If they move to England, how will they find Edward? I wonder...

Author's Response:

They'll move back :)

I have read gallstones and am reading bezoars, can't wait for the next chapter.

Xanath (Alexandra/Zandra)

  'Who could possibly be stupid enough to attack us here? And why had Alice not seen it? Okay, well I know how she missed it, because she has seen nothing but sex and blood since I turned her. I created a monster.'        Heheheh!

  '“The Romanians and Egyptians were attacking Volterra,” Alice announced. We would have been caught in the middle of it if not for our little hunting trip.'        *chuckles*  All the pieces fall into place when it comes to these two.        :)

  “Easy: I’m a newborn and I didn’t see it. I wasn’t exactly looking, but all I’ve seen since my transformation is blood and …um…well Jasper.”        Hehe!!        :-P

  'In that letter you wrote me you said that he was very important to our species. Why didn’t Aro want him for his own and come after him?”        “I just wrote that so that you’d change my brother. We’re gonna be best friends,” Alice said winking at Edward.'        HAHAHAHAHAAAAAHHH!!!  Why, the little cheater...        X-D

  '“Alice, are you sure he’s your brother? Wouldn’t you’d rather I skin him and use his hide to make you a pretty new pair of leather shoes? They’d sparkle real nice in the sun and never wear out,” I asked, urging her to think that this was a good idea, because I had no desire to spend eternity with this annoying little kid.'        This looks to me like so not the beginning of a beautiful friendship.        :-}

  'She even began to have more control over them and began to take on side projects, like when in nineteen thirty-two she tracked down a human girl name Rosalie Hale and introduced her to a human boy name Emmett McCarty.(...)  Thanks to Alice’s meddling, they had seven children in a cabin in Tennessee and eventually died of old age together.'        That sure made her blissfully happy.  And they hadn't to suffer an resentful Rosalie forever.        P-)

  'So instead of simply changing the girl, Alice and I camped outside her dinky little house in Phoenix until she was in a fatal car accident. Bella, at the tender age of fifteen, had been crossing the busy road on her way home from school, but had forgotten to look both ways and walked straight into the path of a big rig.'        Butterfly effect.  Or...  Alice didn't have a hand in this accident, did she?  Hmm, nah!  If Edward ever got wind of something like that in her thoughts, he would never forgive her.  Bella too, probably.

  I imagine Charlie and Renee never found out what happened with Bella.  She simply vanished.        :-|

  'Bella stopped Edward’s incessant whining and even got him to eat deer with the rest of us, but the best part about her was that she had a shield of her own. Sure she was utterly and completely boring, just like her mate, but having a shield with us meant that we no longer had to worry about Demetri coming after us.(...)  The added safety was more than worth putting up with both her and her mate.'        Ouch!!!  I have a hunch you don't like Edward and Bella that much.        :-P

  That was fun, Amanda.  Thank you!        ^_^

Author's Response:

Jasper's feelings toward Edward and Bella aren't my own- I just could not see Jasper liking them. In the books he is aloof from the couple and eventually comes around, so in this story he's still at the aloof stage, but I do see him coming around in the distant future. And let's face it, Edward is annoying and as an empath, Jasper would know that. Plus, I loved the idea of Jasper wanting to turn Edward into shoes for Alice, lol.

Alice had nothing to do with the accident, other than failing to stop it: Bella's bad luck was to blame. And yes, with this ending Bella doesn't stay in contact with her parents, although her blood spatter is found on the road and the truck, so they (and the police) believe the truck driver ran her over and got rid of the body to cover up the accident.The truck driver stopped, but the body was gone by the time he got out, so he was very confused as to what happened and thinks he blacked out.

Thank you for reading and reviewing! I really enjoyed hearing from you :)

  'I was still friends with Aro, Caius, and Marcus and teaming up with the Romanians would demolish that friendship. Stealing Alice from them would probably have the same effect, but it would be so much worse if I teamed up with their mortal enemies to do so.'        I will never understand how a fellow so kind and compassionate like Carlisle became friends with these ones.  Especially Aro and Caius.        :-|

  'I was still wary of the Romanians, but Amun was my friend and I was beginning to realize that there was no point in trying to appease Aro. If I was taking Alice from him, then I would be removed from his good graces, whether I was in league with the Romanians or not.'        Makes sense.  And it's somehow touching that he is willing to risk a war to rescue his "daughter".        :)

  “No one gets passed,” the young vampire replied.        “Listen Maurice, your boss is good friends with my coven leader here,” Edward said. “Now we know the passcode is Ibis, so why don’t you let us through?”        Mind-readers.  Never leave home without one.        ;)

  Curiosity, Amanda:  is Amun's alliance with the Romanians canon stuff?  Or another quirk of your world?

  '“Regardless of what she can and can’t see, a talent like that shouldn’t be in the hands of the Volturi. No one should have power like that,” Vladimir said sternly.'        No one should have power like that...  I don't like the sound of that.        :-[

  'The key piece to the puzzle was a shield that Amun had found named Kahotep. He could not only shield himself, but also anyone within a hundred miles of him, from Demetri’s tracking.'        Aah...  So, this is their "werewolf".  His power looks a lot like Bella's.  I wonder how much.

  'Amun was not sure if Kahotep’s skill would work on anyone besides Demetri, but he was positive that it was very effective against his former creation.(...)  Demetri was originally from Greece, but as a human, he and his family had moved to Egypt, which was where Amun ran into him.'        Demetri, Amun's progeny?  Interesting.

  'And so with Kahotep in our corner, I began to think that rescuing Alice was a very real possibility.'        I just keep imagining what they will do next.  Aro won't be happy.  Unless the Egyptian/Romanian alliance really overthrow the Volturi.  In this case, I hope the Cullens/Denalis don't have to run from them.        :-{

  And we still have those children of the moon coming from the north, just to add more wood to the fire...

Author's Response:

The Egyptians and Romanians are not in alliance in canon, but it makes sense that they would form an alliance. Demetri being Amun's creation is canon and is the reason Amun was hiding Benjamin away, because he didn't want another one stolen.

I did not imagine Kahotep's power to work like Bella's. When it comes to Demetri, they have the same effect, but Kahotep isn't immune to Edward, Aro, Jane, Kate, or any of the other types of powers. He's only shielded from trackers, so his power is a lot more limited.

Vladimir did not mean that Alice should not be allowed to exist with a power like that, but that no coven leader should posess her. Carlisle doesn't really count, because he has no ambition to rule.

The children of the moon are not in leage with the Egyptians and Romanian and are not in the least bit organized, so their attack won't be as bad as it sounds...now if the three were to coordinate, then Aro and Caius would really be in trouble.

Really good!how have you been? its been a while without updates :) well, maybe I've just missed them. Im awfully bussy balancing 3 jobs; today I called in sick cause all the stress has all my bones aching hehe so it was really nice to find this new chapter. Hope you're doing great. Take care,

Daniela

Author's Response:

I'm fine. There have been lots of updates over at Beazors of Yesterday and Tomorrow.  But with this story, I only have one regular reviewer, so I wait for her to get around to reading a chapter before I post the next one.

Three jobs is way too many. We Pastafarians have a very laxed work ethic, so we believe in having one job and barely doing that one. You might want to considering converting, because we only work four days a week and take two months off during the winter...although, whether or not that much time off flies with your boss is another story...

  'Tanya’s human had been old for a human and had succumbed quickly. Kate’s had been young and healthy, but he too got sick and after several weeks lost the struggle to survive.(...)            I suspect that the virus particles hitched a ride on our clothing and infected the men.(...)        But no matter how it happened, the virus took hold of those orphans three months after the initial outbreak in the early spring of nineteen nineteen.'        Crap!  Edward was so enthusiastic about helping them...

  'Molly was a fighter. She grew sicker and her cough took on such a hacking sound that I feared the worse, but her fever stayed even.(...)  Two weeks in, she took a turn for the better and began her recovery. She lived and thrived when so many others had died.'        He did it.  The kid really did it!  With a saving like this on his belt, I bet his self-loathing will be taken down several notches, huh?  Better for Bella when she enters the picture.        X-)

  I wonder if little Molly will remember her angel savior...

  'Laurent had spent time with the Romanians, so it was only natural that other nomads would share news of them with him.'        He had?  Interesting.

  Hmm.  I don't know if I agree that Jasper's gift is weak, but...

  It was risky for Aro to bring Alice to a fight with other vampires.  Even if he has no real love for her, and I doubt he have, there is still the loss of her gift to consider.  Maybe he is really nuts, like Laurent said.

  Finally the rescue was put into motion.  The worst part is that the greater obstacle they have to face is Alice herself, since Aro can see in her mind whenever they are coming for her.  If, at least, they were friends with the Wolves already.  Or with Nahuel...

 

Author's Response:

It was in the Guide that Laurent came acroos the Romanians when he was younger, so I thought I'd work that in.

I agree that Jasper's talent is overlooked by other vampires, but Stephenie Meyer is on record as saying that Aro wouldn't want him, because he already has Corin and Chelsea, who have similar talents.

Jasper was in charge of watching and protecting Alice for the entire trip, so she wasn't actually in any danger. And Alice has a trick up her sleeve to deal with Aro so he would know about the rescue...we'll see what she's up to soon.

I really liked the part with Edward saving little Molly too:) I think it was the best thing for his nurotic tendencies.

In other news, we're really close to the end, which I already wrote. Now I just have to revise and post :)

  'Those dresses were highly inappropriate for any sixteen year old girl, especially mine. They were tight fitting and showed way too much skin, not even covering her ankles. It barely even covered her knees! I am not sure what that French designer was thinking, but I sure hope this stuff does not catch on in the States.'        LOL!!!  If this guy could just see what the next decades will bring...  Hmm, Alice probably can.        X-}

  'She might even have had too much milk, because she was filling out in other places too and I was not exactly happy about that; I would have preferred her to stay little and perfect forever.(...)        I was beginning to find Alice physically attractive.(...)  I looked at her and my body reacted to her present form, while my brain recoiled in horror, thinking only of the child she once was. No, I would not give into this new feeling and I would fight it to the end.'        *tsk*  Silly dude.  Almost there...        P-)

  'If she were anyone else, I would say her dream was of a sexual nature.'        If she were...?  GAAH!!  Man, that hurts!

  '“Well we’re never doin’ that again.”        “Not this again! You kissed me! You’ve got to know that we’re mates by now!”        “Fine, we may be mates,” I conceded, realizing that the love in the air was more than platonic and belonged to both of us, not just Alice.'        May be, huh?  Well, it's a begining.        :)

  Now that I think about it, Alice's dream was probably a vision of was about to happen.  But it happened because she had the vision in the first place.  Ouch, my head is begining to hurt...

  Anyway, she..  huh... benefited from the same event twice.  Not bad, eh?        P-)

  A pity Carlisle didn't know about this trip.  It would be the perfect opportunity to subtract these two away.  Of course, Aro would hunt them down later.  But won't it happen any way they do it?        :-/

Author's Response:

I think that fashion like that described was already present in the US by then, but I imagine that Jasper was a bit out of date with fashion...

Jasper is being a typical male in this one- he has to be dragged into the relationship kicking and screaming.

Yes, the dream was a vision and the circular reasoning is called a tautology and I like working them in to Alice's visions.

Aro never would have let them go if Alice knew that Carlisle was going to be there...and she didn't exactly want her parents there in that moment ;)

Thanks for the review!

  'Esme loved to go out to our garden and watch the horse-trail outback for a glimpse of him. I could only imagine how obsessive she would have been if she were the vampire and she could hear him play the piano every night from outside his living room window.'        It's pleasant to see both Esme and Carlisle so taken by the boy.        :)

  'The Masen family was healthy as a horse until the outbreak of typhoid fever hit two years later.(...)         Typhoid had been going around for a few months now...'        I'm confused.  If my math is correct, it would put then somewhen around 1916.  Wasn't the Masen's plight supposed to happen just at 1918?        :-|

  'There was a brief period in which Edward wandered off and I lost track of him, because I was wrestling with Esme at the time. Esme had caught the scent of a pair of humans that had strayed a little too far from the trail and she wanted to go after them. I stopped her, but when our struggle ended and she gave up, finally horrified by what she had been proposing to do, Edward was nowhere to be found.'        I see what you meant when you said that Esme wouldn't be easy, despite her preparation time.

  And Edward is as neurotic as you warned he would be.  Geez!  I hope he get a grip soon, or the next decades will be hard to endure.  And here I thought that the familiarity of having Esme and Carlisle as neighbors would ease things.        P-)

  Happy 2012, Amanda, and for anyone who read this!

Author's Response:

Yes, it isn't 1918 and Edward's not 17- I changed him early, which meant he couldn't have Spanish Influenza, so I gave him Typhoid instead. Changing him early will give him time to adjust so that he's not a newborn when Alice comes back into the picture.

I thought neurotic Edward was really funny in this chapter, but I need more neurotic ideas for him for next chapter :)

Thanks for the review!

  'And as far as I could remember, the only sexual experience I had ever had was that night on the yacht with Jasper. I did not think that counted, although I must admit it was so horrible that it made me more insistent on waiting with Esme. Honestly I was scared of the idea of consummating our relationship because of that previous bad experience and that was why I was so insistent upon waiting.'        I knew that day would leave a mark.        :-|

  'I wanted to give Esme the world and the biggest most elegant wedding Columbus had ever seen and I had the money to do so. I handed my checkbook over to Mrs. Platt and informed her of my wishes and suddenly all was forgiven.'        What a difference flashing some gold makes on some people's mood, huh?        P-)

  Alice's letter.  When they were all in Volterra, I was imagining how they would be in Chicago in 1918 to save Edward.  I should have seen it when Carlisle and Esme left there last chapter.        :-]

  But Alice says Edward will have perfect control and never slip?  Well, either he won't have his rebellious years, or she is not counting it, since it won't be a loss of control, but a conscious choice.  And I bet Aro will be interested in him, despite the lack of details, since Alice stressed his importance to their world.

  If anything, this chapter points how shaken is the relationship between Jasper and Carlisle now.  Sad!  You will need to come with something pretty good to bond them back together, Amanda.  Not to mention how he will face Esme herself.        0_0

Author's Response:

I don't count Edward's rebellious years, because like you said, that was a conscious decision. And my Edward won't be having a rebellious phase, because he's too nurotic to drink human. He has to be or Carlisle will be over his head with two newborns. And part of the reason I had Jasper attack Esme was so that she and Carlisle would leave and be free to travel to Chicago to save Edward. Plus I need time to pass and it would be really boring if all we saw was Alice being trapped in Volterra until she comes of age.

Alice did say in New Moon that it was possible to lie with one's thoughts....not as easy with Aro, but Alice is still going to try her hardest to keep Edward from Aro's attention. And even if Aro suspects something, I think he'll wait a few years to check Edward out...Alice doesn't know that he'll be a mind reader or why he will be important.

Yes, Jasper will need to do some major damage control with Carlisle and Esme, but then again time does heal wounds and taking care of Alice will go a long way in their minds. But still, they are all going to have to work together to get Alice out of Volterra, and they'll need Edward's help too.

"It would seem that the two of us were not permitted to exist simultaneously, and that one of us would have to die in order for the other to survive." Looks like Im not the only Harry Potter fan here =D

Off to sleep, wish you a great weekend,

Daniela 

Author's Response:

There is at least one more Harry Potter reference in this story coming up...Also I often take magic in Harry Potter and make it into vampire powers for all of the eggs. And there's an Eragon reference in Gall Stone (ch.1) that no one has gotten and that story is full of Pastafarian referrences, although I was limited by the lack of pasta.

Thanks for the review!

I had to keep reminding myself Alice's just a child that has had no guidance and that by now would be in an assylum...she's disturbingly uncaring, lets hope she starts appreciating human life soon or I would advice for her family to be drunk by James so she can understand how wrong it is to kill. Hopefully, now that Jasper has mentioned that humans have feelings she would realize people should ot be food

Author's Response:

Alice will come around and Jasper's words will help with that, but it mostly all of those lectures Carlisle keeps giving her- they are gonna start sinking in.

I hope you keep reading :)

Im sorry, but a 10 year old in 1911 from a humble family should not know about sushi...just saying...

nice work,nice chapter :)

Author's Response:

Of course she wouldn't, that's the whole point of mentioning it- she got it from her visions. In the future sushi will be popular so she considered it :)

Your attention to detail is so good that it makes your stories great. Nice explaining of Jasper's attitude,he's still too whipped for my taste, but so is he in canon hehe

Author's Response:

Inattention to detail makes my head hurt; always has.

Jasper might be considered whipped in some aspects, but I think he gets his way whenever he turely wants it. Just look at what happened in Gall Stone: he convinces Alice to have six kids, when she definitely does not want anymore after four and she only wanted the first four because he made her believe she wanted them.

I saw a lecture once from a very distinguished scientist and afterwards one of my professors, who was in attendance, asked him why he chose our university to work at. He gave a very long winded explanation, but in the end he said it was because it did not matter where he lived, so he let his wife decide. Their marriage worked because he let his wife decide almost everything. When asked what he decided, he said who he votes for for president and how many children they have. Movies, dinner, and 99% of his life she decides and it doesn't even bother him. That is part of my inspiration for Jasper- when it comes to clothing and everything else Alice is into, he's willing to go along with whatever she wants, because her happiness is that important to him. When it comes to the big issues, he puts his foot down and will not back down.