Your "Dark Side of the Moon" is one of my most favorite fanfics. What a delight to read this addition, particularly because I have a soft spot for Charlie. You've done a wonderful job of giving us a well rounded character, a believable Charlie. He's a loving if someone hapless dad, he's a good cop, and everything he did in your story rang totally true.

Extra props for including a line from "The Princess Bride." And yes, I caught the reference to the large dark shape near the Swan house, and figured it was Jake in wolf form. Clever writer!

It's always a genuine pleasure to read your work. Thank you for adding to it with this gem.

I am enjoying your interpretation of Jasper, and reading Twilight through his POV is intriguing. Your writing is very compelling and your depictions of Jasper and Alice ring true.

Please don't hate me for this nitpicky little detail, but my inner English teacher is compelled to point out that your story summary on your author page, http://www.twilighted.net/viewuser.php?uid=7846 needs a slight tweak:

"...the readers got to see one side of the Cullen's. What about the other. Enjoy the Cullen's like you've never seen them before..."

Cullens is not possessive in either of those instances. It's "Cullens" not "Cullen's." No apostrophe. I know, I know, it's a tiny mechanical detail, but details like that separate the great writers from the marginally competent. You clearly are far more than marginally competent. It's a shame to inadvertently create a poor first impression by misusing punctuation.

And "lustful" is spelled with only one "l" but perhaps that was deliberate on your part?

I just came across your story, and it is delightful. It's refreshing to read through Alice's POV, and you've captured the dynamic between her and the other Cullens, particularly Edward, nicely. Bits like this really make your writing shine:

"If he hadn’t had a soul, then he would be some dark, lifeless thing that cared about nobody and nothing—well, come to think of it, that does sound like him on one of his moody days…"

I'm looking forward to your next chapter!

I really loved the movie, and I am really enjoying your story. You are an excellent writer, very meticulous in your use of detail, and extremely adept at capturing the essence of SM's characters, particularly Edward. That you take care to use correct spelling and have an excellent command of proper grammar aren't lost on me either--these are "details" that have ruined many an otherwise good piece of fanfiction for me.  I'm looking forward with great anticipation to your next chapter.

I have no idea how you managed to write such a powerful chapter, It must have been emotionally draining for you; it certainly was emotionally draining to read.

Brilliantly done. The ending though is cruel to us all, even though we know what happens next. That final sentence, "I am alone," jeeze, woman, have pity on your readers.

What a wonderful writer you are.

Another fantastic chapter! You're doing such a wonderful job of filling in all the crucial yet up until now invisible moments, the interactions between the wolf pack, the Cullens, and especially Edward's perception of it all.

This is utterly marvelous:

And yet now, although I would never have admitted it to Bella, I felt a stab of loss for the human things that had been a part of the girl I love.  For the endless brown eyes that had been all I could see when I ran away the first time I met her.  For the face that had haunted me, and yet held me aloft, during six months of miserable exile.  For skin that had felt warm and fragile beneath my hands, blushing heat as I stroked my fingers down her face.  For the heartbeat that had filled my world each night.  And even the scent, the burning scent that meant she was alive, and with me.

My love for Bella would never change.  She would never change - regardless of how the venom altered her, she was the same person inside.  But, for a moment, I felt a whisper of sadness for the human girl that I would never quite see again.

Renesmee made a small, contented noise in the back of her throat, and I glanced down quickly, realizing the bottle was empty.  I placed the bottle on a shelf as she watched me with her eyes. Her brown, luminous eyes.  And suddenly the world flipped over, and I realized Bella's humanity was not lost, never had been lost, and never would be.  I held it cradled in my arms.

This is the first time I've read what has always seemed to me to be necessary--a moment where Edward reflects on the very natural sadness of losing the physcial elements of Bella he'd come to love. Of course he still loves her, but her eyes, skin, her fragile human body he did treasure and it seems utterly logical that he would have a moment of poignant farewell to it all. Thank you for creating that!

I just got around to reading this, and I like it for so many reasons. You capture Carlisle, Edward and Bella so well. You paint a realistic, engaging scenario. Most of all though, you take the reader through humor (the bees are out to get Bella and Bambi is scared of her) to a very powerful philosophical point:

I had thought that one of my responsibilities as a father was shouldering their guilt. But now Bella had made me reconsider. I could ask God’s forgiveness for initiating a chain of events which led to the deaths of so many of his children, of course. But I could not take the individual guilt off of their soul and onto mine. All I could do for them was to pray to God that he would be merciful.

Years ago, I had a discussion about this very topic with my own mother. I think that all too many parents confuse caring about their adult children's choices with being responsible for those choices. Carlisle's got it right; you, my dear, are a brilliant writer for presenting it so eloquently through him.

Your writing is such fun to read because it doesn't just entertain (which it does extremely well), it makes the reader think.

What a perfect ending for this story. I especially liked this section:

Time moves differently when you have eternity before you. The urgency to arrive at the next “whatever” is removed. You have the luxury of time to process your thoughts and concerns in your leisure, but that is not always the healthiest thing to do. Too much time can send you spiraling to the bottom of a whirlpool. Carlisle understood this. He had given me four days of solitude to contemplate my situation, now it was time to move on or risk languishing in the past.

We stood there together in the meadow for hours as I sobbed tearlessly in my grief and came to grips with what I must do. He held me as a father would hold his child when confronted with an unimaginable burden, but then he did what a father also does; he pushed me away from his embrace and made me face what he knew I alone must do.

The passage of time for Edward must have been excruciating; to have absolutely no respite from every minute of one's self-torturous thoughts. You combined that with the essence of Carlisle's parenting of Edward in a beautiful, evocative way.

The whole story was a great pleasure to read. I'm sad it's done, but delighted to see that you have plans for another one.

Fantastic chapter. Your work really rings true to SM's characters, and you manage to weave her work with your own unique interpretation of Edwards POV seamlessly. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Brilliant as always. You presented a crucial insight into Edward with this:

"I had no future without Bella. The feeling of instinctive terror that surged through me at the potential threat the wolves presented was more powerful than any other biological tendency my impermeable body had.  It was as though the trauma of thinking she was dead had evolved me to have enough survival instincts for both of us.  Her continued existence was essential to mine."

People (usually non-fans) who write Edward off as a control freak, or are  concerned about how much he seems to restrain and manipulate Bella's relationship with Jacob don't get what you managed to poignantly describe: Her safety is just as much a matter of life and death for Edward as for Bella herself.

Beautiful capturing of the character's motivation; I applaud you!

One little detail troubles me (other than the italics formatting problem about 9 paragraphs from the start of the chapter, where Charlie is thinking about talking to Billy)...There are no direct flights from Seattle to Jacksonville. There is always a stop, usually in Atlanta, regardless of airline. The total flight time alone is over 8 hours, plus any layover. It takes close to 5 hours to reach Atlanta. So "three hour flight" doesn't do it.  Just saying... ;-)

I absolutely love your insight into Renee and her view of Edward and Bella. I wished SM had given us more of the visit to Jacksonville and am delighted with your depiction of it.

In my opinion, you provide one of the best, most consistent interpretations of Edward's POV on the 'net. I'm eagerly awaiting your next chapter.

Lovely continuation of the story. I particularly liked the way you depicted Edward wrestling with his physical attraction to Bella. That scene in the novel bothered me a little, because he couldn't be oblivious to the effect he had upon her, and rolling about with her on that bed was just begging for trouble. As you wrote it, it made much more sense (the tug of war between desire and caution was clear).

I don't know how you manage to balance a job, a child and an illness, but please take care of yourself! I hope that all goes well with your surgery and you have a complete, speedy recovery.

Another fine chapter in a very engaging tale. As usual you nailed Edward's POV flawlessly. The more I read Edward's perspective upon  the deep bond between him and Bella, the more frustrated I am by Bella's teenage obtuseness. And the more annoyed I am that SM didn't cut Jacob loose from them, and instead guarateed he'd be in their lives forever. But that's not part of Eclipse, thank goodness.

One question: Why would Carlisle give Bella a "mild sedative?" Wouldn't an analgesic (i.e. a pain killer) be more appropriate? Just wondering.

Regarding your request for reviews...I am breaking my own rule now, which is to never review upon demand (or upon begging, as the case may be). I'm quirky that way; I prefer not to be manipulated or guilted into reviewing. Bribing with chapter previews doesn't work on me either. ;-)

You are an excellent writer, and you enjoy the process, right? So don't worry when you don't get a lot of reviews. Seriously. Figure that for every review you get, at least ten other people are reading and enjoying, they just don't review.

If we depend upon the praise of others to motivate us, we'll end up doing very little that is really worthwhile in life.

I look forward eagerly to the next chapter of this story.

You've managed to do something very few fanfic authors can do: Create extremely well written scenes that are highly erotic yet still tasteful and true to the characters. Your concept of Edward's POV meshes beautifully with what we were given in SM's novels, and I am certain this was no easy feat to accomplish. I'm very impressed. I also really enjoyed the detail you put into the wedding (something I felt was sadly lacking in the original novel). Your story is an exceptional piece of work; I'm very glad I happened across it.