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love twilight series..but bella is too dependent and whiny..love that kristen stewart gives her some dignity in the movies...*sad that breaking dawn went in the direction of bella getting pregnant...*interested in other ideas of what could have happened...:D


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15 Step by Jenny Jerkface Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 225]
Summary:

17-year old Bella Swan moves to Forks after being abandoned by her mother. With music as her only friend and a penchant for trouble, Bella just wants to be left alone. Unfortunately, her behavior attracts the attention of hot tempered Edward Cullen.

(Thanks Readergoof for the banner!)


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Edward, Emmett, Jasper, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Completed: No Word count: 72747
[Report This] Published: April 26, 2010 Updated: January 07, 2011


Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 26, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: The World at Large

lol..i like that they're just getting the hostility over with and deciding to like each other

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 05, 2011 Title: Chapter 14: Whalebones

Bella did react really badly!..I have a bad brain to mouth filter and I would have even known it wasn't funny!.:O..poor Edward.

 
Summary:

An abused girl and a mysterious "business" man meet a bus station, a trip to seattle, relationships are born, walls are broken, but always with a bang! Would he be able to bring her up or will the "business" bring them both down. AH/AU/OOC

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Modern Bandits & Neglected Dreamers


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Eric, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Jessica, Mike, Other Character, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Completed: No Word count: 87420
[Report This] Published: April 28, 2010 Updated: July 10, 2011


Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 10, 2011 Title: Chapter 3: 3. Meetings

haha..if Bella didn't point out that Edward was putting himself out for her, I would have said she should leave!..hahah

 
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Date: January 10, 2011 Title: Chapter 2: 2. The Diner

wow...Jessica seems cruel...maybe Renee picks Jessica because Bella misses Charlie?...:(

 
Bella? Marie? by Nyomi Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 1290]
Summary: Feature

ON HIATUS. [sorry guys :-(]

Bella (22) longs for love and acceptance, yet her fear of rejection keeps her guarded and single. Her craving to feel needed is fulfilled by working as a live-in nanny to Rosalie, who's a single mom to four-year old Henry.

For months, Bella has been secretly infatuated with Rosalie's ex-husband, Edward (29), but he barely acknowledges Bella during their brief encounters. That is, until one night when she bumps into him at a club.

However, he doesn't recognize her at all.

Afraid for her job, she tells him her name is Marie. He acceptes her pseudonym, and feeling safe with anonymity, Bella reveals her wild side. 

She makes the most of the night, but what happens when he tries to find the mysterous Marie?

When Mr. Cullen gets to know Bella, will he still want Marie?

How will that one incredible night shake their worlds?

AH/OOC/MA

*Rated for language, adult situations and sexual content from early chapters.

 

 

 


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Edward
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: No Word count: 129626
[Report This] Published: May 01, 2010 Updated: September 30, 2011


Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Edward Meets Marie

omg!!..i can't wait!!!...idk why, but i'm hooked on this story!!..i just love that Bella has a backbone!!..hahah



Author's Response:

LOL. It's so good to see you excited!!! Thanks for the rating too! Wow! ;) Lots of backbone from Bella next chapter! *winks* 

Take care, sweetie,

Nyomi xx

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: August 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11: Massage

gasppp!!...NOOOO!!..Bella should have got some first!!!..hahaha...definitely understand tho..:)...otherwise, Edward might have changed his mind and rejected her first..:O



Author's Response:

 

Hey! I'm so glad you liked the chapter and that you can understand why Bella did what she did! Thank you so much for reviewing and rating. You're awesome! :-) Chapter 12 is coming really soon, but here's a little taste to wet your appetite until then! It's from Bella:

 

My smile faltered as I got the feeling I was being watched. Cautiously, I raised my eyes and was instantly met with Edward's twinkling gaze. His happy expression quickly vanished, replaced with one of indifference as he stood behind the far end of the island counter. He looked down at the countertop, loudly clearing his throat, his eyebrows knitted together in a tight frown. His serious demeanor instantly engulfed us in an uneasy, awkward silence.

 

Quickly helping Henry to his feet, I dragged myself up from the floor, brushing my jeans off and straightening my plaid flannel shirt. I tried to ignore how my chest was constricting around my rapidly beating heart while nervousness rolled coldly in my stomach. The lighthearted and cheerful atmosphere quickly became so heavy and tense, it was suffocating.

 

 

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Friends

hahaa..idk if Bella gave herself away, but I thinks she might have given Edward an awkward problem, if you get what I mean?!!

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 27, 2011 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19: Unexpected Events

I hope she's just really stressed because that would be a difficult position for Edward to be in, though I think he would step up regardless! I love that she's getting her life together!!..I hope she has a lot of time to do that before anything serious happens..:)

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 25, 2011 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17: Revelations

Is Bella pregnant?!!...*i love this story!!..can't wait for next update..:)

 
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Date: August 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: Cryptic Conversations

haha...EDWARD IS THE SHOES!!!...loved this chapter and that Edward is finally liking Bella!



Author's Response:

 

Hey! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing as well as the fab star rating! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the chapter and understood that Bella was talking about Edward! Here's a little taste of what's to come shortly. It's Chapter 11: Massage. In Bella's view:

 

"So... er... you still want me to give you a massage, or what?" I asked, half expecting him to tell me not to worry about it.

 

He smiled, raising his brow. "Are you sure that's okay? I wouldn't usually... But my shoulder is killing me."

 

I nodded. "Of course it's okay. I wouldn't have offered if...." My voice tapered off. This was really happening. I was actually going to touch him again.

 

"Thanks. I truly appreciate it. So... how do you want me?" His lips twitched, and if I didn't know any better, I'd swear he enjoyed placing that little innuendo in there. My nether region certainly liked it.

 

"Uh..."

 

I honestly didn't know how I was going to do it. Should I ask him to lie on his stomach, so I could sit on his butt? He had such a cute, tight ass... I remembered squeezing it so many times the other night... I even recalled biting him. He was just too delicious. I hadn't been able to help myself.

 

But just thinking of me sitting on him, my girly parts so close to his... My mouth went dry.

 

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 07, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Edward Meets Marie

lol..it's so easy to understand!!..i love a Bella that's more independent and doesn't throw herself at Edward!!...Next chapter seems intense!

can't wait..:)

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 14, 2010 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: Never Forget

gahhh..all i caught from her past was regretting not fixing things with Charlie, so it means she IS going to talk to Edward about what happened???...lol....I'm usually so good at catching these things!!...but I'm not sure if that was the only reference?..haha



Author's Response:

 

Hey, carog91! I'm thrilled that you liked chapter 12! There were two other snippets of info about her past, but good job on picking up the one with Charlie! :) Thank you so much for reviewing and for the wonderful rating. It means so much!

 

I'm sorry it's taken me so long to reply, but chapter 13 is now in with the beta's and will be up real soon. I hope you enjoy the following unbeta'd teaser from Bella in Chapter 13: Friends:

 

Tucking my hair behind my ear, I adjusted my glasses and took a deep breath before stepping out onto the patio. The delicious smell of grilled meat and onions was strong in the air, causing my stomach to grumble with impatient hunger.

 

The bright sunlight shone down on the patio, making me sigh in pleasure from the heat on my skin. I was glad I'd taken off my sweater before coming out into the warm sunshine, but I was still a little nervous about Edward's reaction.

 

He, and everyone else, was listening to Alice tell a story about something her boys did yesterday. As I walked towards the table, Edward glanced at me sideways with a smile on his face. The cheerfulness in his expression warmed my heart, but when he did a fast double take and fixed his eyes on me, a chill of concern made my breath hitch and my steps falter. He trailed his burning gaze over me, up and down. Fearful that he had recognized me as Marie, my stomach churned with queasiness and my breaths turned shallow. I slowed my approach to a near stop, my wide eyes glued to his.

 

I knew I shouldn't have taken off my damn sweater!

 

 

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14: Deja vu

OMG!!!!!..he finally put it together!!!!...fudge!!!..but hopefully he'll understand why Bella didn't tell him yet!!

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: November 20, 2010 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15: The Truth

omg!!..Um...Idk..sooo many options!!.maybe a bit of all of them!!..but it'd be nice to hear more about Bella's past, and maybe Edward should look into her past?!!.

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: January 06, 2011 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: Consequences

hahaah..so glad the next update is almost ready!..i was freaking out for this one!

 
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Date: February 26, 2011 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18: My Exception

ahhhhhhhh...so glad to finally know!!!...lol...it was a bit of Bella's fault though!!..but I understand it..:)..so glad Edward didn't open his mouth yet!

can't wait for next update.

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 11, 2011 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: Perfection

lol...Rose wants to get back together with Edward??...and Bella IS pregnant?!..i've known girls who still had their periods at the first trimester or two of their pregnancies..:O

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 02, 2011 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21: Sex Kitten

I feel like Rose might be still be in love with Edward!..and Royce abused Rose?!!....so worth the wait..:)

 
All That Jazz by javamomma0921 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 304]
Summary:

Banner credits: Ange de Laube and Rosalynn (Original banner, maker unknown)

It's 1919. Meet Bella and Alice Swan. Their father died when they were very young and their mother was a recent victim of Spanish influenza in Philadelphia. Although it is questionable who was truly the victim: Renee Swan or her youngest daughter, Bella. Raised to believe that she could only hope to be her husband's servant, Bella is unprepared for the new ideas that the Jazz age is bringing with it. What will happen when Bella and Alice leave everything they know in Philadelphia to live with their Aunt Esme, their mother's "brazen" older sister? Who will they meet? How will their lives and ideals change? Canon couples, AH/AU


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Completed: No Word count: 165815
[Report This] Published: May 01, 2010 Updated: June 13, 2011


Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Leaving Philadelphia

can't wait!..i love the idea of the flapper jazz age!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm really excited about this story as well. I feel like it will be a fun story to write. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! ~Jen

 
100 Hours by wytchwmn75 Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 514]
Summary:

Bella has a 4.0 GPA, is President of the Student Council and volunteers at Forks Community Hospital. Edward is pierced, has tattoos, and has to serve 100 hours community service at the hospital. What happens when the bad boy finds out the good girl has a wild side? ExB, AH, OOC, Rated NC-17

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Categories: AU-Human Characters: Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Jacob, Jasper, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 21 Completed: Yes Word count: 70144
[Report This] Published: May 05, 2010 Updated: July 07, 2011


Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: 10.5 Hours

haha..i just added this to my favorites!

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: 10.5 Hours

haha..i just added this to my favorites!

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 11, 2010 Title: Chapter 3: 10.5 Hours

haha..i just added this to my favorites!



Author's Response:

Oh wow, thank you! I apppreciate that and the review. Thank you so much.

xo

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 17, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: 15 Hours

hahaha..well..anyone can see it coming!..Bella isn't dumb enough to trash herself up in public..hahah.Edward was just pushing it..:D



Author's Response:

Thank you! I don't see why no one understands why she left.

xo

 
Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: 5 Hours

hahahhaa...guess i'm one of few that isn't too obsessed with Edward!!!..*now if Jasper did that..:D..hahahha



Author's Response:

Well if you want some Jasper, I'm auctioning off 3 O/S's for FGB and its first come first serve. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

xo

 
Seeing Double by Kayten Rated: NC-17 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 119]
Summary:

Bella Swan moves to Forks to escape an abusive living situation, and she and Alice Cullen become fast friends. But is there something else developing between them? Bella's confusion is times-two thanks to Alice's gorgeous but elusive twin brother, Edward. As if being the new girl in a small town wasn't bad enough, Bella must now figure things out for herself as the Cullens have her seeing double.


Categories: AU-Human Characters: Alice, Bella, Carlisle, Charlie, Edward, Emmett, Esme, Lauren, Phil, Renee, Rosalie
Challenges:
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Completed: No Word count: 51623
[Report This] Published: May 12, 2010 Updated: October 21, 2010


Reviewer: carog91 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 23, 2010 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: Unequivocally, Irrevocably Smitten

i love Rose!!.she's so sweet!

 




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