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Reviewer: Gwenna (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2012 05:56 PM · On: Chapter 1

first fiction i read love it


Reviewer: abracadabra (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2012 11:58 PM · On: Chapter 1

Haha!! Best story I've read in a while!! Are you sure you don't write professionally?

Reviewer: Ariellizabeth (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2011 02:59 AM · On: Chapter 1

Haha, this one-shot is friggin' amazing! At least make this a two-shot so we know what happens next... ;)

Reviewer: abracadabra (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2011 03:14 AM · On: Chapter 1

Ha ha! that was a funny ending.

Reviewer: princess bella edward (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2010 02:37 AM · On: Chapter 1

Cute!!!! I loved the last line the best, and I loved Carter and his attitude and cockiness. 

Don't like the red head, or her 'BFF'. Whatever happened to 'helping a friend in need?'

Oh, well. I enjoyed nonetheless. 

Reviewer: edward-my-life (Signed) · Date: November 03, 2009 08:23 PM · On: Chapter 1

i love itt! can you turn it into a storyy?! please?

Reviewer: dancegirl (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 03:21 AM · On: Chapter 1

This story is super cute, keep it up!

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2009 11:33 AM · On: Chapter 1

This was cute!

Reviewer: MVC93 (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2009 02:17 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is really awesome, I love it!

Reviewer: emma austin (Signed) · Date: May 04, 2009 08:06 AM · On: Chapter 1

Great story.  You have clearly demonstrated that closets can be more than just storage devices.  I really liked these two characters. Perhaps this could be turned into more than just a one-shot? Please keep writing. 

Reviewer: veggiegirl0601 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

Very interesting.  I wish there was more!

Reviewer: lov_u_lotz (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2009 05:36 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is a brill story

Reviewer: coffin-loves-cullen (Signed) · Date: April 12, 2009 11:56 AM · On: Chapter 1

omg!!! that was great!! i love it!!!

Reviewer: DJRswims95 (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2009 07:58 PM · On: Chapter 1

nice nice nice. I love it.

Reviewer: jmeyer (Signed) · Date: March 25, 2009 04:46 AM · On: Chapter 1


I entered the most recent original fiction contest on Twilighted and have spent the past several days reading the stories of the other contestants. I enjoyed them so much I decided to read the other original fiction stories that have been posted here, and well, I haven't been disapointed.

This was truly entertaining. I can tell when I am enjoying a story because I read it in a blur. There is nothing about the story that confuses me or sounds off that causes me to pause and think about the logistics, I just fly through because I want to know what happens next... and next... and next. And I read your story in a blur.

I love that the characters are so well defined. I love how funny this whole piece is, and how snarky the main character is. I love the cockiness of the mind reader. The dialog was really natural. This was just great. Bravo.

Congratulations on the honorable mention!


Reviewer: screamingstares (Signed) · Date: March 24, 2009 05:33 PM · On: Chapter 1

I love this story! Are you planning on writing anymore chapters? I am very interested!

Reviewer: Mazzakenzie (Signed) · Date: March 18, 2009 05:17 AM · On: Chapter 1

This is great! You should totally write more! It's funny and has alot of potential! So keep writing! hahahaha!


Reviewer: willistongirl (Signed) · Date: March 10, 2009 02:44 AM · On: Chapter 1

oooooooh hot. i love it!

Reviewer: kissyourself (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 02:25 PM · On: Chapter 1

OH! that was... hot. And fun to read as well! :) 

Reviewer: Neurotika (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2009 04:22 PM · On: Chapter 1



Reviewer: shookie (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2009 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 1

Loved this!

Reviewer: twilightspell (Signed) · Date: January 18, 2009 03:23 AM · On: Chapter 1


" you think i'm sexy"

"you want my bod"

LOL! awe please make a continuation on this! i want more carter! i wish this was not a one shot. you are a FANTASTIC writer! Loved it!

Reviewer: mrseacullen (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2009 10:34 AM · On: Chapter 1

This is fantastic! Major props! I wish it would have been more than a one shot, I would love to see where Carter and Becca would have ended up (aside from the closet of course). 

Reviewer: christtt315 (Signed) · Date: January 02, 2009 02:44 AM · On: Chapter 1

This shit is hott/ frikin funny beyond belif LOL

Reviewer: geophf (Anonymous) · Date: December 15, 2008 01:32 PM · On: Chapter 1

Um ... this is a one-shot?  You know that's a wee-bit little unfair to your readership, right?  I do wish Carter was a certain vampire, but then the protagonist would need to be a certain other person, but the 10-minutes-in-heaven game is certainly an interesting scenario development ...

Lost track.  Sorry.

Continuation, please?

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