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Reviewer: Nissa (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:45 PM · On: 24. Heat
I don't think Bella is as free to go as she think's she is. Aro is not going to be pleased she wants to leave so soon. I think if Bella does leave with Jacob it wont do any good She still loves Edward and he will try to find her eventually.
Reviewer: FearlessNot (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:43 PM · On: 24. Heat
Grrr... I don't like Jacob. He is nicer here, and not as pushy, but just knowing it's suppose to be Bella and Edward, I hate the potential for Jacob to screw things up.
Don't stop. Keep writing and update soon please.
Reviewer: lovely_penguin (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:40 PM · On: 23. The Damned
I thought I had left you a comment on this chapter, but I guess not... As disturbing as it is, I think I get why Jane would pick a pregnant woman as her lure. I just feel so bad for poor Bella. The guilt is sure to weigh on her. Gah, Jane is such a bitch.
Reviewer: PrimaBellaDonna (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:33 PM · On: 24. Heat
Ooooohhhh.....Goood!!!!!!!!!!!!
~*~ PrimaBellaDonna ~*~
Reviewer: lovely_penguin (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:32 PM · On: 24. Heat
Sigh. I don't know who I want Bella to be with more, Edward or Jacob. Sure, Jacob came for her... but isn't she meant to be with Edward? I'm having some internal conflict here! :) I can't wait to see Aro's response!
Reviewer: mommycamille (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:18 PM · On: 24. Heat
I thought the Jacob/Bella scene was touching...and I'm almost rooting for him over Edward at this point if you can beleive it! And thanks for the quick updates....hopefully there will be another soon.
Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:09 PM · On: 24. Heat
You are so mean you want us to feel for Jacob. LOL Thats ok I can feel sorry for him. But gosh darn Edward needs to do something soon...or your story could end with her with Jacob. I am hoping Aro says yes but if he does I have a feel theres going to be tricks up his sleeve or rules that she still belongs to him type of thing. I wonder whats going on with the Job Aro told Edward he would have to do. Now Iknow what Jacob has been up to all this time. LOL I forgot getting a passport is no simple process. LOL Look forward to the next post I am so glad you post so fast! This is AWESOME!
Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:00 PM · On: 24. Heat
I always feel bad for Jacob. Because, deep down, I always want her to break his heart. I need her to need to be with Edward. I'm weird like that. Love your writing Babe. It's always worth reading. Always fresh and exciting.
~Mia
Reviewer: sonyabrady1971 (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 03:11 PM · On: 23. The Damned
Great, Wonderful, Awesome, I just can't way enough. I just found this the other day and I am all caught up. Can't wait for your next update.
Reviewer: k8ew8e (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 11:58 AM · On: 23. The Damned
GOD! That was crazy!
Reviewer: PrimaBellaDonna (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 05:26 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Ooooh! JANE IS SO EVIL!!!!!! I'm glad Jacob was there to help her tho. Another good one!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~*~ PrimaBellaDonna ~*~
Reviewer: FearlessNot (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 05:10 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Jane is devious.
Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 02:35 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Wow! Awesome! I am glad jacob made her come out of teh shocked state that was sure to follow! If he wouldn't have been there to snap her back to reality fast she may have lost reality. As always I love the story and I looke forward to the next chapter and I guess I am a little relieved Jacob was there. If notthe only words of confidence she would have gotten would have been pushing her in teh wrong direction to join the dark side of the force muah hahaha! Post again soon as always another great chapter!!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: EdwardsBloodType (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 12:56 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Not happy about the pregnant part..a little too dark for me, but still intrigued and anxious to see what happens. Edward better get his perfect little ass over there!!!
Reviewer: bella mcc (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 12:45 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Ack!! preggo woman! How mean!! I hope bella tells aro and he smacks jane, but I know he won't. He would probably be happy someone is tempting her so he don't have to look like the bad guy. Oh how I hate Jane!! I knew she would tempt bella but never how you wrote it. What suspense! I love how you had Jacob outside when bella ran out. I can't wait for more!! Thanks for the early update. 10rating. but not high enough! I read a lot of fanfiction and yours by far is one I go staright to when I see a update.
Reviewer: EdwardsBloodType (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 12:44 AM · On: 22. Arias and Endings
though this is engaging and quite beautifully written, I am not happy that Jaob is there to save her first, uless of course, Jane kills him.
Reviewer: angelicwish (Anonymous) · Date: January 16, 2009 12:37 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Ahh that would really be a blow to her sense of morality - poor preggo woman...that's a horrible way to go and knowing about the baby :(
I'm still hesitant about Jake being there (mind you that I claim to be a Jacob hater but deep down I don't want him to get killed...which is the only thing I could think of the Volturi doing if they catch him.) but i can't wait for more. You update so frequently and I really appreciate it! :) It's nice not to have to wait for an update for a long time :)
PS - If it were any more possible you made me hate Jane more just because of the simple line where she said "you've never tasted anything until you've tasted baby." <- Jane = Evil Bitch there haha
Reviewer: Nissa (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2009 12:29 AM · On: 23. The Damned
Jane is sick. I'm glad Bella had the strength to stop before she did it completly but i'm sure she'd still feel bad either way.
Reviewer: bellas shrink (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 11:59 PM · On: 23. The Damned
Well I liked it very much (wasn't surprised bc as I wrote before I thought that Jane would have to get her to kill someone).
The only part that was confusing was Jacob - was he IN the castle? If so how did he get there? Or did she run out (did I miss that part - I will reread). BC I can't imagine he could have snuck in unnoticed...with all the vamps cruising around. And wouldn't they be watching her (esp after Aro knowing what Jane was up to) wouldn't they have prepared for her to bolt...I figured she would have run to Demetri for support (but maybe that is where she was headed)...questions, questions...this has me TOO close to the edge! Can't wait for the next chapter...
Well done!!!
Reviewer: Laura Cullen (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 11:39 PM · On: 23. The Damned
Her conflict was palpable. Sorta wish this chapter had been longer, drawn either the conflict or the conversation with Jacob out more. I'd also like to see it begin to move in the direction of resolving how she gets out of Volterra. Proof it's a good story; makes me care what happens!
Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 10:45 PM · On: 23. The Damned
Strange and sad. But I still jealously covet yet another chapter.
~Mia
Reviewer: Panda1499 (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 10:09 PM · On: 23. The Damned
Wow...absolutely amazing...I never would have guessed that was her scheme....I'm proud of Bella, backing away so fast, its reminiscent of when Edward ran clear to the other side of the meadow in Twilight...I'm so happy Jacob actually approached Bella, but what does he expect he's going to be able to do? So interested now, can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: bellas shrink (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 01:25 PM · On: 22. Arias and Endings
This was great...so Jacob is stepping up it seems (clearly- if she was going to fantasize she would have seen E, and we KNOW J is on the prowl...know how he knew to go to the operal...
I knew Dimitri would split from Heidi! ANd you said you couldn't have him be with B, so I guess Jane is going to have to get her to drink blood - or bring E in as bait for something to threaten her (they will kill him unless B does as they ask, which she would do anything to keep E alive...).
Keep writing, I am on the edge...slipping...
It was wonderful, I wait for every chapter (I have GOT to get a life!) LOL
Well done.
Reviewer: k8ew8e (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 10:19 AM · On: 22. Arias and Endings
The way that you write had me glued to the computer! In the last several chapters the sentence flowed superbly! I do feel just awfullll that Edward is in that house just waiting for her. But really that kind of bakward way of thinking he had about how Bella would feel was so like wtf! (I dont know if that makes sense not in my head)
Really good though i hope that you keep it up!
Reviewer: Panda1499 (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2009 10:14 AM · On: 22. Arias and Endings
Loved it, like usual...it was nice seeing the Volturi do something as mundane and comman in Europe, as going to the opera...it was also nice seeing a softer side of Aro. But what was with Jane's dress, why if everyone else was dressed in the latest fashions was she in something so old? And felix, seriously? Does he really think he has a chance with Bella? I just can't believe that. I'm not mad that Jane's plan wasn't revealed...but I've got a ton more questions in my head now, likw why did hiedi and demetri split? and was that really jacob, or a hallucination? seriously, this chapter just made my mind start working over time. Good to know you have alot written, does that mean we won't have to wait long for another chapter?
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