Olympic/Volturi Covens... What TEAMWORK!!!. One of the best battles of all time. Well written. I even found myself fearing for the outcome and thinking that you were about to write some people out of the book for good. FANTASTIC WRITING!!!. Luv the Edellane combo.

Completely didn't expect this whole turn of events. Once again, a fantastic sequel to your first story, which retained all of the strengths of the first. I didn't quite know how the Cullens would get out that fight with the Hive Vampires (an excellent continuation of the blood poisoning mechanism by the way) and well done for not marginalising Renesmee as I had assumed you would.

One tiny thing I will flaw is the indifference of Renee to...well, seemingly everything. Especially her sole family members Charlie and Nessie (not counting the baby), she constantly shows little affection, and I find it hard to reconcile that with the canon description of her as a happy, free and fun loving soul. It just makes for some pretty morbid reading is all :)

Onto round three!

Very different plot point to have Volturi and Cullens working together.  This is the first story that has used a vampire's venom as a weapon against other vampires without biting of course.

When you work together, good things ensue. The Cullens and the Volturi can testify to that, along with the two King County judges. Those two events are sure evidence of how well it does work. Proud of Charlie, too.

You have to sympathize  with Charlie, nobody wants to hear from him  since he's out of office, even if he's right. Especially since he might be right. I hope there's no danger to campers. Politics and police work should not mix that much.

Don Fowler's  plan seems to be working just fine, and aided by the new Forks police chief's attitude, might do well.

Some good thoughts in this chapter, especially the one about finding more than can be handled by the Cullens. I don't blame Ness, or Charlie for being concerned. On the other hand, I see the reasons for mixing in this situation. You take care of a problem before it takes care of you.

Little Miss Cullen better listen to her human grandmother. When it comes to being grown and thinking you're grown, experience is the factor that makes the difference. Nessie's reaction to Jacob's accusation sort of proves that. Just like a typical teen's. 

It has to gall Jane to ask the Cullens for help of any kind. This Kadin, of the Rhone coven is pretty shrewd, and fairly smart, too. It does sound as if there will be a major problem if the Patagonians aren't dealt with, and soon. By the way, Nessie is a smart girl to handle Bowden the way she has.

It nearly warms the cockles of my heart, that the Volturi are having a crisis of leadership. About time someone gave them a little problem, instead of the other way round.

Funny, the things that bring people closer. Sometimes the good stuff, and sometimes the bad. Now the Cullens coming back to the Peninsula ought to liven things a bit.

The plot thickens, between Ness stalking  the calculus teacher and Charlie getting the boot. That is really the pits. After all this time and the good job he's done, what a c.s. way to be treated. No damn way is that right. Yet, what else can Charlie do but accept it with as much grace as possible.

Trust Nessie to notice a teacher instead of a student, no matter how inappropriate that might seem. At least Jacob is still in the picture somewhere. I know we're still getting into this but  I'm curious as to where the rest of the family is, and what they're up to.