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I love Twilight!  I have a couple of issues with the messages sent in the canon, but I still love the universe!


I've always enjoyed storytelling. Even as a child I'd create snippets of stories out of shows and books that fired my imagination. Now, I write my own stories as well as those same snippets.


I'm also an artist and sometime computer guru. The last more lucrative, by far, than the other.


Just a few observations, opinions, and facts:


I'll not shill for reviews. It's cheap. Surely the big white box at the bottom is reminder enough, and asking for reviews just betrays a lack of confidence as a writer, imo. Getting reviews is great! Asking for them ahead of time, not so great.


Just because a piece clears a spell checker doesn't necessarily mean everything is actually spelled correctly. Fan fiction is rife with really amusing sentences, all unintentionally written because the author relied on the spell checker just a tad too much and ended up using an incorrect word anyway.


Bridal style? Really? Surely, as word smiths we can do better than that. Using this short-hand is like fingernails on a blackboard to me. You've never heard of him cradling her in his arms as he sweeps her off her feet? One story combined the previous point and this and called it bridle style. Which made me briefly think of a s and m trip rather than a romantic gesture. Given the context of this particular mistake, I laughed quite hard. Obviously, our hero was about to make gentle, slow love to the fair damsel (in a bridle, apparently).


A moot point is often pointless, but never mute.


I'm wary that you'll weary of these little tidbits, so I'll stop here.


Can you find the words often confused in those last few sentences? Oh yes, one other note... Prompting for reader reactions in end notes is just... tacky. And reminds me of school texts. Yikes!


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Stories by LunasInSilver
Summary:

Jasper Whitlock, MJ, CSA was born in 1844 and changed in 1863.

Mary Alice Brandon was born Oct 31, 1980.

She was his salvation; he was the other half of her soul. How would their love survive the chaos and inhumanity of his bloody past and the innocent fragility of her human heart?

NC-17 for mature themes and eventual possible lemons.

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Lovely banner by JLove34.  Thanks so much!

 

 


Categories: AU Characters: Alice, Carlisle, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jasper, Rosalie
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Series: None
Chapters: 6 Completed: No Word count: 11944
[Report This] Published: May 13, 2012 Updated: September 28, 2013






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