella's encounter with the beginning of the pack...and love Edward's reaction to her pictures. Wonder if he saw Bella while she was in Forks.....?

Author's Response:

Well, someone was watching someone, but I'm not say which someone!

Thanks for reviewing!