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Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: July 22, 2011 02:29 AM · On: Chapter 10

Got to love a concerned Edward. When he came running out of his truck looking for Bella...gah. Loved it. Charlie is such a wonderful character in your story...and I really love him. He's been there for Edward for such a long time, including Edward's kids...and now if Bella wins over the kids, at least it will be easier for Bella and Edward to date. I've got a feeling that Bella's ex will show up, and things will get interesting. Bella and Edward deserve so much more, and it is clear from their past stories that they both made seriously wrong decisions. Time to live the second part of their lives and live in peace and happiness. Love when a second chance in life presents itself. Time to reach for the brass ring and go for it. Lana even seemed to warm up to Bella. Love your story. Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: olsson82 (Signed) · Date: July 18, 2011 02:12 AM · On: Chapter 10

Good Chapter....

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: July 17, 2011 05:05 PM · On: Chapter 10

Aww. The kids are adorable even if Lana had a hissy fit :) Even if this wasn't their date night they had planned, it was still cute.

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2011 09:08 AM · On: Chapter 9

The first kiss was adorable :) I love Bella giving Charlie shit lol

Reviewer: lmw (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2011 12:12 AM · On: Chapter 9

What a sweet chapter....I don't trust Jamie and it would seem like Edward doesn't either.

Cute ending with the kiss!

Can't wait to see what happens next!

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2011 12:04 PM · On: Chapter 9

This was a great chapter. It was interesting to meet up with Jamie...who seems like he's going to be a lot of trouble. It was also great how you re-in troduced Riley, by mentioning what he did in the last chapter, it kind of brought us right back to that moment....great stuff. How Jamie re-appeared and tried to connect with Bella...just creepy. So glad Edward was there, and if he's smart, he won't let go of her for the rest of the night. I don't think Bella should be sleeping anywhere where Jamie can get ahold of her. Just creeps me out. Yes, we got that from your writing. Funny how Rachel was playing "Papa Don't Preach" and I have a feeling that this was the exact situation that got her in trouble. She got pregnant, and bingo...family time. It's obvious that Edward and Bella are connecting and Edward seems to adore Bella, so it is just soo sad to hear that they broke up at some point over some probably truly pointless matter. Some mistake. Keep writing, and we're here. Love it!

Reviewer: Mel79531 (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2011 02:37 PM · On: Chapter 1

saw your title & synapse. . .reminded me of when i was all of 17, drinking strawberry boone farm & falling in love for the first time. . .

have only just read the prologue & had to write b/c. . .wow. very insightful, can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2011 09:09 AM · On: Chapter 8

Daddyward! His kids are adorable! Can't wait for dinner! And wow at Alice and Rachel!

Reviewer: lmw (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2011 10:05 PM · On: Chapter 8

I just found your story and I am enjoying what I have read so far. I love how you are writing in the present and the past. Can't wait to read more :)

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2011 02:07 AM · On: Chapter 8

I do love your story and I did really love this chapter. It shows that even though they both went down different paths, for whatever reason, they both only seem to be happy with one another. Not sure what STUPID mistake they both made, but now, they have the opportunity to fix everything. Rachel is a real BITCH....and a FAILURE as a mother, but maybe Bella will be able to help. Can't wait to see some current lemons from these two. Think it will be a three alarmer!! He he... Can't wait for more. Love it!

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2011 03:03 AM · On: Chapter 7

This was a great little insight into Edward and Bella's life when they were younger. Rachel does seem to be a bit of a problem, but we'll just have to see where that road goes. Riley...of course what a jerk. All girls remember at least one "Riley" in their past who thought it was funny to dunk them in the water. We all hated him too, lol! Can't wait to see what happens later. Keep up the great work! Update when you can.

Reviewer: Vamp Belle Mortes ardeur (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 10:23 PM · On: Chapter 7

I Loved this chapter watching the start of 1st love. I think Rachel is trouble. She proably uses a false sweetness and friendlyness as a manipulation to get with Edward and inbetween him and Bella. Especially since in past chapter she was a bitch to Bella and finds her a threat. Im just loving how you are writing this story with chapters alternating past and present. So well written and always keeps you wanting more. Fantastic!

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2011 05:09 PM · On: Chapter 7

Did you get the waterfall idea from the BD pic? :) I'll go to a secluded cave with Edward any day of the week.

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2011 11:36 AM · On: Chapter 6

Wow.

Reviewer: Vamp Belle Mortes ardeur (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2011 06:59 AM · On: Chapter 6

Sometimes how we preceive things to be are not always what we think. That is what seems to be happening here with Bella. I have a feeling she most likely broke edwards heart also. Charlie could proably fill her in on some things but she should go directly to Edward since he seems so angry with her. Cant wait for next chapter.

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2011 05:05 AM · On: Chapter 6

Apparently there is a much bigger story here, that we don't know yet. I guess Bella left and should have stayed, and Edward was never the same. I hope that Edward is not married right now, but who knows. She said husband, but it could be ex-husband. Wonder what is going to happen? LOL Keep writing. Got our attention.

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2011 06:45 PM · On: Chapter 5

Nice hike down memory lane :)

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2011 03:11 AM · On: Chapter 5

This chapter really showed how sweet Edward is, by teaching her to ride by sitting behind her on the saddle, and always making sure she is safe. I also loved the comment Riley had when the other truck showed up and he said "Damn now we can't kill her". Love it! Can't wait for an update!!!!

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2011 02:59 AM · On: Chapter 4

I have to say this is a really sweet story. I see Edward found his way to Bella already. One little glimpse of her, and he is a goner. Great job so far. Hope to see many updates. Keep up the great work..

Reviewer: RandyWriter (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2011 02:37 AM · On: Chapter 2

Got to love it! Edward is a fireman! Apparently he may have a son that looks just like him, or another relative that works for Charlie? Great story so far.

Reviewer: lolly9 (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 04:53 AM · On: Chapter 4

What a sweet story! So much history to catch up on I can tell. I am really looking forward to see how this plays out.

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2011 11:34 AM · On: Chapter 4

Seth had me laughing. That little playa! Can't wait for more Edward and Bella moments.

Reviewer: Vamp Belle Mortes ardeur (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 04:18 AM · On: Chapter 4

Love it so far. Charlie is a riot.Cant wait to find out the history of Bella and Edward. You got me hooked. I cant remember Bella and Edwards age, but could Seth be Edwards son? Great Story. LOoking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: lrsmd18 (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 12:38 AM · On: Chapter 4

Good start can't wait to read more !!!!

Reviewer: HockeyChick (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2011 03:48 PM · On: Chapter 3

Loving the trip back :)

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