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Reviewer: Disneyvampire (Signed) · Date: August 20, 2010 02:21 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Found

Just found your story and I like it! I love Alice , so a stroy about her makes me happy. I look forward to following her story along and see what her path leads her through to the point she finds Jasper and then, the Cullens. This is going to be a favorite of mine, I can tell.

Excellent writing skills, great plot and a wonderful story already in 4 chapters. I can't wait to see where we go with Alice on her travels to Jasper and the Cullens. I look forwrd to the trip! :o)

Disney Vampire

Reviewer: FrozenSoldier (Signed) · Date: July 29, 2010 12:11 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Found

There was some strange formatting going on, but I highlighted it all and read it that way.

I did like this chapter, it was interesting how you brought in another character here and they made her drink the human blood. But poor Alice.. she didn't really want to do it, but now she has realised how hard it would be to take another humans life with the visions she has. It's like Jasper with him feeling the victims emotions!

Reviewer: wicketwitch604 (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2010 05:39 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Found

Your writing style is very train of thought and the chapters a scattered collection of bits and pieces that don't yet fit with Twilight cannon. However, since the bulk of this material pre-dates Twilight, Alice would not yet have Jame's relevation to ponder. I feel that this makes your current method plausbile though on "Found" I was only able to read the last paragraph everything else was white boxed out. Bringing in an additional POV may help break any stagnation through your current method of narration.

Reviewer: FrozenSoldier (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 02:23 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Lost

EEP, you mentioned me! I love reviewing, so its no problem at all :)

I loved this chapter! If I didn't love it so much, I guess I could say it was moving forward a little bit fast, but that is only a little, trust me. There isn't much more you could have written anyway before having to move it onwards. So take no notice of me saying it was too fast :P

This should be really interesting, I can't wait to find out what will happen now that she is on the move. And who is that voice? Will Alice kill him? And she saw Jasper! Yes!

The way you described her first moments in the sunlight was great, you really captured the moment perfectly. I especially liked how she spun around and crouched down into a defensive position.

Great job! :)

Reviewer: ludo (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 01:05 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Lost

awwww thanks for the choc fudge, how delicious! hey great chapter btw, I love the way you wrote Alice discovering her sparkley skin.

Reviewer: Dr_Twilight_PharmD (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 11:59 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Lost

I loved your description of Alice seeing her skin in the sunlight for the first time. Very beautifully written.

Reviewer: ludo (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2010 01:40 PM · On: Chapter 2 - Learning

Im loving this story! You write Alice so well. I look forward to your next chapter when you are able to post. PS no cupcakes thanks but some chocolate fudge would go down a treat :)

Reviewer: FrozenSoldier (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2010 09:11 AM · On: Chapter 2 - Learning

This was really good! And very newborn, too. I don't know much about newborns, but I remember reading somewhere that their minds are all over the place, skipping from one thing to another quickly. I loved how she didn't remember pulling the door from its hinges! Oh, and when she killed that poor rabbit then flung it over her shoulder, the visual was a bit whack, but it made me laugh a little.

Can't wait for chapter two :)

Reviewer: meeroom16 (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2010 06:44 PM · On: Chapter 1- Awakening

So far so good! I love Alice stories. Keep it up!

Reviewer: FrozenSoldier (Signed) · Date: April 29, 2010 08:58 AM · On: Chapter 1- Awakening

An Alice story! Yay! And it is your first attempt at a story? Wow, this is really good! The prologue was so intriguing, and I liked the style in which you write it.

Anyway, great start. I love the way you write Alice, you really helped us readers to get into her mind. I especially liked how she had the vision of Jasper straight away, it is always how I pictured it. And then she had the vision of Carlisle, I don't know how she knew he was a doctor, but oh well. I loved this.

You should keep writing! Please update soon :)

Have you heard of the Eternal Hope series? It is for Alice/Jasper stories. I would love to add it to the list! (As I am the one who created it). What do you say?

Author's Response:
I've never heard of the Eternal Hope series before unfortunately, but I will take a look! And you can add it, I feel flattered that you like it :3

Yes, this is my first ever fanfic.

Thanks for your reveiw, reading back the Carisle bit, I've realised I didn't explain it to well XD

Dizzy x.o.x.o

Reviewer: Dr_Twilight_PharmD (Signed) · Date: April 29, 2010 08:23 AM · On: Chapter 1- Awakening

Great opening chapter. You really have me getting into Alice's head.

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