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Reviewer: SalazarEmrys (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2013 08:58 PM · On: 1. Plans
Nice start . . . . . . . . . . . . . . Chapter is Well, too short huh ?btw nice sta
Reviewer: TouchingU (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2012 03:42 AM · On: 8. Rules
Well be inspired because you're awesome :)
Reviewer: Bella3268 (Signed) · Date: November 21, 2011 02:10 AM · On: 51. Promise
Ok so I read chapters 1-3 and 50-51. I liked it but it was very lengthy and I understood it as I skimmed but in the beginning, was that just some random human ???
Reviewer: acash (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2011 08:45 PM · On: 51. Promise
Absolutely excellent story! Thank you!
Reviewer: GemmaK (Signed) · Date: April 27, 2011 06:50 AM · On: 51. Promise
One of the best I've ever read. Aside from some minor grammatical and spelling errors the story was so well written. The characters were enjoyable and so well developed. I found myself so engrossed in this and loving it more than the original Breaking Dawn.
You are such a great writer!!
Reviewer: monklyn (Signed) · Date: April 20, 2011 05:09 PM · On: 51. Promise
Honestly, I've thought about your writing and I have to say it was a GREAT improvement over Breaking Dawn, and SM's writing in general. While SM's characters and their loving bonds are to her credit, this was much more enjoyable to read and extremely well plotted. I felt the first two chapters started off a little bit rough, but after that point it seemed you found your fingers and did a professional job writing this novel. It IS novel length, and quite a bit better than a lot of the fantasy/romance/adventure books in stores, so I sincerely hope you have many more stories to tell. I'm curious what your age is, since your vocabulary is eclectic and to your credit. Thanks for sharing your time and creativity! If you ever need an editor, let me know.
Reviewer: monklyn (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2011 09:56 PM · On: 32. Reality
I've been throughly enjoying your story, great work. Just a small issue, I notice that you keep using the word "smelt" instead of proper word "smelled." Smelting is heating or melting down ore to remove metals, while smelled is used to discribe noticing something's fragrence. Keep writing, you clearly have a lot of talent!
Reviewer: corrina318 (Signed) · Date: September 16, 2010 08:47 AM · On: 51. Promise
I liked the Aro in this story and of course it is always nice when Jane dies.
I enjoyed reading your story thanks for keeping me intertained for the last few days.
Reviewer: corrina318 (Signed) · Date: September 15, 2010 02:10 AM · On: 26. Verdict
What a surprise, at first I thought Jacob, them no maybe Bella, but Edward.
This is going to be interesting
Reviewer: mmpenny (Signed) · Date: May 25, 2010 03:05 PM · On: 51. Promise
Loved, loved, loved your story! More difficult than Breaking Dawn, which is how life is. You are talented!
Reviewer: samt915 (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2010 12:57 AM · On: 51. Promise
WOW, this was a perfect length and I loved every moment of it. I am so happy that I had a chance to read it once it was complete cause some of those cliffs were really mean ones, lol. I thought the story was going to be a bit more dark by the opening but was happy to see light moments here and there, you did a wonderful job.
Reviewer: djwolf55 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 10:47 AM · On: 51. Promise
This was a great story. . .I thoroughly enjoyed it!
Reviewer: shannonluvstwilight (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2010 02:31 AM · On: 51. Promise
Such a great story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WOW!
Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2010 10:48 AM · On: 14. Mixed Messages
Another cliff-hanger! You're driving me crazy here!
Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2010 10:35 AM · On: 13. Declaration
I have not been able to write any review for the last chapters due to the fact that I'm extremely pissed off!!!!!
At first I was a bit annoyed over the direction of the story and that everything felt kind of cut off. Something happened and then we were on to the next thing without really exploring the first thing. It all seemed a bit shallow and didn't really stir any feelings.
Even though I still feel that the movement of the story is somewhat to fast, I've found myself drawn in. You have definetely stired up feelings! I am so incredibly infuriated with Edward! I just wish someone would punch that self-righteous, ingnorant, arrogant, conceited bastard's lights out!!!!
On top of everything I'm pissed off at myself for feeling that way towards Edward because I'm absolutely team-Edward (although you might change that)!
Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2010 08:56 AM · On: 2. Monster
Okay, that was terrifying! What's really going on? This is intriguing.
Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: March 02, 2010 08:42 AM · On: 1. Plans
What???? That's some kind of cliffhanger! And it's only the first chapter! Have to read on now!
Reviewer: DarkTrinity (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2010 02:09 PM · On: 15. Crime and Punishment
you wrote Aro perfectly... wonderful!
Reviewer: luvsam (Signed) · Date: February 01, 2010 06:19 PM · On: 1. Plans
When I began to read it, I wasn't so sure ... really ... Bella Killing people, going to the Volturi, the pact ... Jacob .... And the rushing ... Really I wasn't sure. BUT, I really enjoyed it, really, despite everything named before, I loved it, and enhoyed the story very much..
Thanks
Sam
Reviewer: mommakat (Signed) · Date: December 05, 2009 04:30 PM · On: 51. Promise
Thank you very much for sharing your story! I enjoyed it immensly and appreciate the time you spent on it. You have a wonderful imagination and can definitely express yourself with your words :)
Again, thank you!
Reviewer: JennB21 (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 04:05 AM · On: 13. Declaration
up, down, up down! I'm getting dizzy!
Reviewer: JennB21 (Signed) · Date: December 04, 2009 03:35 AM · On: 7. Reunion
Oh my god! Hmm... Interesting twist :)
Reviewer: jenniferl (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 03:08 PM · On: 51. Promise
OK, I HAVE READ A LOT OF FANFIC'S AND THIS HAS GOT TO BE ONE OF THE BEST I HAVE READ YET. I ACCUALLY CALLED IN SICK TO WORK SO I COULD READ IT ALL IN ONE DAY. GREAT WRITING AND THE STORY LINE WAS SO FLUID! I AM VERY IMPRESSED. GREAT JOB AND I LOOK FORWAR TO READING MORE OF YOUR WORKS. MY BOSS WONT BUT I DEFFINATLY WILL.
THANK YOU
JENNIFER
Reviewer: FilleMilitaire (Signed) · Date: October 29, 2009 01:58 PM · On: 51. Promise
Ah!! I'm not ready for it to be over yet! Can't you add just a little more? Or maybe a partner story? PRETTY PLEAASE?!
Reviewer: mauravt (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 09:07 AM · On: 51. Promise
Thank you so much for the wildly entertaining story. I hung on your every plot twist. I loved you descriptions and I am secretly glad Jane - got it in the end :-).
I'm a sucker for a happy ending - thank you for not disappointing me.
Good luck with your future writing - you have a gift!
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