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Reviewer: RedSummer (Signed) · Date: February 10, 2010 07:33 PM · On: Chapter 1

You've pitched Jake just right here. The balance between manipulation and conscience is a fine one but you've made a really good job of it. Great stuff x

Reviewer: LJ Summers (Signed) · Date: July 07, 2009 11:02 PM · On: Chapter 1

Ah, nice. Jacob the strategist. I liked that.

Reviewer: AmberrrJune (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 05:16 PM · On: Chapter 1

just a little bit longer would of been much better.

Reviewer: Camilla (Signed) · Date: January 20, 2009 08:03 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is very good psicology. I wonder, though, why not you and nobody else has written with more detail what is in the mind of Edward when he comes back, finds Bella desperate for punisment and abuse and, on the contrary, he is calm, loving, mature and sure of himself.

Care to do it ?

(In fact I am hoping that somebody does a serie titled moments of Edward's growth) including this and ending with the moment when he says goodbye to Jacob and calls him my brother, my son.

Reviewer: sdfan92 (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2008 06:46 AM · On: Chapter 1

OOOOOOOO, me likey!

Reviewer: dreaming in black and white (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2008 10:32 PM · On: Chapter 1

This was amazing - i absolutely loved it. In the first part, I felt so sorry for Edward - then in the second aww, poor Jacob! And then Bella - damn her!
Anyway, great story, great writing - thank you! xxx :)

Reviewer: silly bj (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2008 08:05 AM · On: Chapter 1

I love them both, I want them both, does that make me too greedy?
When I'm...UM, you know, by myself I always start out thinking about Edward but then by the end it's Jacob I'm thinking about. Is that too much information?
The chapter was a little choppy but ,all in all, well written.
Thanks! (a lot)

Reviewer: BellaEncantada (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2008 04:01 PM · On: Chapter 1

This is fantastic. I love how you get inside both characters' heads, though Jacob and Edward are so different. Love it!

Reviewer: EclipsedbyJacob (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2008 05:31 PM · On: Chapter 1

Beautiful!
I always feel so bad for Jacob!

Reviewer: Jasper4Me (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2008 05:04 PM · On: Chapter 1

Well done.
This piece of writing is absolutely fantastic! My brother was begging me to get off the computer but I couldn't leave until I finished this chapter.
Hope there is more to come soon!

Reviewer: Rialle (Signed) · Date: June 08, 2008 10:26 AM · On: Chapter 1

This is excellent. You write very well from both Jacob and Edwards' PoVs, something which not all fanfic authors can do without being biased. I liked getting the glimpses into Jacob's mind and my heart broke for him at the end. I loved how you put Bella's lines in italics in the end; it just shows how her words always negate the meaning of her actions. Good work, well done!

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