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Reviewer: ellizabethcullen (Signed) · Date: November 06, 2010 04:16 PM · On: Chapter 22

Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

So glad to hear it! So sorry for my late reply. I just submitted the next chapter today (Dec 27), so it will be up as soon as my beta can validate! :-)

Reviewer: Vampirefix (Signed) · Date: November 04, 2010 12:20 PM · On: Chapter 22

Please, please update very soon.  I have enjoyed this so much and it has been so different from anything else written.

Reviewer: Vampirefix (Signed) · Date: November 01, 2010 06:38 AM · On: Chapter 22

I only found out about fanfiction a year ago so I have been scrolling and searching for interesting reading since in reference to the stories with Edward and Bella.  I absolutely loved this and read it in 5 days and I work full time.  This plot line kept me glued and you are an excellent writer and obviously love the Twilight Fandom.  I just turned 50 and have always loved the vampire stories and movies but this turned me upside down with it being such a wonderful love story and I have found myself quite obsessed!!

I am very impressed that you have been able to do this while working on your master's in such a difficult degree.  Please, please, please continue when you have the time and I will continue to check every day.  I just finished with the last chapter around 12:30 am this morning.  Can't wait to see what comes next.  And obviously, I would be considered Team Edward!!



Author's Response:

Fist of all, I'm SOO sorry it took me so long to respond to you! I've just been very overloaded with my thesis work. But I want you to know that your lovely review really means more to me than I can even say. I'm so happy that you found my story and are really enjoying it! And you're right: the Twilight Fandom has touched my heart in many ways!

Ha, ha, yes I WAS doing a fairly good job writing this as well as doing my master's work, but recently I've had to spend more time with my thesis and less time writing this story :(

Reviewer: dnabgeek (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2010 08:16 PM · On: Chapter 22

loved it! I completely understand on the master's bit.. i'm just starting mine and i'm overwhelmed.... good luck!!

Reviewer: vmaale (Signed) · Date: October 30, 2010 09:23 AM · On: Chapter 22

please update soon



Author's Response:

I'm so sorry it's taking me forever to get the next chapter finished. My thesis stuff it taking up all of my time and I had several unexpected curve balls thrown at me. But I promise that I'm not abandoning this story. I'm working on it when I can. Thanks so much for not forgetting about me! It means a lot :-)

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 29, 2010 10:04 AM · On: Chapter 22

I"m just glad that the story is gonna continue, that we're going to continue to see Bella & Edward heal together...thanks so much for that. This story could also prove to be a solace and a saviour even for any victims and their families who may have gone through this. Really well written, congratulations!!! Pity this couldn't be your thesis!!! Thanks for squeezing this in amongst your busy life!!! I read the whole thing in less than a day because it was so captivating and easy to read...not sure my family appreciated it...anyways...thanks again and go hard with the thesis-desi walker aka kiwis_rock when I'm logged in to the robsessedpattinson website



Author's Response:

It's definitely going to continue. The action stuff was fun, but the healing part of it has always been the most important to me. There's still quite a bit more of the story to come. And it really means a lot to me that you feel this story could be of comfort to those who have been through this. I know that it is a very sensitive subject for many, but as a victim myself, writing this has been a release for me in a way, and I hope it might do the same for others. And thank you again for your lovely compliment. AHH, that would be very awesome if this could be my thesis, LOL. Right now my REAL thesis is not going so well, and it's taking up all of my time! Unfortunately it's not giving me much time to write this story, hence why it's taking me forever to get the next chapter out. But I'm working on it when I can, and I promise that it will come eventually. 

Thank you so much for all of your wonderful reviews. Please know that they mean a lot to me.

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2010 09:08 PM · On: Chapter 10

nice...whats the plan to find that Mother#$@%%^!

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2010 08:56 PM · On: Chapter 9

...its amazing how you wrote this with such depth of emotion-reading it is heartbreaking...writing it must have been much worse...well done you!!!



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you! That means so much to me. And yes, writing this story does tend to hit home and get my emotions going, but at the same time I love writing it. It's a great way to release some pressure.

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2010 08:41 PM · On: Chapter 8

U r all good...i want to read what you've written not what someone has told u to write or what they think u should write...

Anticipation is cool...gives u time to think..."get that Mother$#@@#$%!!!"

LOve EPOV!!!



Author's Response:

That's really nice to hear. Thank you.

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2010 08:29 PM · On: Chapter 7

Thanks for your chp end notes...put my mind at ease...roll on PAYBACK IS A BITCH JACOB BLACK!!!

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2010 08:17 PM · On: Chapter 6

...if only every male was as perceptive and as caring as Edward...well written!



Author's Response:

I know...too bad I can't find someone as perfect in real life...sigh...I can dream, right? LOL :D

Thanks for a another review and your compliment! Means a lot!

Reviewer: ised (Signed) · Date: October 28, 2010 07:54 PM · On: Chapter 4

wooow! Heavy but realistic in the sense that its always usually a person of trust or that the victim knows. Thanks that Bella won't get pregnant.

It wasn't as graphic as I feared it could have been-thanks

Freaky is all I can say.



Author's Response:

Yes, definitely not a nice chapter. But I'm glad it wasn't as graphic as you feared. I couldn't handle writing anything more graphic than that. It was bad enough as it was. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: twihardacctant (Signed) · Date: October 27, 2010 01:29 PM · On: Chapter 22

SOOOOO GOOODDD!!!!!! omg you have to finish the story....



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you! That means a lot to me. I'm definitely going to finish the story, but unfortunately updates will be slow because of my thesis writing. But thanks so much for your review. It really helps keep me motivated! 

Reviewer: veer (Signed) · Date: October 24, 2010 08:48 AM · On: Chapter 22

Hi Lisa,
Hope you are doing well and your study is going well!
But i have to admit... i'm checking every day for an update! I'm really looking forward for more after this great and wonderful chapter. It was exiting and sooooo sweet. Just wanted to let you know that your story is the best!
Lots of love, Vera

Author's Response:

Aww, thank you so much, and I'm so sorry it took me so long to reply to you and that the next chapter is taking forever. Unfortunately things are NOT going well for me right now and I've had hardly any time to write. I also find it very difficult to write when I'm very stressed. But I want you to know that your kind words really mean so much to me and help keep me motivated! So thank you for that, and there WILL be more coming, it's just going to take me so more time. *HUGS*

Reviewer: Sarsacia (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2010 05:02 PM · On: Chapter 10

So far so good.  The only thing I would change is the repitition when you switch to a different POV. 



Author's Response:

Yes, I realize there's a problem with repetition. I did want to show both sides, but I should have written it differently. I realized this mistake and have improved upon it. Starting with chapter 16, there is no repetition. So I hope you will just bear with it until then. This was the first story I have ever written, and I was learning. Lol. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, though. I very much appreciate it. I hope you will continue to enjoy.

Reviewer: Yrollam (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 01:43 PM · On: Chapter 22

Dude!!!!!! Wtf update soon!! It's crazy!!

Author's Response:

Lol, I'm glad you want to read more! I'm doing my best, but unfortunately RL is NOT going well for me right now, and I haven't had much time to write. There will be more coming eventually, it's just going to take me some time. Sorry about that! 

Reviewer: Yrollam (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2010 04:21 PM · On: Chapter 16

Ur canadian too from where? Love thus Friggin story too!!!!

Author's Response:

Yep, I'm from Ontario. I'm so glad you're enjoying the story! Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: Biancalove97 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2010 08:22 AM · On: Chapter 22

Amazing story! I love how this series makes me feel like I'm reading a Stephinie Meyer book! Things like Bella's clumsyness, awkwardness, selflessness,and alot of characteristics about her and the way you worded it made it feel like a Stephinie Meyer book! Another example this one of Edward, of how he is so collected and protective and tries to keep things that Bella would find disturbing, or how he's always so gentle, and loving, and frustrated in the early days because Bella kept second guessing his love! I just think if Stephinie Meyer read this she'd be blown away at how much it relates to her writings. I love this series even though it's dark and sad, it shows how Bella and Edward's love can last through ANYTHING!(:



Author's Response:

Oh, my gosh! What a lovely review! I can't even tell you how much your kind words mean to me. I fell in love with SM's books and characters, and I wanted to keep them in character as much as possible. And the main theme that I want to get across in this story is that Edward and Bella's love can get though anything, even something this horrible. So your review makes me sooo happy. I can't thank you enough! *HUGS*

Reviewer: Luiza (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 06:22 PM · On: Chapter 22

Loved it! Looking forward for more!!!!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your review!

Reviewer: veer (Signed) · Date: October 10, 2010 05:51 AM · On: Chapter 22

Hi Lisa,
The confrontation was just great! It was everything i hoped for and more... Love, Vera

Author's Response:

woops! I meant to write more in my last reply to you but I hit submit by mistake! Anyway, I wanted to say that I just finished chapter 23 on Dec 24. YAY! FINALLY! Lol. That's the good news. The bad news is that I discovered that my twilighted validation beta has stepped down as a twilighted beta :( I am currently trying to sort this out and get myself a new beta. I hope it won't take too long. Once I get a new beta and get the new chapter validated, it will be available. Thank you sooooo much for your continued support. It means the world to me!

Reviewer: renee aubin (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2010 08:31 AM · On: Chapter 22

Hi, Lisa, so glad to see a new chapter.  I think grad school is a REALLY good "excuse" for time between updates.  Please know that we're just glad you are staying with this wonderful story, even when RL gets tough.

Tanya!  Did not see that coming.  But when Edward says that T&J have a common goal, it's easy to see what that is.  So Jacob is not the only seriously twisted spurned lover in this story.

Ooh, that's nasty that she can truthfully say Edward came to her (well, the Denali clan) when he ran away from Bella after that first day in the biology lab. 

OMG, as if Jacob didn't already deserve to die, pushing thoughts of what he did to Bella into Edward's head...  Unforgiveable.  At least Edward wasn't totally unprepared, thank goodness he had heard it from Bella first.

Great description of Edward figuring out how to focus and think through how he could eliminate Tanya.   

‘So I concentrated on my plan, starting with flashing Tanya a seductive smile.'  If he could lie to Bella so convincingly when he left her in NM, he could surely convince Tanya who wanted nothing more than to believe he wanted her.  But gross!  He'll be looking for some bleach later to get that experience out of his brain.

At least Bella had the comfort of knowing that Tanya wouldn't want to harm Edward.  But oh so frightening and evil when Jacob threatens to "refresh your memory", and make Edward watch.  Gah.

So glad Bella got to strike a key blow for herself!  Thank you, Emmett!  We don't even realize how close she was to being killed until Edward's POV. 

Nice explanation for how all the parts of T&J's plot fit together.  Yeah, if a vampire who knows you and your family goes rogue without anyone realizing it, you're pretty much screwed.

‘It had taken every ounce of strength I'd had just to partially block out what Jacob's mind had been screaming at me. I'd kept myself rooted to reality by focusing on Bella as I'd held her, listening to her heart and telling myself over and over that I'd never let it happen again.'  Nice.

Edward torturing Jacob ... makes me queasy, but considering not only what he had already done but when he was about to do again, I guess he had it coming.  I liked Bella's thought:  ‘I couldn't bring myself to stop Edward. I couldn't even remember why I should. ‘

Convenient that Jacob decided to end his own life.  I imagine that he realized once the pack found out he had aligned himself with a vampire to carry out his plan, they would have abandoned him altogether. 

Love the moment when the fighting stops and Bella does a frantic head count to make sure everyone is OK.  And weak-kneed, profound relief when she can finally sob in his arms. 

Re your author's notes, I totally agree that this is not the end of the story, and I'm so glad you see it that way.  The most important part to me has always been Bella's healing from the rape, and how she and Edward will manage to recover from that.  For my two cents, I don't feel the story would be complete without their first sexual experience, and how they make it really her "first time".  And bring on the family interactions, always enjoy those.

Thanks again for the time and energy and thought you put into this story.  Best of luck with school...

 

 

 



Author's Response:

I'm always thrilled to see a review from you! And once again I feel the need to apologize for my late reply. Thank you for understanding my grad school excuse for the slow updates as well as review replies.

You interpret and express everything SOO well! 'seriously twisted spurned lover' --what an excellent way of putting it. And yes, Jacob wasn't the only one in the story. The title of the story 'Mistaken Trust' refers to more than just Bella's trust in Jacob. The Cullens trusted Tanya and she betrayed that trust.

I like that you remembered that at least Bella did tell Edward everything that happened before Jacob forced him to see some of it.

'He'll be looking for some bleach later to get that experience out of his brain' LOL. I kind of feel the same way! There were many readers that said they would've liked to have read about how Edward killed Tanya, and I did actually think of including it, but then I decided to leave it to the readers imagination and one of the main reasons for that was because I REALLY did not want to think too in-depth on writing out that scene, lol.

Yes! I think Bella's strike on Jacob was very important. And once again you are very perceptive. Bella didn't realize just how close Jacob was to killing her. Emmett actually saved her life in a way. This is a key point, and you can be certain that Edward will be enlightening Bella on this fact.

Ha, ha, Edward torturing Jacob made me queasy as well. Hence, the reason I didn't provide a more in-depth description. I don't like the idea of it, but Jacob certainly deserved it and it had to be done.

Thank you for your lovely compliments.

Yes, the story is definitely not over. The action/suspense stuff is over. I enjoyed writing the action/suspense, but the healing is definitely the most important part to me. I truthfully think that the best parts of the story are still yet to come. There will be some angst/healing but there is also going to be lots of E/B fluff thrown in along the way as well! And thank you for dropping your two cents. I agree with you there as well, and I do plan to take it to the first sexual experience (although this is rated R and so it won't be as detailed as some NC-17 fics).

I still have quite a bit more planned for this story, but unfortunately, it's going to take me a while to get there. RL is NOT going well for me right now and I haven't been able to do much writing at all. BUT more of the story will come eventually. Thank YOU again for your review, it really brightens up my really hectic RL.

Reviewer: BethyBoo (Signed) · Date: October 06, 2010 06:58 PM · On: Chapter 22

I was anything but disappointed. It was perfect. You've done a fantastic job with this story. Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

Aww, thank you so much for your kind words. I'm so happy you weren't disappointed. 

Reviewer: Natasha2196 (Signed) · Date: October 06, 2010 11:44 AM · On: Chapter 22

I love how you done capter 22, its amazing. Keep going please.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! It means a lot to me! 

Reviewer: sophielynn31 (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2010 06:57 PM · On: Chapter 22

Such a great story.  I have cried and stayed up too late but I couldn't stop reading.  Keep up the good work.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! It means a lot to me! 

Reviewer: searching4myedward (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2010 02:02 PM · On: Chapter 6

YES, you are making me cry. I found your story, while taking a break from homework. Let's just say if on the test are questions about "Twilight" I will pass, but not likely on a math test.



Author's Response:

Ha, ha, well thanks so much for reading, and I hope your math test went ok in the end :-)

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