soooo are you going to finish this story????

That right bella you tell'em. "I have no problem adding to the family, just as long as I don't end up subtracting myself". That what she could've said as well.  All in all, a moderatately interesting chapter.

First off, good catch w/ the last name issue. I have always wondered why they didn't get caught out there w/ that.  Dr. Cullen name popping up all across america should've rung some bells.

Next I see that you are bringing the renesmee angle in here, otherwise it would've been a complete waste to bring it up in the first place. Secondly this seems like it would take a long time to explain, and I only see 2 more chapters. Are we going w/ an abrigded version from here on out???.

I just pray, that Jacob won't be imprinting anytime soon on any cullen babies!. That was a Sick angle the first time around. And not just cause it was an infant. I was upset due to the all around 'acceptance' of it. Everyone knows that bella just initally accepted due to misplaced guilt. She offered her daughter virtue up on a silver platter due to feeling guilty over the fact that JB can't seem to take no for an answer. His emotional issues are HIS problem. No one needs to offer up their first born, so he can feel better about himself. F' him. Added to the fact that the sick $*uK went from Mother to daughter in a blink also made the rest of the story almost unbearable to read. Wtf was SM thinking when she wrote that nonsense.

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HAHAHA its about to go down next chap. Yes, some action.

Permission for a beat down, NICE!!!. Edward better not lose, and this better not be a close fight for all that shit he's popping. Talk about embarassing. And why the hell are they going to stick around and duke it out in charlie's back yard???, they have an hr notice, Move u dingbats. Charlie has neighbors. Talk about bringing down the property value, good lawd!.

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MY GUESS: JB will turn informant against the cullens to the powers that be. Kind of like what Irinia did. oooo...what a story that will make. The cullens won't have any half breed coming to save them at the last minute this time. They clearly broke the law by confirming charlie's suspicions, And what will their allies do now?... would they support them when they are so clearly in the wrong?.

When edward calls bella ''sweetgirl'', I always picture him as a lecherous old man or the Uncle every daughter in the family is told to stay away from. LMAO.

As for the two vamps... my guess, Peter and Charlotte.

Edward caught plotting:

Stop trying to find out! If you continue this, I will tell Bella! -A

Damn it! My girl had a phone now, too, and I knew my sister well enough to know that she would rat me out, gleefully, if I continued to scheme. I needed to get a grip.

Or perhaps take the phone from her.

Don't even think about it! - A

Fuck!                                                - Excerpt

 

Lmao!!!!!!.

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Something stirred deep in my groin and the traitor in my pants grew to epic proportions. -edward

 lmao...Been there  bro! lol.

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Author's Response:

liked that, did ya?

 

Thank you!

Edward and Bella Discussing Edward seeing Bella Naked for the first time:

Did it affect me to see you this way? Yes, certainly. Of course, it did. How could it not, Bella? You are absolutely beautiful. Gorgeous. Stunning. Positively exquisite. As I've told you once – I may be a vampire, but I'm also a man. A man who happens to be very much in love with you. I very much desire you as a man does a woman. And thus, this love manifests itself in a desire to express it physically as well. To see you like this – well, it's like a dream come true. If I could dream, that is. Which of course, I can't, so let it suffice to say that you have featured prominently in my waking dreams for quite a while." -Edward response

Good gawd, edward. Thats a long winded way of saying, BITCH YOU MAKE ME HARD!.

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On a different note. Is it so hard to believe that bella used jacob as an insurance policy just in case edward left again?. I could believe it easily. Edward must face the facts. Edward, you are a runner!. You're an emotionally unstable being. When things get too tough emotionally, you run!. Its is no wonder she can't trust that you will be there when it counts?. Even when you try to be together sexually, when things get 'hairy', you leap frog into any of the 4 corners of the room. Imagine that from bellas perspective; here is the being she loves, but at the same time someone who is emotionally masochastic, and who has flat left her constantly from everything big and small. Sure he maybe trying to protect her from his venom and his bloodlust, but everytime he leaps away, it just plants another seed of doubt in her, increasing her fear that the next leap will be one he won't come back from. Hence the insurance policy of Jacob black. [Break in the case emergency]

These two have what called the hedgehog dillema. Like two hedgehog's they want to get close, but their quills [insecurites/lack of communication] hurt one another the closer they get; ultimately keeping them apart.

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P.s: I want to see a battle already... where is the ass kicking?

Author's Response:

LOL, like Edward would ever say that. Asskicking in chap 17. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

1st off, This Bella is REAAAALLLYYY slow on the uptake. She was pratically brain dead at the dealership. This version of bella can't seem to put two seperate concepts together at all.

2nd: Although you gave her the i.q. of a sloth, I can see why you did it to make your story acceptable. If she did have brains, she wouldn't have let things  w/ jacob progress so far. No worries, SM made her smart but not smart enough to figure out JB manipulation of her generosity and kindness. He constantly did exactly what you have been describing and she kept running back out of misplaced guilt, and emotional greed to keep everyone around her in her life. She should have gone fishing w/ charlie a few times, maybe then she would've learned, that there are some fish you throw back!.

3rd: I don't really see how SM wrote the story like she did. She created an entire Generation of TEAM JACOB followers. These future women will be quite unprepared to deal w/ a real stalker issue. They will now twist the idea of men who can't take no for an answer, and just label them as 'persistent'. Never truly realizing the danger they are letting into their lives. Shame on SM's.

Whoa Rose laid into bella dense ass good. God she was stupid. She truly came off as an airhead in this chapters.

 

Why didn't anyone say that it was jacob that broke the treaty and told. That was extremely relevent. Also the real reason jacob was there this morning... also extremely relevent. I'm seeing alot of missed opportunity here.

Sidenote: If bella doesn't have the balls to tell her father she is becoming a vampire, after he knew about the secret...then she clearly isn't cut out for the responsiblity. Proving she is just a child pretending to be a grown up.

Author's Response:

Putting everything into one chapter would be too much. Please keep reading. I think most of your questions will be answereed. Thank you for reviewing.

 

WOW...WHAT AN EXPLOSIVE CHAPTER. Huge developments, and we're only on chapter 2. Amazing stuff. THe SECRET IS OUT!!!!!!.

Jake is F'ing MENTAL. THANNNNNNKKKK GAWD for your existence, and writing this. This is what I always saw jake to be in my mind. A manipulative S.O.B.  That on the mountain top where he ask bella to "kiss me or I will kill myself in battle" nonsense he played on bella is what confirmed it for me. Which is why when she gave up her daughter to him out of  the guilt that she couldn't return his affection and also due to his imprinting;  made me SICCCCKKK. What is worst...SM just wrote an all around 'acceptance' of his imprinting. Like no one gave a shit that JB was an emotional leech, and a spurned suitor who can't take a hint that 'no means no' ,that he just went from mothers to daughter. IT made me sick that he was there EVERY F'ing DAY, and no one fought to get/keep renesmee out of his hands. Poor child, was just born and already her virtue was laid out on a sliver platter for his smelly undeserving ass as payment for her mothers misplaced guilt. Guilt over the fact that JB cant take NO for an answer. His emotional problems are just that... HIS PROBLEMS. Why in the hell did she take it upon herself to be responsible was beyond me. But you did clear some of that up in this AMAZING chapter.

How had I not seen this sooner? - Bella. Bc you're. a . DUMBASS!.

Love the new story banner for Resurrection.  It looks great!

Ah....

Author's Response:

LOL...yeah? :)

Thanks so much! 

 

TMOT :)

I am really loving this.  I'm loving that they're talking openly, and I love it when Bella's faults are acknowledged.  I've always thought she behaved very selfishly in minimzing Edward's fears and how much marriage meant to him.  I only wish I had the time right now to read it straight through.  All I can do it read a little here and a little there right now.  I hate having to read something like that; it breaks up the flow too much.

Author's Response:

Just take your time. :) Thanks so much!! 

 

TMOT :)