EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
*SQUEALS EXCITEDLY*
THIS IS FUCKING AMAZING!!!!!
LIKE TWO HUNDRED WORDS IN AND I WAS GRINNING LIKE A FOOL. :D <<<< SEE THAT FACE?! THAT WAS ME.
*turns off caps lock*
Wow, okay. I told you I was excited.
Anyway, you want to see what got me all excited?
I could just walk right over to her, lean in with my lips brushing over her arteries at her neck, take a bite, and feel the wonderful warm liquid slide down my - Edward kicked my chair. I made eye contact, feeling his emotions of warning and caution. I suddenly realized my mistake. How could I picture such a thing?
No, you were once a ruthless monster that didn't care about planning ahead. Heck, you didn't even think about attacking - you just went for it. Go, go, go! Forget about your family for once and do something good for yourself!
"Sorry," I muttered, ducking my head. The shame had won over and I was now filled to the brim with it. How could I have done that? I still didn't deserve living with this family, even after fifty years.
"You weren't going to do anything," Alice murmured, trying to soothe me. "I could see that."
Something about the way her emotions were balanced told me she was lying. I looked down, not wanting to make eye contact. I was going to attack that girl and she and Edward knew it, but they weren't going to say it in fear of making me hate myself even more.
"It helps a little if you think of them as people," Alice suggested. I already did think of them as people, but more like prey-people. "Her name is Whitney. She has a baby sister she adores. Her mother invited Esme to that garden party, remember?"
"I know who she is," I said curtly, not wanting any of my family's pity. I turned to look out the window, which clearly ended the conversation. Alice would make me hunt tonight no matter what, no matter how much I wanted to test myself. My wife sighed and left the table, throwing her uneaten lunch away. I continued trying to ignore my thirst, but not succeeding very well.
What? Don't give me that look! I wanted to copy like a paragraph.. then I thought 'naah, fuck it!' and copied the whole damn lot. I LOVE that scene when I read it in Midnight Sun, but reading it here in Jasper's POV. Seriously. Fucking. Amazing.
*slaps head* Sorry! I'm not even swearing on purpose, I swear it (LOL. Pun not intended).
What to say now? I don't even know what to comment on next.
Ahh, this bit!
"Of course we'll sit in our regular spot. Stop it, Alice. You're getting on my nerves. I'll be absolutely fine."
Alice blinked as I helped her into her seat, her eyes focusing on Edward's face.
"Hmm," she said. "I think you're right."
"Of course I am," Edward muttered and felt even more irked. A wave of sympathy crashed over him and I met his gaze and grinned.
Annoying, isn't it? I questioned, holding back a laugh as Edward grimaced.
I really shouldn't be enjoying this one bit. It was very wrong and I wasn't that low to find joy in my brother's sorrow. I should just live up to the place I had taken now in the family. Edward had taken mine as "the weak one who could snap any moment" and I had upgraded to "can handle his thirst as long as he hunts regularly." It felt pretty good to be that vampire.
I know some of that was from Midnight Sun, and I can't remember exactly how much. I recognise the 'annoying, isn't it?' part. But not much more. You write Jasper's POV so well :)
The snowball bit was fun. It makes me smile when I read that part about Emmett throwing the iceball at Alice. Of course she'd deflect it! I'm grinning again >>> :D <<<< just thinking about that scene in my mind. I love Emmett so very much.
Finally, the ending, you nailed Jasper right on the head with how he kind of wanted Edward to slip up. Jasper hates that he is the weakest, and he certainly doesn't want to be the 'weakling' again. So if Edward slipped up, it would take the strain off of him, if that makes sense. Like how Jasper said 'annoying, isn't it?' because now Edward knows what it's like to be on the receiving end of the attention.
Like these part:
"I . . . think it's okay," Alice said. "Your mind is set. I think you'll make it through the hour." I sensed Alice's hesitation and decided it wouldn't be best for Edward to go. If he went, he'd either wind up killing the girl or miraculously make it through, downgrading me to "weakling" again.
"Why push it, Edward?" I said, seeming like a hypocrite. I had wanted to push terribly last week, but now I was telling Edward to just not test his limits. I wanted him to not be successful so I wouldn't be weak again. How selfish was I? "Go home. Take it slow."
And then this part:
I decided to put myself in Edward's footsteps for a second. If I ran into a human who I had to sit to right next to for an hour that smelled so much better than the rest of the humans . . . we'd have to move again. He shouldn't be doing this. Not at all.
"Go to class," Edward decided and I fought back a growl. He really shouldn't be doing this.
I like how you repeated the part about how he shouldn't be doing that. It shows how against the idea Jasper is.
Now I'm really sorry for copying and pasting. I know authors find it annoying to copy big chunks of text into the review, and trust me, I've never gone this crazy before. I couldn't stop myself! I just wanted to show you what I loved. If I had my way completely, I'd copy the whole lot! Like with the swearing, I had to delete it sometimes 'cause I was like 'STOP SWEARING!!' LOL. I told you I swear when I'm excited.
I'm adding this story to the series :)
*runs away*
Author's Response: Holy cow. That's a big review. xD And I completely LOVE it!! Haha, I feel like my author's response won't do it justice, because I'm like stunned speechless.
I really liked that scene in Midnight Sun, too. And writing it was a lot of fun. I like writing when Jasper's thirsty. It's almost addicting, lol.
Oh, thanks. :) I really don't know how, but his voice just comes loud and clear to me when I write, which is why I tend to write in his POV more than anyone else's.
Emmett's just awesome, and I love him to death.
I like it when reviewers copy and paste. Makes me feel like I'm special. :P Or, at least, that I know what I'm doing when I write this junk. Haha, really? Wow. Lol, I told you my leg bounces when I'm excited. Well, it's spazzing out right now. xD That's perfectly fine.
Thanks for the awesome review and rating! Lol, this was such a short reply to a long review. I feel bad. xD
~Twivamp :)
