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Love Twilight fan fic - love the Twilight saga!


I finally posted my first Twilight fanfic (The Bella and Edward Show.)  This explores how a mere mortal reacts as he quitely observes the strange magical relationship of Bella and Edward.


I just started posting my second Twilight fanfic, which captures the POVs of Garrett, Kate and Jasper around the time Eleazar identifies Bella as a shield inside the Cullen living room.  This is a what if tale of Breaking Dawn, where events force Jasper to lead the Cullens into battle against the Volturi, appropriately called "Breaking Dawn, the Battle!"


The third tale is on my backburner and is Post Breaking Dawn.  We'll see if I ever get to it.


Anyway, I'm married and have twin boys that just recently graduated college as Chemical Engineers.  No - they could care less about Twilight and can't understand my fascination with this universe.  My wife is only a subpar fan, and tolerates my "hobby."  Why am I fascinated with it?  I haven't a clue, but I certainly do get an endorphin rush from reading the countless fanfics here.


Finally, I think Kristen Stewart is an incredible actress.  I love her personality and how she doesn't allow Hollywood to define her.  I personally think she has done an excellent job of bringing Bella to life, and love the extra feistiness she brought to the character.  And yeah, in addition to Kristen being a tremendous actress, she's also stunningly beautiful.  I wish her the absolute best in all her future endevours.


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Stories by JRParz
Summary:

Have you ever considered what Breaking Dawn would have looked like if there had been a battle instead of a peaceful confrontation?  What if the Cullens had come to the field prepared?  But let's back up and consider what would have triggered such a preparation.  Surely when Eleazar proclaimed Bella a shield, Alice would have seen this... and if she had, wouldn't it have triggered another vision or two?  Maybe resulting in two very different outcomes...?  The Cullens have a lot of talent at their disposal, but there isn't a finer, more intelligent military leader than their own Jasper Whitlock.  Proven in battle before, and possessing a reputation for being the absolute best, please join me in this thrilling, yet very plausible multi-chapter "what if" ride.

Most of the POVs are Jasper, Garrett and Kate, but as the tale progresses there are other POVs to include Maria, Edward, Bella, Rose, Alice, and Carlisle!

The tale is canon, using some of the very same dialogue Stephanie provided, but the alternate universe comes in ONLY when the tale veers off into a battle.

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"Wow. What a complete pleasure this was to read.  You must have done some pretty intensive research to give this story the depth/scope that I've so enjoyed. And the way it interwove with the book (to the point where I had no idea where one would leave off and the other would start)...well, that had to be a real bitch to make sure everything gelled together. But you freaking pulled it off. What a joy it is to find something of such quality on a FREE website. I swear sometimes I feel like I won the lottery the day I found Twilighted!" Roonie

"That was AMAZING! U really need 2 write a book! I loved it and couldn't stop reading it for about 4 hours until the very end! That was cool how you skipped years and yet still made it sound so clear and nonconfusing and I could feel the emotion and see the "images" of every  character, separately yet together at the same time! (If you catch my meaning ;p) I hope you keep writing, whether it's on fanfiction or as an author for real stories, because your writing style is amazing!" AluraWolffang

"I absolutely loved this story! You are a very talented writer and I am very much looking forward to reading other stories you have written."  willyjoe

"This was much closer to the way the end of Breaking Dawn should have happened. I read it in two sittings, because I had to sleep, after all, and I loved it... now I'm off to see if you've written anything else yet!"  idealskeptic

"I liked your ending better than SM's.  They way she left the threat of the Volturi over the Cullens head, knowing she had no intention of ever following up on the story, never sat right with me.  In SM's world, the Volturi would have left that day and started planning how to defeat the Cullen's.  Aro would not take his humiliation in front of so many, lightly.  I thought your ending was well thought out and gave attention to so many interesting characters that we only got a glimpse of in the original books."  kycee

"I'm so sorry to hear you lost readers after the first chapter. I think your story is wonderfully written, stays in canon, and I'm so glad I found it. Thank you for sharing it!"  Kathryn (mommakat)

"This was an amazingly original take on Cannon leading to AU. So very interesting and exciting.  I like the idea of all the hidden missions and the way Jasper really worked his magic. I, too, felt he wasn't utilized enough in BD by SM. I knew Alice would NEVER leave her family without reason and this story really satisfied my curiosity as to their plan.  I really enjoyed all the points of view and could easily see these events taking place.  Great job!"  lightspell

"A fic that makes you wish the book had ended that way (in spite of the fact that you freaking loved the book)?  Yeah, that's pretty damn amazing.  So thank you for pouring yourself into this for us. Thank you for putting yourself out there and getting absolutely nothing in return except for a few meager words of praise. You. Are. Awesome."  Roonie

"I have only recently joined Twilighted.net and started reading the stories here. There are so many excellent stories, but I have to say this is the first one to inspire me to write a review and here it is: Bravo! Brilliant!" Elbereth49

 


Categories: Breaking Dawn, AU Characters: Afton, Alec, Alice, Amun, Aro, Bella, Benjamin, Caius, Carlisle, Carmen, Charles, Charlotte, Chelsea, Demetri, Didyme, Edward, Eleazar, Emmett, Esme, Felix, Garrett, Heidi, Irina, Jacob, Jane, Jasper, Kachiri, Kate, Kebi, Liam, Maggie, Makenna, Marcus, Mary, Peter, Randall, Renata, Renesmee, Rosalie, Sam, Santiago, Senna, Siobhan, Stefan, Sulpicia, Tanya, Tia, Vladimir, Zafrina
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Completed: Yes Word count: 54445
[Report This] Published: May 16, 2010 Updated: October 09, 2010


Summary:

Junior Raymond Kulp, star pitcher of the Forks High baseball team, finds himself drawn to the new student much like everybody else.  But since he has himself a girlfriend, he discreetly observes the Police Chief's daughter from afar.  It is during this first year that he notices the developing relationship between Bella Swan and the mysterious Edward Cullen - and how this isn't the normal run of the mill relationship.

Come join Ray as he witnesses events throughout his junior and senior year that strike him as extraordinary, while he observes Bella Swan and the entire Cullen family.

This tale is canon

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Some of the reviews...

"This was so well written and so damn sweet.  I don't know where you came up with the idea, but it was truly an excellent read."  jessicasheehan

"Great story.  You captured all the main points, was in line with canon and still introduce a wonderful plotline which I enjoyed through the eyes of Ray."  Queendel

"I liked the way you ended this.  I can see how seeing a relationship like Bella and Edward's and watching it as closely as Ray did would affect his life.  I think that it is a believeable ending and am impressed with the way you carried it through.  I think that this was a unique perspective on the story that we all know and love and you did it justice.  Great Job!"  Jen (javamomma0921)

"Um, wow.  I loved this!  Like you, I guess I've always wondered what Bella and Edward appeared to be from an outsider's perspective.  You nailed it!"  starry19

"I'm so glad you wrote this.  Not only was it great, but it's one of my favorite angles to see characters we know from a stranger's POV.  So I did a little happy dance in front of my computer (earning me a weird look from my dog) when I saw your story.  Thanks!"  TheCelticOne

"I absolutely love this story.  And views of their relationship from afar.  I'm always trying to look for stories like these and jumped to the opportunity of reading this one.  Plus the length!?  It was like an early Christmas present.  You're writing is wonderful; especially how you weave your characters through it.  And in the 3 chapters you have, you have more personality in all the characters than most people with 50 chapters!" Fleury's Apprentice    


Categories: Twilight, New Moon, Eclipse, Breaking Dawn, Post-Breaking Dawn Characters: Alice, Angela, Bella, Ben, Charlie, Edward, Embry, Emmett, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Lauren, Mike, Nessie, Other Character, Quil, Renesmee, Rosalie, Sam, Tyler
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Completed: Yes Word count: 19019
[Report This] Published: February 06, 2010 Updated: February 21, 2010






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