Wow... incredibly awesome ending to such a magnificent tale.  As you proved throughout the entire story, you couldn't take anything for granted and practically every assumption proved wrong.  I know you successfully put enough doubt in my head that I was wrong about the Nessie/Jacob pairing - that I have up on my original prediction.  Trust me - I was glad to be wrong.

There was poetic justice in what Aro got... but too bad he wasn't slaughtered once he turned human. 

Hmmm...  I'm envisioning Kachiri attempting to turn Nahuel (since Renesmee forgot to contact Nahuel that he was wrong) and is suddenly turned human.  Then they have themselves a happily ever after as well.

I'm happy for Rosalie - and I did pick up several chapters back when Rosalie sat at the dining room table directly across from Nessie beaming at her.  You didn't explain why she was beaming - nor did Nessie comment about it in her inner-monologue - but it was clearly because Nessie made the decision to be human, which of course she felt (and proved) was the right decision.

I'll wrap here and start your sequel tomorrow, but again - BRAVO - for an incredible tale.  You are without a doubt - an awesome writer, and I'm in awe that I can read this level of quality without having to pay for it.  :-)

Author's Response:

Thank you for all those wonderful reviews!  I couldn't kill off Aro -- not and have a sequel. :)

I know you have moved onto RP, and will move onto those reviews. I think it has been a slow start for you, from the glimpse I caught, but I hope you are enjoying it more now.

Don't you just love it when your reading get it wrong.  I mean... the last thing a writer wants is to be predictable - and you - are not predictable.  :-)

But I love the idea of Nessie being turned - simply because she will forever live with her family... and because I believe her powers will magnify themselves quite a bit when she is one hundred percent vampire.  Incidentally, it hasn't escaped me as you have alluded to it quite often.  This mysterious power where everyone is simply enchanted with Nessie - everyone can't help but love her - and maybe this subtle but distinct power she possesses now in her hybrid form will also be magnified as a full vampire - and in doing so, she will be able to influence through simple will.  I know... wishful thinking.  :-)

I don't like the idea where Aro is going to do the changing.  Nessie is sure of the things that won't change, but I'm not.  What if Chelsea is there - throughout her transition - manipulating her when she is at her weakest.  That would not sit too well with me.  :-(

I have two chapters left to find out... :-)  Thank you!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your continued reviews! No, I am not exactly predictable, but I do leave clues about how things are going to turn. As for Nessie, the poor girl has foresight like her mother. Everything happens opposite how she wants it to sometimes. She had just decided to be human, and now this!

As for Aro -- he likes things done in a certain way, and you are right to be cautious of Chelsea, as you will find out in RP. :)

:-)  :-)  :-)  :-)  :-)  Yes, I hit that one on the head didn't I?  :-)  :-)  :-)

Of course, your words were much more eloquent...  “He couldn’t read your mind. He could only hear your words and see your visions, but you were in the body of a barely teenager. He felt like some kind of sicko, a little girl kissing him like that, and him feeling something from it. So he avoided you. He didn’t seek you out to talk to you about it. He struggled with feelings he shouldn’t be feeling so soon, and had to avoid you, because once in your presence he feared all control would be lost. Instead of explaining it to you, he came and found me. I wanted to kill him on the spot, but he was so...torn apart, I couldn’t feel anything but sympathy for what the whole thing did to him.”

And I'm also glad Nessie has a ton of respect for her Grandfather Charlie.  :-)

I'll press on to the next chapter - thank you very much.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your continued reviews -- I love Charlie. He's actually one of my favorite characters. You take this pretty out-of-rality guy and throw him in the role of Sheriff. He has a unique perception, but is quickly able to shut himself off from those perceptions whenever he 'sees' too much. I struggled (and still struggle sometimes) with telling him the truth. I have decided he really doesn't want to know the hairy details. He just wants to chill out, relax, and let things happen as they will. :)

Two quick things...

When your story indicated that the Amazonians had changed their diet... it implanted the seed that Nahuel did as well.  Not on a conscious level, but a subconscious level, which allowed the scene of Nahuel's feeding to come as a horrific shock to Renesmee - and a surprise to the readers as well.

The second thing is the fact that you have an awesome cliffy here, and I get to READ the next chapter right away!  :-)

Author's Response:

Thanks for your continued reviews! Yes, I actually do love cliffies...but don't worry. I believe and ending should be just that -- an ending :)

:-)

So, not Jacob... guess your words led me to believe it was him - but really, it wouldn't have fit in your story, so I should have guessed Nahuel - like I had a couple of chapters ago.  :-(

Anyway, nice feel good chapter - happy for Renesmee.  At least she feels confident about how she looks - and knows that she's quite a catch herself DESPITE what she thinks Jacob thinks of her.  Hmmm...  What does Jacob think of her.  I don't believe Renesmee's right in her assumptions.  If I were to speculate (and yeah, I know my track record hasn't been good), I'd say Jacob seperated himself from her when he started having sexual feelings for her.  He did this becauase she was too young at that point in time, and when she did come of age, he asked to talk to her - she blew him off.  In further speculating, this crush she has on Nahuel is just that.  She's a very healthy beautiful young woman who's libido is awakening - of course she would be attracted to Nahuel.  But before this story ends - I believe she'll have come to realize that she loves Jacob AND Jacob loves her.  :-)

Once again - thanks for sharing your incredible talent!  And I'll press on...

Author's Response:

Thanks for your continued reviews! Well you didn't guess Nahuel, because you had already discarded him as a thought previously. I couldn't exactly tell you that you were on the right track back then. I would have ruined it for you! haha. You may be the only one who actually understood so clearly what happened to poor Jake. :/

Okay, I was wrong on who the guests would be - BUT I was glad as I was wrong, for Emmett and Rosalie provided a break to the heaviness of such a tale... and I must admit, I was highly impressed with Renesmee's response to Rosalie's request.  Just the implications that something could go wrong with a power like that is enough to deter using it - although, like I said in my previous review, I believe Renesmee's greater understanding of her power will allow her to pick and choose which memory she does wipe clear.

Thanks again for sharing your wonderful talent - as I was highly impressed with Renesmee's time with the Amazonians.  :-)

Author's Response:

Thanks for your continued reviews. When I write, I do it completely backwards. As in, I know what is going to happen at the end of the story, and every word in every chapter is slowly working toward that ending. So for me (and you know what I mean as you have finished the story) adding this visit was only logical to build up toward the ending.

Last chapter of the night... and I was blown away with the incredible scene of Bella and Renesmee's ride to the airport.  Your attention to detail regarding established characters like Bella is impressive - and I loved the touching scene of Charlie, being able to read between the lines - and understanding what Renesmee was saying to him when she commented about being all grown up.

I thank you for your powerful talent to put word to paper (sort of speak) and to know I've got (if I remember correctly) twelve more chapters of this story AND a ton of chapters to read when I start the sequel (which led me here), makes me smile ear to ear.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your lovely feedback. I know what you mean about the mind-speak. The story itself really isn't for skimmers. There are a lot of 'thoughts' all over the place, but the text really is sort of like dialogue for the most part, so that makes it better. The second book has a lot more dialogue and the chapters are shorter. I think that is just part of her progression and in being better about finding words.  :)

I just started reading this... and obviously just finished this third chapter... and I have to say, you're a powerful writer.  The strength of your words amaze me more so than I've ever read in a story before. 

Back in the first chapter, Renesmee says how she inherited her Mother's stubborness - and her Dad'sl, and not only combined them, but added even more to the mix.  Well, let me just say you hit the nail on the head - as your Renesmee's character and personality is more powerful than in any Renesmee I've ever read before.  :-)

And might I also add that I love Renesmee's new talent; for it is both powerful and frightening, and I would shudder at it's implications.

Thank you for sharing a very impressive talent, and now I'll get back to some more reading!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your lovely feedback. I appreciate you taking a few moments to let me know how you feel so far. If you have any questions or concerns, I am happy to work with you through them.  :)

YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYYAY !!!

Author's Response:

I am guessing that made you happy lol. :)

I'm reading your story now and i just really really want Jacob to hurry up and get with her already ! I love her with Nahuel but i want jacob back !

After reading your chapter end note for chapter 10, its just made me more anxious for jacob to come back !

Great story love it !

Author's Response:

Thank you for your feedback. Don't worry, you will see Jacob soon. :)

I really like your story.  I have been reading every chance that I  have gotten this weekend.  I have been very happy and very sad and even mad as the story has progressed.  Good Job.  Moving on to the next chapter before I coment on how much I don't like Nessie not being with Jake.  I understand keeping a good story going but I only thought of imprintings as tunnel vision.  If you are so completly in love with someone you don't see anyone else.

Will see what happens next.

Kyarb

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review! Have a little faith! I am pretty sure you won't be displeased with how things turn out :)

i dont normally like or even read nessie stories, but casket4mytears rec'd this to me, and i'm glad she did! you did a great job! this is, by far, one of the most original stories i've read. awesome plot twists, too!!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your great feedback!  I will be honest in saying that the whole idea of Nessie was unappealing to me, but I started this -- it was supposed to be a short-story -- for a friend who wanted an "ending".  I fell in love with Nessie during the writing, and I am glad you were able to anjoy her too!